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Shakespearicles

Shakespearicles #1 · Sep 17th, 2022 · 1 · ·

You just came all over two beautiful girls like a damn garden hose.

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dirty little secret #2 · Jan 25th, 2023 · · ·

Underrated story!

I liked how you kept an element of realism throughout it. And the partner-swapping was extremely hot. There were a few cliches, though, like the one Shakes pointed out. And a few places where a contraction or two would have really helped the dialog sound more natural.

Revel Montaro #3 · Jan 25th, 2023 · 1 · ·

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Thanks for the critique and for commenting. Thank you.

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