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Twilight Star


Twilight and Luna: two mares made for each other

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When Luna stops a nightmare that Twilight Sparkle was having, Luna spends time with Twilight to talk about the nightmare, and maybe about something else that's upsetting Twilight.

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Nightmare Moon laughed, “Your foal, you can’t escape the eternal night!”

Since when did Twilight have a child?

9590334
Twilight doesn't have a foal, that's the way Nightmare Moon refers to Twilight Sparkle in the first season of the second episode

9590342
Didn't she say, "you fool", not "your foal"?

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Really? Gosh, I'll correct it.

9590352
NMM does, in fact, use "foal" in place of "fool" in the show. :twilightsmile:

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Thank you for informing me, I'll correct

9590433
Leave it at "you foal". It actually looks good like that.

Princess Luna never even touched on a third meaning for the nightmare; that Princess Twilight has her own dark side, and that she was about to be forced by Nightmare Moon and Daybreaker to face her own evil superpowered self when Princess Luna stepped in and stopped the nightmare.

Bruh only now I realized this, Starlight dreamt of Daybreaker and Nightmare Moon as well. Not you too Twilight

Ok speaking of the episode with Sombra. And when they thought that the elements were gone forever and they couldn't fix them my first reaction to this was "bruh fix them like you did when Nightmare moon broke them." And as this fanfic brings this more out only then I realized what Hasbro did. They incoperated the beginning of MLP FIM to the end smart😎

Great story. However, there is an error I found.

In this part: Twilight Sparkle didn’t know why Luna and Celestia became more evil. Did they fought?

The 'Twilight Sparkle didn’t know why Luna and Celestia became more evil.' part, the 'became more evil.' should be 'let their dark sides rise.' And the 'fought' should be 'fight'.

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Thanks for letting me know. I already fixed

Nightmare Moon nodded, “so what do you do with it? Put her in the dungeon? Make her one of us?”

Nightmare Moon nodded, "So, what do you think we should do with her? Put her in the dungeon? Make her one of us by bringing her own hidden dark side out?"

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Thanks. I already corrected

Twilight Sparkle, tense, ran again, quickly in the hallway. She ran now, faster than she could. She was no longer in the hallway that seemed to have no end, she was a few miles to the door. But, her happiness was replaced with fear, because Daybreaker teleported in front of the door, “don’t even think about running away, Twilight”

The D in don't should be capitalized and there should be a period (.) after Twilight.

Same ending punctuation with

“I don’t know, Twilight,” replied Luna. “But you now know”

and

Luna then felt Twilight Sparkle was waking up, she started flying out of Twilight Sparkle’s dream, “Have a good day for you, Twilight”

And there's others like that too.

Nightmare Moon laughed as she continued walking slowly down the hall. “Give up, Twilight, accept your defeat, and accept me as your princess!”

Nightmare Moon laughed as she walked slowly down the hall after Twilight Sparkle.
"Give up, Twilight. Accept your defeat, and accept me as your princess!" She chuckled.

Daybreaker looked at Nightmare Moon. “Well, the elements of harmony have already been destroyed, so there’s no way she can use it to make us go back to our weak forms.”

use them.

As if it were magic, a voice said. “IT’S ENOUGH!”

THAT'S ENOUGH!

Twilight Sparkle was in a hallway, the windows were broken, able to see the moonlight. Suddenly she heard hoofbeats, slowly walking up to her. “Twilight ~”

hoofsteps

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