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Are you also going to make a story about Diamond Tiara?
Silv needs to chill. It's not healthy for a child to hate themselves so much, whatever they're feeling guilty about.
If this were real life and not a fictional show about colourful ponies I'd recommend therapy, but something tells me Hasbro is never gonna tackle the thorny issue of young trauma....
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Probably not.
I dunno, this story, the words she spoke, even in anger seemed too cluttered. Calling herself so many names without context, biting her lip till it bled and not acknowledging it (it hurts a lot) and the level of self blame without actually blaming the one responsible seems too mature for the context of this story.
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Yeah, I was thinking about that. Tone's a little too heavy for what she and DT do in the show. But hey ho, it's an adaptation – a what-if. A more mature, more grounded Silver Spoon faces years of guilt via the usual self-therapies, imaginary friend and all. Thanks for commenting your thoughts. I appreciate it.
Edit: Just a nitpick, but about the lip – who says she didn't acknowledge it? You're right; it hurts. She grimaces. She cries.
I understand what you were trying to do with this story, and I think the premise had potential, but the execution just felt a bit odd. I agree with the other commenters that Silver Spoon's dialogue felt very unfitting. She doesn't come across as a child; she feels like a more mature pony with some serious emotional issues, which doesn't really fit the Silver spoon we know from the show.