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Neutral Boy


First time of writing my own stories on here since the first episode of my little pony friendship is magic.

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The Succubus Equestrian Pony Kingdom went on a brink of collapse, betrayed by the armies of Vampires, Werewolf Lycans, Kitsunes, Minotaurs, Gryphons, Zebras, Caribou, Changelings, Dragons, and the others. Preventing a possible extinction, the Council has chosen some of the Succubi members including the Princesses to safety as the Light and Dark Mage transport the members somewhere more hidden and promising to protect them. 1500 years have passed after they teleport to safety, the remaining Succubi began to rebuild their Kingdom. That is until they were discovered by some human agents, but they offer an exchange program plan and repopulate solution. Since then, a graduate boy is relocated to another place, where he has to deal with a lot of sexy Succubi living in his new home and a private Kingdom Academy.

Note for extra tags; Death, adventure, crossover, and possible harem/herd cause why not.

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Comments ( 17 )

Succubi when referring to more than one Succubus.

World War II Erwin Rommel he may fought for the Germans but he's one hell of a Field Marshal

Ehh pacing but not bad

'You know, if I ever do have a chance for a 50-50 pick of a one time only deal on a monster college or a human college with different rules, I'd choose this monster college instead. Although, if I do ever get into a pickle without any back up support, tell my lovely family and my sibling that I have done the impossible mission of my lifetime. Fighting to protect my balls and being chased down by the hungry herd of Succubus. Hopefully it doesn't come to this in a long while.'

This is ‘Rosario Vampire’ material. Also, the phrase back up is in reality one word on dictionaries. It is jointed as ‘backup’. After your ‘Hopefully’ there is supposed to be a slight paused.

'You know, if I ever do have a chance for a 50-50 pick of a one time only deal on a monster college or a human college with different rules, I'd choose this monster college instead. Although, if I do ever get into a pickle without any backup support, tell my lovely family and my sibling that I have done the impossible mission of my lifetime. Fighting to protect my balls and being chased down by the hungry herd of Succubus. Hopefully, it doesn't come to this in a long while.'

It will be death by snus snu.

nice work its not to bad:twilightsmile:

Not a bad story but you could do to spend some time editting. A lot of little word choices or spelling errors that broke up the flow of the story.

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agreed do you need a editor?

I look forward to the next chapter!

Seems like a very interesting story, never read one where they (Succubi) weren't so malevolent. There are a couple typos here and there, and you might want to fix them. Though, I really do look forward to the next chapter as the idea you have really interests me and I can't wait to see what you'll do next. Keep up the great work and don't let little typo callouts bring you down, have a great day!

(Also, have you read "Chris' Batty Family" and do you wish it would get updated soon?

This story has potential it's cool that the succubus aren't like sex crazy and are chiled Can't wait for the next chapter

I'm looking forward to the next chapter.

Is this going to continue? Also weren’t there 5 at his door? And, are there also females at the college?

Can’t wait for the next chapter

I’d love it if you could start creating more chapters for this story if that is ok?

You still gonna make more chapters?

Hey how many and which mlp characters are in the story?

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