That was a very interesting romp. I liked the fact that you took time to fully establish a relationship between Ace and Celestia before having them both jump into bed. It makes the ribald elements of the story fit together like a puzzle, flowing naturally from the situation rather than being forced into place by the writer. Aside from a few spelling and grammatical errors, it is quite well written. It just the kind of writing I would expect from an aggressively erudite author with amazing aptitude and astonishingly articulate alliterative ability. (Okay, I cheated a bit with erudite, but I was going more for phonic than alphabetic word flow. LOL!) Liked it. It would be interesting if you could keep the story going, but as is it's quite satisfying. (Interesting that out of more than 185 views, I'm the only comment. Maybe they're too impatient to delve into a lengthy relationship set up. Plebeians... Humph!)

What did a guy have to do to provoke an invasion around here?

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There will be more chapters, most of them shorter than this one.

If you see any grammatical or spelling errors, do point them out so I can correct them. It might be that I missed them in proofreading, that I intended to write it that way, or that I thought it was correct but I was mistaken.

10177931 One error that I believe was a typo was toward the end where you used the word sweet instead of sweat. Others, I'd have to search for more thoroughly as I wasn't in editor mode. It is a minor complaint considering the lack of good writing on this site. But who am I to criticize... My second grade teacher told me if I couldn't spell it right, spell it phonetically. I've been editorially handicapped ever since. LOL.