Tirek has come to Canterlot, the princesses have fled, chaos runs amok, Moondancer makes a decision.
Entry to the Thousand Words Story Contest II. Drama category.
Tirek has come to Canterlot, the princesses have fled, chaos runs amok, Moondancer makes a decision.
Entry to the Thousand Words Story Contest II. Drama category.
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A wonderfully crushing sense of nihilism here. Bravo.
Moondancer's sacrifice was remembered by Tirek for about 30 minutes, and no one else
I can only hope she lives and learns. Her tale is sad and woven with depression. Perhaps this act of darkness of uplift her into the light...
Excellently written to make me me feel for her and relate on a deeper level.
Gotta respect those last stand types
Good choice on only giving her two shots, but wish the interaction went in a bit longer.
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oof yeah, sucks to be her as well as anypony comparing themselves to pre-alicorn Twilight in any way!
yeah that has gotta suck extra
yay, always love adding Prench insults to my vocabulary
oof, that’s not very rubbery pony cartoon violence!
oof! Moondancer’s quite a mare, going hoof to hoof with Tirek as a “no one”. and all this to know that after this, Tirek is to be defeated by the Twilight that Moondancer was ruminating on… poor Moondancer!
love this could-have-been-just-offscreen scene, and study of the depth that Moondancer can have as a character. all the other Twilight Sparkle clones referenced in
all ended up mattering in a way that Moondancer did not, just twisting the knife of her existential angst here. it would be great to see more stories do her justice like this, giving her the center stage and character study she deserves. thank you for writing!
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Thanks for the in depth comment as always Bicyclette! Getting these always feels like it's own little reward just for participating! I know it must be draining to put these up for so many stories so I'm always happy to see them show up on my entries.
Nice work with both the echo of Twilight confronting Nightmare Moon and Moondancer’s blend of courage and utter resignation. The ending falters, though. For one, Tirek’s rampage predated Starlight; there’s no reason for Moondancer to think of her. For another, it’s just a weird final thought. Of all the things to cross Moondancer’s mind in her last moments, that one comes out of left field. Barely any thematic connection to her self-loathing throughout the story; it just feels like you forced a callback to the title.
Again, a powerful scene for the most part, but you stumbled at the finish line. Still, thank you for it.