The months have passed since Kiniro arrived in Equestria. Life has been challenging, yet rewarding as he tries to regain his magical prowess so that, in the event of disaster or danger came to Equestria, he can stand along side his friends and his love, The Elements of Harmony. But as the days go by, Kiniro has an encounter with another guitar playing pony, who ends up knowing musical magic just like himself, but this pony's motivations are far from good. As Kiniro searches for the origin of this mysterious pony's power, he asks himself, if the mysterious pony knows the song of Ragnarok and Midgardian legend states only one before me that knew the song and perished. Could history be wrong?
This is a sequel to the story "The Guitarist" It can be read stand alone however you will be missing key elements. But I do recommend reading The Guitarist First.
OK... This definatley looks like it has a lot of potential!
It has an intriguing plot, and the formatting is really good.
One thing, though... It moves a little fast. I understand that this may be the actual purpose of it, but the beginning seemed a bit rushed. I understand that the prologue was not the focal point, but it was a very important event, and goes by to quickly.
I would expand on the intro, and just add more setting, scene, and description. This will make it longer, and give the story a more stable tone. Trust me, I know its hard to add setting, etc... but in the end its worth it. Other than expanding a little, though, this looks pretty good!
Keep up the good work! Can't wait to see where it leads!
I admit that the beginning was rushed a bit. But it draws a lot from the previous story And its meant to allude(sp?) to specific points to draw a narrative for this story. But you are right perhaps i can go back and add a bit more setting. I had to just set the story up before writers block set in.
Ho, ho, hold up.... Discord brainwashed kiniro, does he not remember it?... I can't wait to see how this will turn out
While that would be an interesting twist *takes note*. Its not Kiniro who is brainwashed. There is a subtle reference in the Guitarist that there was another who performed the song of Ragnarok prior to Kiniro. In this story that bard is given the name of Aldo. He's the one who has been brainwashed.
Author's Note. Due to some confusion, a slight alteration of prologue part 2 has been made so that the bard referenced mentions his name. Sorry about the mix up readers.
Whoa! The first story was good, but hopy crap, I did not expect it to get better in the sequel. Kudos to you man, kudos.
Anyways, follower of first story, now follower of second story, if there's anymore, expect me to be all up in that.
Dude, you are doing SO damned well with this story, hopefully you can keep this up!
Thank you thunder! I've been slowly releasing updates but mark my words this story will be completed!
Oh boy, shit just hit the fan!
Looking forward to this bro, keep it up!
Aww shiiiiiit..
Cliffhanger. Nicely played friend.
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It wont be a cliffhanger for long. Hope you've liked that last chapter.