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Foal Star


Peace for Ukraine!

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(This story takes place after season 4)

Princess Celestia has been ruling Equestria for quite some time and decides she needs a long overdue vacation. So she creates a plan to have one of her royal guards take her place, an introvert named North Star. He is a simple royal guard who simply never really did much in his life and didn't have much going for him. He was a perfect candidate as nopony would miss him, and his absence would be hidden under the guise of a "secret assignment." North Star accepts and goes through the transformation, turning into a copy of the princess in almost every way. The truth is he feels more alive as the princess and decides that he should try living a little as her. But he also has to realize anything he does will reflect back on the real Princess Celestia and, most of all, he cannot expose her absence.

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It's slightly disturbing that Celestia would take a random guard and basically turn them into a copy of herself (changes to the mind and all that)... More disturbing is the fact that he just went along with it without even going through the implications of such a change (most of all the gender change). Doing that out of pity? Well, I can understand that at least, not wanting to ruin her vacation, but... why even change somepony into her in the first place? I mean, Equestria has enough princesses to allow her to go on vacation that she wouldn't even have to look for a stand-in. It would have made more sense before Luna's return and Twilight becoming an alicorn. *shrug*

On the other hand, though? All the possible shenanigans... I can't help but wonder how our 'new' Tia will do during that year and whether or not they would want to change back at the end of it. Heck, they could technically say she is her twin and leave it at that. Certainly something I would say xD

Well, so far, I'm interested enough to keep an eye on this. Could use a bit of editing here and there, but that isn't really that big a deal. Keep up the work, dear! :)

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I mean if I spoiled whats really going on it qould kind of ruin the story....but thank you for the comment I'll keep your notes in mind.

I am very interested to see where this goes. I like the concept and how it's being pulled off thus far. Keep up the good work!

I was now quite nervous as I slowly unfurled the scroll in front of me and read it. "Dear, North Star I have a special assignment for you and only you; I am waiting in the cafe called "Sunbucks" you'll see it as you leave through the front gates of the palace you can't miss it. Meet me there during your lunch break. From Princess Celestia."

Hahaha. Sunbucks is an absolute perfect name 🤣. I might steal that name idea

She got up and skipped over behind the counter as she started to fix up another cup of coffee. Still, she then did something different, taking the cup beneath her underbelly. I could hear the hisss and the smell of something sweet emanating across the cafe'. She hoofed over the coffee with that playful smirk. "Go ahead, drink up; you should be lucky to drink pure alicorn milk."

I wonder if she uses her own milk when making cakes 🤣🤣

This is a great start. I found a couple of minor spelling errors

This is a very convoluted way to get out of doing paperwork 😅

I'm kinda iffy on the whole mental changes when he transformed but that's only a minor nitpick

Yes, this good story is in quite dire need of continuation!

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Ok, the reason I stopped updating this story was because the google doc I had that planned out the entire story was deleted off the face of the earth; plus a year ago I still have a few other stories I was finishing up. Luckily I'm getting back into my TF/TG stories and will continue this one soon. I apologize the next chapter will be out before October as I also finish up Maids of Honor.

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Yeah my old google account was hacked not fun

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Yes just I had the google doc with my plan for this story deleted but Im going to get back to it before I deploy

Whelps... that was a long wait. Certainly a surprise. :twilightsmile:

I don't know why my body had me awake at such an hour.

So the body of the Sun Alicorn has a built-in alarm clock, neat!

just go on and do your duties just let my sister's instinct guide you,

Stand-in Celestia: I am craving for a triple chocolate cake instead of a pancake. Is this normal?

"Yes, this is so relaxing! I don't understand why it's taboo for other stallions to go to a spa."

Lotus: I don't understand why Big Mac never come to use our services.
Aloe: I guess it is his family's thing? Even Applejack rarely used the coupon I occasionally put into their mail box.

excellent chapter, really wonder where this leads, he's becoming more and more of celestia

I am standing at attention in the halls of Canterlot palace looking straight at a window across from me. My name is North Star, I'm twenty-three years old. Staring at my reflection looking at my dark blue coat, with a set of gold armor, my tail was colored black, and cut short, my eyes were a bright gold, and my cutie mark a gold star on a shield. I have been a royal guard for a few years now, but I've been a nobody my entire life. Even though I've been knocked about and mostly been the one saved by Twilight and her friends. Celestia seems to like me more than most; she usually ruffles my mane when I'm posted at her door or gives me some of her cake when she doesn't want to finish it. She talks to me a lot, maybe because I don't have any friends of my own. I have a routine I stick to, wake up, eat breakfast, mostly a hardboiled egg and some coffee, polish my armor, go to the palace, do my job, eat a dandelion sandwich for lunch with extra mustard, go home and workout, take a shower, read some Daring Do, eat dinner which was usually whatever is in my fridge, then go to sleep by ten. I haven't broken from this routine in over two years. Everything seemed to be as expected this particular morning and my inner clock struck like a chime. I took off going down the hall on my usual patrol going around the castle's inner halls. When down the aisles, one of the royal guards came running towards me. He was a white-coated pegasus with a blue mane and eyes, one of the typical macho pegasi who probably has a kid or two saluted me. "Sir Star, I have special orders for you."

There's something called paragraph, maybe you should try it

Comment posted by Poparakelis deleted Dec 29th, 2023
Comment posted by Poparakelis deleted Dec 29th, 2023
Comment posted by Poparakelis deleted Dec 29th, 2023

I then tried to finish the last cupcake on my platter at least, but as I took a bite, I groaned, feeling myself collapse, and raised a white flag in defeat before completely blacking out.

Looks like as perfect as the spell was, it still couldn't duplicate Celestia's cake gluttony trait.

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