Cozy Glow puts her backup plan into effect and, with the help of Chrysalis, breaks Tirek out of Tartarus. Chrysalis and Tirek gain power, and they help Cozy Glow rise to power. Can they be defeated this time?
An alternative to Season 9, if anyone's disappointed with it when it comes out or have already given up on it after Season 8. I'm sure it won't satisfy me so I'll go by this as a headcanon. Also a sort of "predict how it could go next" and see how accurate it is when Season 9 comes. Anyone who might have heard rumors of an extra villain or two (edit: which turned out to be true, Sombra and Grogar), I didn't include them, it worked fine with these three here.
And if the ending - or any part of this story - comes true in Season 9, whether it was their original plan or they drew inspiration from this, I won't be offended or cause any drama. I'm actually cheering for the same ending. If I nailed any of this, it's coincidence, I have no idea what will happen.
*Inhales* I want to ship Chrysalis and Cozy Glow *Whew*
I don't think you should have him repeat what he said in the season 4 finale directly. If it was for a good reason, it'd be fine, but this kinda is just unnecessary.
I think the "flying" was just jumping really strongly. Also, this whole story is feeling a lot like a repeat of Twilight's Kingdom. It's hard to avoid that kind of thing with a story like this, but it's just a bit jarring, though the unique parts are quite interesting.
A bit awkward. In general, the action scenes have strange wording.
A fun story overall, even if it had some poor wording and weird plot points.
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Thanks for leaning a little more towards the positive, and the negative being more constructive criticism than anything.
I changed Tirek's line to "I have returned", and re-worded Starlight and Chrysalis's fight as best I could, as well as changing Tirek's flight to a big jump.
Also, I know it was kinda a lot like Twilight's Kingdom, but really what more can one do with a Tirek return, aside from Chrysalis being his ally and Cozy Glow being his boss? (Likely why they didn't show more of the Tirek future, it was pretty much the same scene as after he'd taken the alicorn magic) We're not sure what Season 9 will actually bring, but it's rumored Tirek's role will either be minimal or shared with one or two others besides Cozy Glow and Chrysalis (Chrysalis isn't even confirmed for the premier, just some return in the season, unless they meant Ocellus turning into her).
Besides, it does contain elements from other two-parters as well (such as Chrysalis taking Cadance's place (ACW), trapping the Mane 6 (TWABA), hiding out at Hollow Shades (Shadow Play), strangling the Tree with Plunderseeds and subsequently returning the Elements to her (PTS), and the manner of Cozy Glow's defeat (School Raze) as a sort of "finale", even though of course it'll mean nothing to anyone who finds Season 9 to be adequate once it comes out, other than to see how close I was or just an entertaining alternate ending, like some have written to existing seasons, etc. (Like the "what if" story in Tenkaichi 2 where Zarbon seeks the Dragonballs for eternal youth, I played that so much that my Zarbon is overpowered)
But again, thanks for finding it fun despite the flaws.
How did Chrysalis get in Tartarus?
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She sneaked in disguised as Celestia.
Anyone who thinks it unlikely that she secretly intended to get sent to Tartarus: I changed it so that it was a backup plan in case her main plan had failed. (But she pretended to Chrysalis that it was her main plan, because she knew Chrysalis wouldn't want to help if she knew Cozy Glow's initial plan didn't involve giving her anything)
Obviously has to be alt. universe now, since Grogar got Tirek and Cozy Glow out of Tartarus and made them and Chrysalis his minions. Ironic they get paired together after I write this story.
Edit: And with the finale... no spoilers but I'll just say I don't need a headcanon for Chrysalis now.
Ooooh damn! She planned everything out! It’s so weird to root for the villains but I am.
Oh damn they got evaporated. I guess? That’s better than stone ?
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Ironic the ones I picked out for this story were the same who were the final antagonists in canon.
I knew Grogar and Sombra were going to be in it (or what appeared to be Grogar), fortunately they re-killed Sombra, and an eternal dreamless stone sleep for Chrysalis, as well as Tirek and Cozy Glow, is as good as death to me.