One day whilst Twilight is out on a diplomatic mission. Spike finds a mysterious box in her room that he'd never seen before, and his curiosity gets the better of him.
Author's note: This is my... Basically third story I've written for MLP but the first I've written in years (and the first that wasn't when I was a teenager). Give fair feedback and speak your mind as to how I might improve in the future!
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This was interesting for sure. I really hope to get a follow up with them becoming a couple. As Pinkie saidnthe sexual tension between the two of them is huge lol
Me: NO, NO PINKIE BAD!, MY VIRGINITY MUST BE INTACT AT ALL COSTS!
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Just my mind arguing
I really enjoyed this story! It is well written and entertaining. There were a few mistakes here and there, but nothing too serious. I'd suggest proofreading it one or two times more, or getting a second person to go over it. (I can PM you the mistakes I noticed if you'd like as well, just let me know.
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I would also very much enjoy a sequel/continuation of this! Possibly even a more mature scene, if you're up for that kind of thing.
I feel like this story is too real for the author, but Pinkie at the end broke that awkwardness
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too real?
Reaction: Great story. Loved it
Improvement: None needed (as far as I can see)
Hope to see in the future: Some PinkieSpike maybe..eh.
Pinkie = best. For many reasons
...yes, stop stalling it's sequel time!
This was a fun read. Can never have enough Twilight/Spike moments! And the awkward/embarrassing ones are some of my favorite.
Good job!
P.S. Could have expanded more on that "sketch book" part. Would have been really interesting.
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Sadly I haven't properly had the time or ideas to expand on it, but I'd love to
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I am so sorry that it's taken so long, between just not having the time or the proper idea of what to do an actual sequel I haven't, but I'll try to get on it soon.
TwiSpike has always been a guilty pleasure of mine.
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I'm trying dangit!
Lol
That was funny