What if Twilight never became Celestias apprentice but instead she died as a child and became the adopted daughter of Death himself?
How will this new world grow with her destiny altered in such a way? Follow the adventures of a Twilight who lives a life among the dead while walking the world of the living as well.
Featured: 2/3/2021
cooote twi picture
why can i imaging twilight reading learning and being a bit or a prankster on the maids abd making a spell that gives dead or near dead a glow she can see to tell them apart/booping people to be adokable
... this.... has my interest.
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She better only boop the dead then else her body counts gunna rise, cause you know deaths touch and all that
media.tenor.com/images/8e93a57e29cdcdd6b551cdba64e9aab9/tenor.gif more please
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But she’s technically undead and living between realities and has a pulse
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still she contains apart of death him self, its entirely possible this could be one of the side effects
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True
Also I preread this and I love it still
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She has the ability to touch people and kill them but as she grows older and learns how to control her power more it will be something she can turned on or off. When she is working as a Reaper then she will have the ability on but when she's not working she'll have the skill off so as to not accidentally kill someone.
... was that maid from touhou? Or inspired by a character in it?
I thought this story might be a bit like Split Second, (Which I loved, so I was excited to read this) instead I found it going in a different direction that I love just as much!
Personally, I'm hoping for a chapter or two of a young Aeternum doing her job while maintaining all the innocence in the world. Just because it would be so cute!
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Not sure which you're referring to at but the cover picture was me searching 'female Grim Reaper' in google and the picture of Twilight I got from derpibooru by searching human Twilight and looking till I found a young version of her. Took forever to find the pic of Twilight but I think it was worth it since she is so cute.
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Thy wish shall be granted.
There are so many types of beings in the world. Those that don't want to go, those that have accepted the inevitable, those that want to go but don't believe they deserve for the pain to end and those that just can't stand it anymore.
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The maid in chapter two
I'm getting big I'm The Grim Reaper vibes, and I love it.
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I love that comic but my plan for this story is nothing like that.
I wonder will Spike ever be born now that Twilight has Died and Subsequently become the Alicorn of Souls/Death. Also will she ever start dating when she reaches her teenage years?
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I cannot wait to see more this 😊😊😊😊😊😊
isnt this just like the web comic called 'im the grim reaper'? the cover art looks almost exactly like it
I am getting anime fives here
Yeah, Death is kind. Now Love, Love is the guy you should keep an eye out for. They will always stab you in the back
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The only similarity that my story has to that web comic is that someone is a grim reaper. Yes, I've read the comic and I loved it but because concepts like this are done so often I paid special attention to make sure I didn't copy anyone else's work.
Actually I was inspired to write this story years ago after reading the story The Last Sparkle Before the Night and it's two sequels written by Amaranthine Thought. So this story been in development since early 2019. You all should go check out his stories because they were pretty good.
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Sorry it took me so long to reply, I had to check my notes and that took a while.
The answer is no to both, a Yuki Onna is a Japanese ice spirit (it's not really but if you really want to know just look it up) and the name I made for her was just an ice themed pun I translated from English to Japanese with Google translate.
This is wholesome.... I BLOODY LOVE IT
I can imagine Death getting a Father’s Day gift when the time arrives.
Also wonder have Davy Johns and Thanatos will react to Death’s Daughter
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I'll be watching this very closely. It has a lot of potential.
Somehow I can imagine the Spirit of Harmony going absolutely NUCLEAR over Twilight dying an early death. Although I can't but wonder if will now be able to a different kind of harmony now.
Lol less then a day up already featured
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Love the bna pfp
"She looked" male all the way until now, but overall great start to a new story, much potential.
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and also the cover art is really really like some art i saw advertising the comic (except the eye glow is purple instead of red). i do like this story and hope to get more chapters
You know, I do note, he only told her She couldn't tell people who she used to be, not that she couldn't tell them she was one of death's, hmmm, workers, i guess you could put it. That will be an interesting thing to keep in mind.
An amazing quote from one of my all time favourite doctor who episodes. This gives me high expectations.
Love it; please continue.
This is a great read. I wish the chapters were longer. But it's fine as long as the next chapter doesn't take too long.
I'm enjoying the story but I'm a little confused. Is this anthro?
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It's not anthro but human, body types will be explained on a need to know basis.
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interesting...
I think you need to change this rule, assuming you intend to shove her back into the world of the living with no changes to appearance or age, then it’s only a matter of time before this gets broken.
Between Celestia, her parents and her brother she will be dead within hours.
Maybe change it it to she can’t speak her TRUE name or her new purpose to mortals OTHER than those who knew her before she died? This way she will have a support network in the living world she can fall back on when the stress hits to hard? She is dead (living dead?) so the Elements won’t accept her and the closure for her parents would be a good thing.
This story is very interesting i can't wait for more,im sure in the end it will be quite a piece of art
*If it will be ended,but Damn i hope it will.Aaaand updated more than once a year :)
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She will not be just thrown back into the Mortal World and even when she returns she will have little contact with her mortal family. As for Celestia, she never met Twilight because she died before she could take the entrance exam.
On a side note the wings Twilight has will also make it easier for people to not notice her, In this world the pony races are human so their bodies are a bit different.
wow Love it please continue
Soooo alicorns are elf life then also we need art of twilght now the hair sounds amazing and death gave me a pissed off inez vibe
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I'm not any good when it comes to art so unless someone wants to do fanart of there won't be an image.
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Hopefully someone does
This is an interesting concept and i'm looking forward to seeing where you take this. your writing has really improved since your earlier stories, so keep going.
If I were to give you a recommendation right now, it would be to increase Aeternum/Twilight's age to 9 or 10 years old, because right now she acts a bit too adult and composed for what seems believable for a 7 year old girl, or you could just have have her act a bit more childish. This is of course just a recommendation so feel free to disregard it.
Anyway keep up the good work, it's really enjoyable to read.
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Thanks for the advice, I'll work on making her more childish.