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Yesh I am cool!

Comments ( 44 )

Liking it! saw a few spelling errors, but anyway nice story!Only one thing i dislike: i hoped for something like dash+soarin and now i found another dash+mac...D:

Hmm tracking this.
though I do have a question why do you keep repeating the words an old friend every once in awhile in this chapter:rainbowhuh:

Do not ask people to be gentle. It invites them to be as harsh as possible. Even moreso when you say it is your first and are asking them that.

A few errors, but I like it! :pinkiehappy:

damn soarin whats wrong with you:ajsleepy:

i like your fic man i hope you continue :moustache:

Don't judge it too quickly my friend, the story has yet to near it end!

That is a new one... Im gonna start using that "Reading Between the Cracks"

And AJ is Batting for the wrong team.

Oh and as a side note: dont use slang in your writing, while saying "i was so jelly" on a text message is fine, you should avoid using it when writing a story.

1223660 Yeah sorry about that, I just thought that Rainbow Dash might use slang in her thoughts, but I'll keep that in mind for part 3 +.

Thank you for the update :pinkiehappy:

1410492 no problamo, I'm hoping to get the stories up faster than normal pace.

Nice ending?
JFK I love it :D
10 happy pinkies for you :pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy:
To bad you killed Dashie though :fluttershyouch:

To kill Rainbow Dash is a sin against Bronyism :fluttercry:

the fuck? that ending didnt make any sense. it was confusing and didnt relate to the story at all. :rainbowhuh:

sorry but im gonna have to switch my thumbs up, to a thumbs down.

O_o ok I'll roll with that, I guess...:rainbowderp:

Im not good at wrapping up stories, but I guess it has a moral, treat your lover how you want to be treated, or face the rest of your days alone, I guess everything broke down for her, she chose to end her life.And Pinkie, well you can decide what happened to her. 1434741 1426617 1426085 1423063 I'm sorry and I love RD too but it's less cheesier to had a sad ending, plus no ones gonna take it to heart.Im even going to name my future child after her! 1422549

I take every RD story to heart. :fluttercry:
Wait a minute... The story says incomplete... :rainbowderp:

FORESHADOWING?!? :pinkiecrazy:

AHA! 3RD :derpytongue2: now i feel sad :pinkiesad2:

1444330 Yes devoted reader, I have been learning about Shakespearian writing teqniques.....*hint* *hint* :ajsmug:

Incompleted, but fourth part is the end? Does this mean there will be epilogue or something?

Sorry about the lack of gaps, my iPod is driving me mad! :raritydespair:

I like this MUCH BETTER, than the last one

i like a good dose of drama as much as the next guy, but personally i´m a sucker for happy endings, thanks for providing.

I am sorry, but grammar seems to be a bit of a nightmare in this story. I would suggest placing two spaces after every period and making a new paragraph every time a new character speaks. I am guessing that this comment is going to be viable throughout this stories entirety.

I can honestly tell you that my fellow Grammar Nazis as well as myself are about to flip some major tits. I love the concept, but there are just some details that deter my appreciation. AJ's accent is blown out of proportion in my opinion and some of the slang is unnecessary.

Damn, I feel like my opinion is going to make me look like a total prick.
I feel like The Element of Loyalty would never be DISLOYAL to her coltfriend. EVER! I'm sorry, I have read too many stories and thus I have been subjugated to certain standards and ideals when dealing with Dash's love life.

Wut Dafuq? When....What? This chapter has too many holes in it. I don't know if you will ever read these comments, but I would strongly suggest that you revisit this story and polish the HOLY SHIT out of it. This could be an amazing story if you thought a bit more about grammar and flow. I hope to read more of your stories later on in order to see how you have improved. Keep up the writing!

Okay, this chapter was SO much easier to read. I don't know what the hell happened between the other 4 and this one, but you should make the others more like this one.

aww now I feel sad for dashi :pinkiesad2:

wtf? lol, is this a troll fic?

Comment posted by happy_pinkie_pants deleted Jun 12th, 2013

WTF! This is a screwed up story but a good one(:pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy:5 Out Of 5 Happy Pinkies) I will probably not read another story like this one.
Ok I need to slap my face with a fish now because of this story.


Macindash :trixieshiftright:
Naaaaaah :trixieshiftleft:

Not a big fan of amici dash, bit I still would like to see where this is going :twilightsmile:

SOARIN!!!! WHY U SO EVIL!!! :flutterrage: :fluttercry:

Wut....I.....WAT! :rainbowhuh:

I don't understand this story.... :facehoof:

whoa.... that escalated very quickly. O_O

Ok. that was a lot better then the other ending. Much much happier ending.

I have seen real people die by my own hands in the gulf war... why does this upset me more?

I'm still very confused:rainbowhuh: but, I do like this ending better.:derpytongue2:


This ending is waaay better

Soarin and Rainbow were really adorable lovers. You know it's good when you can forgive each other.

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