Trying to make up for lost time. DM me for edits
Rainbow Dash doesn't know how to cook.
I already submitted a fic to the AppleDash Warm and Fuzzy Feelings Event, but I wanted to write another one, so I asked for a prompt, and I got "Skillet." This is the result. This was also a speedwrite, done all in 1 hour, plus 15 minutes to edit.
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As the person who gave the prompt, I'm so happy and surprised to see how well it turned out! I thoroughly enjoyed this little piece, and I am very impressed with the quality you managed to create in 1 hour. Definitely will give a reread and a more thorough comment, but it was exquisite, to say the least. Good job!
Really enjoyed this one. Short, sweet and funny all wrapped up into one neat package!
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So I said I'd be back. I'm back.
Once again, I loved how you wrote a story this good in 1 hour and 15 minutes. I loved the characterization of the characters; the proud and confident yet soft pegasus called Rainbow Dash and the brutally honest yet caring Applejack. The exchange between the two was flawless; it obviously showed that this story was meant to be a romantic comedy story.
The events in the story are quite nice, too; it tells the reader that this is a relaxing Slice-of-Life story, and also subconsciously tells that this is post-Season 9.
All in all, it's a well-rounded story; good plot, solid characterization, and entertaining conversations! Good job!
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Danke! Danke! I'm glad you enjoyed it, and thanks for the prompt, as well as timing me.
I really try and get characters and their personalities as accurate as I can, including speech patterns and accents and whatnot, and though these two are some of the easiest characters to get right, I still pride myself in getting it right, so I'm glad you think so.
In all my stories, I love to leave in little clues that tell you where exactly in the timeline we're supposed to be, though usually I do this by mentioning Twilight and where she's at in life.
This little peek into Applejack and Rainbow's married life was an enjoyable read. As SunlightRays stated, you characterized Applejack and Dash very well, and the snapshot of their new everyday life as a hero was amusing. Overall, you made great use of an approximate hour and 1,600 words. Nice work. :)
Be careful , or you will end up like this again:
♫ A true, true friend helps a friend in need ♫
Nice story!
I enjoyed reading it.
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What's this? Your story is evolving! Oh wait it's just a review.
Hey, no need to call that a monster. Considering the prompt 'breakfast' is a fitting name too.
Though, given the nature of the beast it's probably best for Winona-chow.