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Drop_It_Like_Its_Clop
Don't make the same mistake I made, kids; When the police shout "drop it!", that doesn't refer to your pants.
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That was a very interesting romp. I liked the fact that you took time to fully establish a relationship between Ace and Celestia before having them both jump into bed. It makes the ribald elements of the story fit together like a puzzle, flowing naturally from the situation rather than being forced into place by the writer. Aside from a few spelling and grammatical errors, it is quite well written. It just the kind of writing I would expect from an aggressively erudite author with amazing aptitude and astonishingly articulate alliterative ability. (Okay, I cheated a bit with erudite, but I was going more for phonic than alphabetic word flow. LOL!) Liked it. It would be interesting if you could keep the story going, but as is it's quite satisfying. (Interesting that out of more than 185 views, I'm the only comment. Maybe they're too impatient to delve into a lengthy relationship set up. Plebeians... Humph!)
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There will be more chapters, most of them shorter than this one.
If you see any grammatical or spelling errors, do point them out so I can correct them. It might be that I missed them in proofreading, that I intended to write it that way, or that I thought it was correct but I was mistaken.
10177931 One error that I believe was a typo was toward the end where you used the word sweet instead of sweat. Others, I'd have to search for more thoroughly as I wasn't in editor mode. It is a minor complaint considering the lack of good writing on this site. But who am I to criticize... My second grade teacher told me if I couldn't spell it right, spell it phonetically. I've been editorially handicapped ever since. LOL.
Dang, I've read many a clop with a semblance of plot, but this one ranks high up there. Keep up the good work!
Shame this will not continue any time soon since the commission er has been gone for months now
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Yeah, it's a shame. It seemed from the brief I was given that it would've been interesting if it had continued, but I can't get ahold of him, so I've got no way to really continue it.