This story is a sequel to Queen Chrysalis Reforms (Accidentally)
Cozy Glow has a bone to pick with a lot of creatures at Twilight's School of Friendship, but six in particular stand out. During a small get-together with the other members of the Legion of Doom, Cozy Glow regales Tirek and Chrysalis with her plans for revenge!
At great length. Whether they want her to or not.
An entry into The Discovery — A Young Six Writing Contest
This story is in-continuity with Queen Chrysalis Reforms (Accidentally), but reading that story is not necessary to enjoy this one.
Chapters (8)
Chrysalis is Reformed in this as per the end of Queen Chrysalis Reforms (Accidentally), but I decided to keep mentions of that out so as to not bog down the story with unnecessary recapping. The only allusion to it is that her telekinesis is blue.
Oh, also, special thanks to Trinary for helping me with this! I originally had something else planned for the contest, but I was struggling to keep it under the 12K word limit and realized a few days ago that I'd need to re-write it pretty thoroughly to make it any good. So I floated this idea as something else that I knew I could write quickly, and Trinary encouraged it and helped me iron out some of the details.
I love seeing Cozy eternally struggling, bouncing back and forth between trying to be as adorable as possible and be as menacing as possible and usually falling short in both departments. Part of her being a--foal, I guess? I'm actually still not sure about that, I'm convinced she's like Baby Doll from Batman: The Animated Series and is actually in her 20s.
Aww, little Cozy's first revenge schemes. Isn't that pwecious? It sounded like she was on the right track with Yona and even arguably Sandbar. Her Silverstream plan had merit, though the thing about fishbowls and tanks is periodically cleaning them, yuck. I love Chrysalis' insistence that no one takes revenge against changelings but her, even if she has no idea who they are in particular. The Smolder plan needed work. Also, lava sharks with freaking lasers on their heads!
Chrysalis: Even if you could somehow invent these 'lava sharks' you realize that dragons hides are tough. Even shark teeth would likely not be enough. Especially as Smolder can swim through lava.
Tirek: I also find sharks highly over-used in revenge schemes. There was that one fellow who put sharks in parkas, now that was a fresh take on things.
Chrysalis: ...What?
Tirek: He called them 'sharkas.' I think it showed a lot of inventiveness! Which is more than I can say for Cozy...
Cozy: My plan is great! .... do you have the number for the sharkas guy?
Only at the first chapter so far and wondering if this is before or after Tiatara. If this gets answered in story, I suspect I'll find out in Ocellus or Smolder's chapter.
This was the most pleasent surprise I had in a long while. Just finished the first chapter and I already love it.
The fact that Chrysalis is baking now for others besides herself shows that she's slowly but surely becoming a better person since her accidental reformation.
I love how musicle numbers are an actual, aknowlaged part of the universe, although I do wonder what you were basing this song off of.
The idea of Cozy practicing her musical numbers in front of Tirek amuses me greatly.
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Actually nothing, although I did have this in mind to some extent.
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Well didn't quite get my answer with those two like I'd predicted, but I did get it at the last chapter! Totally called one detail about Gallus's chapter. This was tons of fun to read!
Tried to imagine the rhythm for Cozy’s song. Couldn’t fit the syllables in as much as I liked.
Closest I could was her lines in “A better way to be bad” while imagining her voice.
What was the lyric pacing for this?
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This fic is gonna be hilarious
This plan, the way Cozy tells it and the names of this and the subsequent chapters make Cozy out to be delightfully childish. Very cute, despite her intentions.
I have to say, being locked up in such a small area for that without even being fed is pretty cruel, even for Cozy. Only a true villain could come up with something so heinous.
Well, at least Cozy is making good use out of her future prisinor in this case. The addition of Sandbar's little sister is a surprisingly amusing and sinister idea.
Ghost Rider joins the MCU. Duh.
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Geez this is really the worst plan of all of them
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I think bold is Tirek and italics is Chrysalis. Tirek was likely commenting on his brother, Scorpan, betraying him to side with the ponies.
I'm seeing a pattern of public humiliation here.
These plans are actually getting better and better. Cozy's even thinking of how to feed them now.
This is obviously the best and the most realistically doable plan out of all of them.
Aww, despite everything Cozy's still willing to give them a chance at "redemption". It's like she's using the heroes own methods against them. Also, is she emphesising with Gallus? Because she is going surprisingly easy on him compared to the others.
Shouldn't Tartaros be Tartarus?
Something tells me she just wants to see a cute boy in a maid costume.
Nice! Love the continuity. So it’s a prequel to Tiatarta.
The reveal that Cozy totally does not have a crush on Gallus was really funny. Overall the fact that she’s very much still a filly, young and immature, shines through here. Still kinda bummed out that we don’t get to see what she thinks of Ocellus, but ah well.
Tirek’s latent paternal instincts towards Cozy is really interesting too. Looking forward to seeing more of the two of them in your next story!
That is adorable. I love papa Tirek.
Is Tartarus spelled Tartaros in some countries like how Cozy is spelled Cosy in britain?
And so it begins.
Overall, I absolutely adored this story. In many ways, it reminded me of it's prequel and I think that is a good thing. A fun, rereadable and cute fic.
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Properly speaking there isn’t really a correct way to render it into the Roman alphabet, seeing as it’s a Greek name and there’s a bit of leeway with how to spell things coming in from different writing systems (viz., Czar, Tzar, Tsar; Kiev or Kyiv; Mao Tse Tung or Mao Zedong, etc.). If directly translated from Greek it would most correctly be spelled “-os”, but usually we go with the Latin version of the name.
However in the first episode where Tartaros was mentioned, Twilight consistently pronounced it “tar-tar-OS”, emphasis on the last syllable and with more of an “oh” sound, closer to how it’s said in Greek, instead of “TAR-tar-us”, emphasis on the first syllable and with an “uh” sound. So even though the show started using the more common English pronunciation later on, I’ve always stuck with spelling it “Tartaros” to suggest that everyone is saying it the way they did when it first premiered.
It’s a small thing.
Now in the Featured Box!
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Whoooo!
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I've noticed you talking about languages before, like using Basque for Zaldia. You have a background or interest in languages?
IT'S HERE!
I saw you were going to write something for the Student 6 contest, and I was really excited to see what you'd do. But I never imagined a Cozy story! This is brilliant and I love it.
Cozy wanting revenge on the six makes total sense, and that's something I've taken a look at in my own story. A whole story examining it is super clever, though. Can't wait to read more!
Also
Cozy was surely going to say "witch", right? There was no way that little filly would swear, would she?
we need a cozy emoticon
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Interest, but no background. I'd love to know how to speak or read or write a bunch of languages, but after years of trying the only languages I know are English and Bad English.
Oh man, the thought of a hundred foot high dais to push Silverstream down is
I'm loving this! It's so great
I saw this and had to bring it up because I'm a grammar stickler:
This should be "too"
PFFFFFFHAHAHAHAHAHA
I LOVE the idea that Cozy has all these nerdy interests deep down!
Another amazing chapter
Also, Cozy wants to see a teenaged stallion in a maid costume? That's a little lewd for her!
Oh no, what did Cozy say to Chrysalis?
She's got lava sharks!
Ah, now we know what Cozy is, she's a Dwarf! She's already gotten her book of grudges down.
What was Cozy's intended plan for Ocellus? I'm very curious
Hahahaha, Cozy's desire for revenge is driving her crazy
Also, I just noticed that this was the first revenge that ends in death. Or is Phase 5 Cozy saves Smolder and then tosses her in again, repeating until she's bored?
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I dunno Cozy, that dragon is pretty tough. That seems like the biggest flaw in your plan; what if Smolder beats the lava sharks?
Does Cozy have a crush on Gallus?
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When writing this I wrote Yona's and Silverstream's first and actually both of them ended with death as well, but I decided to revise it because I wanted to keep a degree of "innocence" to her revenge schemes, i.e., they're ridiculous and really more humiliating than anything (falling down stairs in cartoon horse land isn't likely to give permanent injuries). Plus the evidence from the show is that while Cozy talks a big game, she really isn't actually willing to directly kill anyone herself; the closest she comes is a team-effort with Chrysalis and Tirek against Twilight, but conversely during the throne room fight scene she doesn't kill any guards and actually seems like she goes out of her way to avoid causing any permanent harm.
But, at the same time, she is a kid with a lot of issues, so I can see her as having at least one creature that she hates enough that she totally comes up with this plan to kill Smolder because she's soooo awful and deserves it! As for whether or not she'd actually go through with it if she actually somehow managed to get the lava sharks and volcano she wants...eh, I'll leave that up in the air.
I knew it! Cozy DOES have a crush on Gallus!
That's adorable and really creepy
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Yep, Cozy's a little lewd
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Makes sense. I would say, though, that Cozy nearly killed a bunch of ponies on the field trip to Cloudsdale. Cozy is a brilliantly deadly schemer but she's also a 10 year old, so she probably does have this sort of childlike fantasy revenge idea
The previous story was good but this one, is not as good
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Like I said, directly kill. She's certainly callous and uncaring enough to not be particularly bothered by the idea of creatures dying as a result of stuff she plans, but her actual plans themselves won't ever have "X then dies" in them as a step. Except Smolder, for reasons outlined above.
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Eh, can't hit home runs all the time. I'm still practicing my Cozy Glow and trying to nail down her character. I do have another story planned for the contest that I hopefully will be able to finish in time, which will also feature Cozy and be a bit less, shall we say, frenetic.
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Ahhh, I see. That makes sense.
Cozy's hate-crush on Gallus is creepy and adorable and I am considering headcanoning it
Me think's the Cozy may protest to much... do you have a crush?
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Cozy can SAY it's about the smell or Smolder's early hoarding habits, but we all know it's because Smolder was the one who called out how little sense Cozy's claims about Starlight's vanishing made and how she didn't buy into Cozy's cute act.
We all saw how much Cozy hates it whenever someone doesn't buy into her cute act.
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I may end up repeating this for every chapter...
Does Cozy have a crush?
So this plan involves Yona getting naked(er)
Once again, do you have...
Wait till you see what a pony with a volcano cutie mark can do.
Damn that was a quick one to come out , especially that many chapters . You know , in French , there is a saying that states "Vous n'avez pas chaumez !" which means basically that you worked you ass off to make great work in a very short time, sadly it doesn't have a real equivalent (at least that I know of) in English , and I wish it did because , damn vous avez pas chaumez ! I didn't know what to do this afternoon , well now I know exactly what ama do !
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Maybe somepony has a crush?
I knew I'd be right, sooner or later!
I , for one moment forgot to what story this one was the sequel of , and I was wondering why she was like this for one drone , then I remembered , and then I laughed , a lot.
Edit: Just read the last chapter and saw that this fic takes place before your earlier fic , oh well . But I guess it kinda still stands ?