Powdered Toast Man
Joined 17th Sep, 2012 ·
Offline
Also LikedSimilarAuthor
- The PatioHeater · 17k words · 47 8 · 4.1k views
- Cathyclop · 1.7k words · 36 26 · 2.2k views
- Nicolasmandias · 5.2k words · 58 5 · 2.8k views
- ipwnlocks · 2.5k words · 53 37 · 6.2k views
- Theorangefox · 8.6k words · 131 24 · 15k views
- Bronystories · 7.3k words · 136 25 · 6.4k views
- Monstrosity · 2.5k words · 95 24 · 5.5k views
- DrySpell · 3.7k words · 51 25 · 966 views
Featured In1
Stats
Page generated in 0.177 seconds
Total duration
1,004 users online
327,293 hits today, 2,205,040 yesterday
FIMFiction
My Little Pony: Friendship is Magic Fanfiction
Designed and coded by knighty & Xaquseg - © 2011-2024
Follow & Support Us
Support us
SubStar
Chat!
Discord
Follow us
Twitter
MLP: Friendship is Magic® - © 2024 Hasbro Inc.®
Fimfiction is in no way affiliated with or endorsed by Hasbro Inc.®
All righty, then.
cdn.uproxx.com/wp-content/uploads/2012/08/anchorman-well-that-escalated-quickly.jpg
In all seriousness, this story was rather boring to me and the secret was pretty predictable and rehashed. The secret could've worked if Applejack had a dick or something that she's kept as a secret from her older brother and younger sister. I don't know how that would've worked, but that would be a BIG surprise indeed. This is just a boring story all around to me.
How could it be a secret if she gets pregnant
1292550
i2.kym-cdn.com/entries/icons/original/000/007/786/why-not-meme.jpg
When I saw the comparison to a young human's arm, I wondered why the author would include a comparison to something that doesn't exist in their world. Then I imagined that a human is watching them do this and is performing the narration, because we don't see any of their thoughts during the story.
Hey, a dark secret. I guess I'll just read-
i.imgur.com/3u5AL.png
WHOAH NELLY! That was quick. Missed the damn sex tag.
This was hot, although disposable...
I don't know. To be honest, it is so fast and gets resolved so quickly that I don't like it that much.
You're getting a lot of downvotes for content (incest-- pretty kinky for sure), but the writing seems on par with all other kinds of stories technical-wise.
I guess I won't vote this up (since I didn't like it), but I feel like this doesn't deserve the troll-fic style hate.
Liked for the wincest.
Look guys, there's is an incest tag. If you don't like incest, don't read it. Honestly, it isn't my thing either. I didn't write it for myself. I don't think my writing deserves to be down voted because you don't approve of content you were warned of.
Oh really now? Btw great describing details the fall scene was perfect. And then there was incest....
WOW... That shit went 0 to60 in a second and was over fast... thank God I skimmed 2/3 of that
i0.kym-cdn.com/photos/images/original/000/172/461/1315608252001.gif
MORE incest? Really? As if this website didn't have enough of it
Oh well, at least it isn't Twilight and Shining Armor for the 1000th time.....it's Applejack and Big Mac for the 1000th time.
Won't rate because it obviously doesn't appeal to me, but I'll still give it a sick Pinkie Pie:
1293944
Why write about something that you don't like? Seems silly to me.
1294074
A friend who likes my writing told me he'd like to see it. So I said "lol, kay!" and wrote it. *shrug*
The predictableness makes this boring. It should of been something hilarious
denver.mylittlefacewhen.com/media/f/img/mlfw5433-43782_-_animated_didnt_read_lol_Hubble_pinkie_pie.gif
1292550 and yet here you are
1292531 good point
1294074
I dunno, while TwiArmor is a bit overdone, there are good instances of it - I remember one with enough subtle intricate details to do afreudian literary analysis of(to be fair, the author was an established writer outside of this community).
Also, adventures of a foal sitter, but holy crap that was disturbing - Bronystorys writes amazing horror clop even without pedofoalia and scatophilia - if you want to see a perfect example of correctly writing a graphic horror story(aka actual horror and not shock like Cupcakes or Sweet Apple Massacre), go look up 120 days of Blueblood.
wait, how did i go from incest to terror clop
1292531>>1295167
Getting pregnant requires certain perimeters aside from having sex. It has to be at the appropriate time.
I liked it ^_^ although i should have read the description first, and the sex tag, i really thought it was a alcohol thing. lol
1295348
That's certainly a possibility for a future, similar but un-sex related story...
*sees sex tag and incest warning*
dick:HEY CLICK ON THIS!!!!
me:ok
*reads*
OH GOD NO FUCK YOU DICK
ok ok AS AN FAN OF CLOP I CAN STAND EVEN THIS AND YOU GOOD SIR IS MEGUSTA(also a fav and like)i1124.photobucket.com/albums/l576/d7771/megusta.gif
1295692>>1295744
static.fjcdn.com/pictures/What+is+this+I+don+t+even_1ebef1_3615357.jpg
It kind of seemed like you were writing to a prompt.
*Write a story that is 1000+ words
*Have a sex scene
*Include secrets
As of now you only included the bare bones; add a little meat and fluff, then fix it up a bit. What pairing you do isn't a problem so long as the story is good.
1295994
You can pretend she pissed in the cider barrels if it makes you happy.
almost like this, but the few grammar errors prevented me from doing so. like at the beginning somewhere, you used scald which means burn or something, when you meant to use scold. plus there was a capitalization error here and there.
1296006 *headdesks*
Oy vey.
Don't worry, I didn't rate. It was just hilariously sudden. Like I said I missed the sex tag and you can have incest in a story without sex (implied, theme, dark secret that isn't acted on)
Just not my thing. Atleast with ShinySparkle you can read way too much into things from the show.
1295772
may i ask what the pic was? because its not showing.
*clicks like* HA! Even now! ... What? It's FUNNY!
1296626
Must be your browser. It's Applejack with a mug of cider on her head and it says "Yay booze!"
1296210
I do admit to this being slightly rushed. Perhaps I'll edit it.
the irony is big mac is "getting ready"for it while speaking against it
1298440
Well, I'm not attracted to my sisters, but I'd assume one would fight such urges.
1297979
LOL HAHAHAHAA
Hmmm. S'alright. I normally wouldn't upvote. But I will, if only to try and help offset the downvotes it's getting solely for subject matter.
1306397
Yeah, I need to do a bit of editing on this one for sure.
Well that just happened.
Applejack in a drunken stupper and big mac walks in.......
drunk sex insues...?
MUST READ NOW!
Ah, AppleMac. Groundbreaking...
*sees sex tag. reads anyway*
Meh, pretty much what I expected.
Felt rushed. Lacks emotion.
*Goodguy Greg upvotes anyway*
ahhh..darn it mac. come on...hes my dude ya'know. so is braeburn but... really? im not critisizing your story though...its good but well i already said why im against it...
I like it, but it felt rushed and ended way to soon.
Perhaps a sequel could expand on this idea.
Anyway great job.
3308005 my thoughts exactly.