Deal with a Hellhound

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dirty little secret

dirty little secret #1 · Apr 8th, 2023 · 3 · 2 ·

This is your official review for the Furry Foray Festival Contest!

I've tried to be as objective as possible, but of course there are limits. I've tried to avoid being biased or arbitrary as much as I can, and hopefully I've succeeded at least somewhat. The full, final results will be announced on May 4th, and winners will be contacted shortly afterward to ask how they would like to accept their prizes. When readings these comments, please keep in mind that I know I'm often overly critical -- to the point where I can always find nitpicks even with the greatest works of literature. So don't take anything personally!

Notes:
- Loona's marehood Uh... Loona isn't a mare, though...
- 50 years seems like a lot just for one 'stress relief session'...
- For that matter, it seems hard to believe that Gingersnap's intel is worth so much, either.
- Interesting to see somepony who's a worthy target of Loona's bitchiness.
- Decent depiction of Loona, and pretty good justification for futa-Loona, both the means and the reason.
- Though Loona seems to be a lot more magical as she's depicted here than in her source material.
- Could have used more undressing/body descriptions.
- Gingersnap took her top off ... for almost no reason.

Scores:
Provocativeness: 55
Progression: 60
Payoff: 58
Pacing: 80
Personality: 40
Prose: 61
Total: 354
For more information on what these scores mean, see the scoring rubric.

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