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Alphamon_Ouryuken


"I am the Aloof Hermit, the Lord of the Empty Seat. I am the Alpha and the Omega"

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Twilight calls her friends over to help her with a spell that with temporarily enable them to use each-others attribute's, such as their wing's, magic, etc. However, when focusing on her spell, Spike trip's into the middle of the spell, causing it to go haywire! Once the smoke clears...the Main Six find themselves...transformed...

Special thanks to Coda Crescendo for editing this story!

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Comments ( 143 )

An apostrophe does not mean "oh shit, here come's an s!" :ajbemused:

You know, as a mature story or at least with a few teasing fragment here and there this story can be a small gem on this site, otherwise only the comical part and the absurdity of events can give this story the extra push it need to be really noted among many

Just my opinion:pinkiehappy:

I am sure Spike agree:moustache:

I'm interested into this story,
LETS SEE WHAT HAPPENS!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

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I'm certain this is one spell Spike is happy Twilight messed up

Comment posted by TeddyUrsa deleted Dec 24th, 2013

author please if you will ON TO THE NEXT ONE

Very interesting indeed...

Is this related to the new how to train your dragons 2?

>sees title
>sees cover art
>sees Romance tag
>ohshitI'vebeenwaitingforthis.jpeg
Do I even need to go on?! :raritystarry:

Lovely premise, sire. Could use some... touching up from editors though. The asterisks simply must go and those other errors... oh, dreadful! :raritycry:

Comment posted by Infinite Carnage deleted Dec 24th, 2013

nice :pinkiehappy:
Q: will Spike be chasing the other girls now too? :trollestia::moustache:

3675649 That remains to be seen....

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or will the girls start to see Spike as a suitable mate now that they are dragons and fight over him? :yay: there is so much potential in this fic :raritystarry:

No offense, but I suggest finding someone proofread your story before you post your chapters. While you've got a nice concept, the unnecessary apostrophes everywhere (and some missing where they should be!) are very distracting. Also, there are already a few "mane 6 change into dragons" stories, so be sure that you have a good original take on the concept.

Going to lay off rating this for now, wanna see how the next chapters turns out.
But I'm watching you... :trixieshiftleft:

First I'd like to say you need a proofreader and maybe an editor, but aside from thT this hast he potential to become an absolutely amazing fic with some interesting qualities :pinkiesmile:

Dragons, effects, gets, and eyes do not need apostrophes before the s.

This could be interesting because honestly there aren't enough Mane 6 turn into dragon fics. Something I've always found surprising actually now that I think on it. Anyway, nice story.

I concur on the proof reader and editor part.

Also your pacing seems a little rushef and I'm not really feeling the voice of the characters in their dialogue.

For example "alright you proved your masculinity" line not only seems like a not quite dry joke it also does not really make sense as a comment from apple jack, maybe discord or spike but not applejack.

Your and You're are two completely different words.
I also noticed that you failed to move to a new line for a new speaker at least once.

Nice premise, but as others have said, you REALLY need to sort those apostrophes out.

3675041 It doesn't seem like it.

Proofreader definitely needed. That being said, it looks like you cleaned up a lot of the mistakes before I read this. Unicorn, dragon, and pegasus are not capitalized.

Good concept, lots of promise, time to see how it plays out.

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Technically "Pegasus" is the name of a specific winged horse, so it should be capitalized.

3678781 Only if it is the specific winged horse, when used as a species it isn't.

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Apparently you don't understand how adjectives or speciation work.

"Earth pony" -> "pony of Earth"

"Pegasus pony" -> "pony of Pegasus"

It's being used to name the lineage of the winged horses, not their species. Their species is "pony", and their forefather is Pegasus.

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maybe he is experimenting with an advanced warning system

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Only if it is the specific winged horse, when used as a species it isn't.

...the species is a bunch of winged horses...

3678952

Subspecies. They can breed with other pony variants, although I don't know why they'd want to breed with sludge ponies.

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Aww... Is da widdwe psychwopaff angwy?

decent start with a few grammatical errors
lets see where this goes

Nothing against Teen rating but this would be a decent start to a clopfic. It takes time for Twilight to figure out how to reverse the spell but before she does the Mane 6 all end up going into heat. Spike inevitably ends up breeding all of them and atleast some end up gravid. Would be better with an aged up Spike if the Mane 6 as dragons are exactly like the coverart.

3678900>>3678952 Straight from an article

Hasbro approved the show with Faust as Executive Producer[16] and asked her to complete the pitch bible. In order to do so, Faust brought in Martin Ansolobehere and Paul Rudish, who had worked on other animated shows with her. Faust credits Rudish for the inspiration of the pegasus ponies controlling the weather in Equestria,

Notice the uncapped pegasus ponies part.

The show follows a studious unicorn pony named Twilight Sparkle as her mentor Princess Celestia guides her to learn about friendship in the town of Ponyville.

I will note that there is no example for earth ponies in this particular piece as they're simply listed as ponies. :moustache:

Danger Prone Spike does it again!!!

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Straight from an article

Way to cite your sources, braski.

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Barring the incredible amount of laziness you just displayed, lemme tell you why your sources are bad:

1. Most of the sources are irrelevant. For example, this source doesn't even mention Pegasus ponies, and it's the very first one after the References anchor.

2. Your sources contradict you. This link is the second link after the References anchor. Ctrl+F "Pegasus", and you will find this paragraph:

My Little Ponies come in many forms: Newborns, which are, confusingly, bigger than traditional grown-up ponies and come with dummies, nappies etc; squishy So Soft ponies, Pegasus ponies (with wings), Bride ponies... There is a very long list and it is because of the variety of ponies available that they have become such collector's items.

3. Even the people, who should know the answer, aren't consistent. Compare this and this. The first is an interview with Faust, and the second is a post from her twitter account. Ctrl+f "Pegasus" if you're having trouble.

In conclusion, I hope you've learned you can't just assume you're correct, then throw the book at someone. You have to actually read the book first.

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I agree on both counts.

Find something interesting to do with mane six now dragons, but also I really would like there to be more mane six are now dragons fics.

Ok so I'm not the best speller.
Eric you bearly got out of language arts.
Pff what you talking about?!
your spelling is so bad that autocorrect isn't saving you.
:ajbemused: fine im a horrible speller, but i kind-of enjoyed it?fc09.deviantart.net/fs70/i/2011/168/b/9/rainbow_dash_shrug_by_dropletx1-d3j6g5i.png
But this is technically bias since dragons are 3 in top 10 mythical beast list. So Jeb you get to review this!
its kinda good? Sure!:raritywink::applejackconfused:

Riz

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Who's the ship ?

3679769 The main source was the Wikipedia page and if you knew how most large companies work with Wikipedia you would be aware that they normally hire someone to do the pages related to their content with incredible, painstaking accuracy. Hence the 136 sources and the page written like a professional research paper, and is okayed by a Hasbro employ most likely.

Here a direct reference to the subject of capitalization for common names of plants and animals.

Binomial nomenclature is, of course, also used for animals, including the singularly curious one designated as Homo sapiens. However, as in the case of plant names, animal names are not capitalized (“I spotted a red-tailed hawk,” not “I spotted a Red-Tailed Hawk”), except when an element of the name is a proper noun, as in “Steller’s jay” and “Siberian tiger.”

Animal breeds, unlike types of produce and plant cultivars, are given no special treatment: Your cocker spaniel is special, of course, but its breed name merits no capitalization. However, many names of breeds of dogs and cats are exceptions, such as those of the German shepherd, the Siamese cat, and the Thoroughbred horse. The preponderance of such examples may be the cause of confusion about capitalization of animal names.

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fyi, wikipedia is not accepted as a credible source by any respectable institution

3680637 That isn't even slightly true, it normally goes from professor to professor and depends on the rank of the page as many pages on Wikipedia now require very high almost moderation level of ranking to edit and require direct sourcing to be approved. Back when Wikipedia was first created and the page editing feature allowed sad little trolls to try and fuck with shit, that would have been true. Of course, since this isn't a institutional issue that's really quite irrelevant.

Comment posted by the parasprite deleted Dec 25th, 2013

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sauce

Wikipedia founder Jimmy Wales is quite clear about the uses of Wikipedia. Asked, "Do you think students and researchers should cite Wikipedia? during an interview with Business Week in 2005, he replied, "No, I don't think people should cite it, and I don't think people should cite Britannica, either... People shouldn't be citing encyclopedias in the first place. Wikipedia and other encyclopedias should...give good, solid background information to inform your studies for a deeper level."

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Wikipedia itself is strong on self-assessment. Encyclopedia editors address accuracy in the entry Reliability of Wikipedia, compiling the results of international third-party assessments across a variety of disciplines. The consensus: the encyclopedia is as accurate as other encyclopedias. And as Cathy Davidson, Professor of Interdisciplinary Studies at Duke University, points out in We Can't Ignore the Influence of Digital Technologies (Chronicle of Higher Education, March 23, 2007), unlike comparable print sources, Wikipedia errors can be corrected and often are in a matter of hours after publication.

While accuracy may not be Wikipedia's major deterrent, the collaborative nature of the wiki invites greater scrutiny and analysis. Here, again, Wikipedia helps users navigate the perils, pitfalls, and strengths of open, collaborative scholarship. Researching with Wikipedia points out that few articles are of encyclopedic quality when they first appear—they may be unbalanced, biased, and incomplete, and it takes time for contributors to find consensus. Wikipedia for Academic Use advises users to explore whether articles represent widespread norms or minority viewpoints. Each of Wikipedia's own articles fostering critical thinking includes links to further analysis and comment on the encyclopedia's value and utility.

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Wikipedia is a tertiary source, a summary of information from disparate primary and secondary sources. Original research is not necessarily reputable, so it must be evaluated for accuracy and bias. Tertiary resources are summaries, which cannot reliably be used to judge the accuracy and biases of original research.

Wikipedia is not a credible source.

Moving on...

However, as in the case of plant names, animal names are not capitalized (“I spotted a red-tailed hawk,” not “I spotted a Red-Tailed Hawk”), except when an element of the name is a proper noun, as in “Steller’s jay” and “Siberian tiger.”

You realize this supports "Pegasus" being capitalized, right? "Pegasus" is a proper noun.

Again, you need to read your sources before you claim they support your argument.

Will the mane 6 stay the same as they are now or will they grow and change into dragons around their age group?

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