Trapped inside by a freak snowstorm, Applejack discovers a link to her parents hidden at the bottom of a buried chest. Driven by the desire to connect with her mom, her life becomes dominated by the urge to keep digging. Will Rainbow Dash be able to snap her out of it before she digs herself in too deep?
My contribution to the proud and storied lineage of ponyfics where Applejack digs a hole. Also for the Appledash Warm and Fuzzy Feelings contest!
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A really good heartwarming story and an excellent one for keeping the tension up in the background while highlighting/drawing out the other emotions you wanted, a pretty goode opne shot
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Okay, so, I've been thinking about this a couple of minutes now. Let it all sink in and all that. The story is great, it really is. Characters are spot-on, pacing is great, storyline is fantastic.
But.
And I do somewhat struggle with how to best express this 'but'. It's the ending, it just... it feels... too abrupt? I think that's it. It feels to abrupt. Like there's a paragraph or two missing. I get that Dinky's and Ditzi's reunion isn't necessary for the story. It's focused on the scavenger hunt. And we were following Dash more than AJ, so I suppose it could've been a little bit jarring to suddenly switch to AJs introspection or something like that. But you've clearly demonstrated talent in expressing her emotions without need for her thoughts being spelled out. In this ending, however, it feels like this is somehow... missing. Or too short. After all this effort... I mean, they both basically drove themselves into the ground with this... she just 'gives up' or however you want to put this. She relents. I don't mind that, really, but I want to know why, how, what's going on with her, in her. And I don't feel like I got that. I leaves me a little bit dissatisfied, wanting more.
However, the ending, despite my miserable attempts at expression myself, doesn't fall flat entirely and it doesn't take away from the rest of the story being amazing.
Thank you.