• Published 17th Oct 2018
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Anon-a-Miss: A Wrinkle in Time - Guardian Amy



After Sunset committed suicide due to Anon-a-Miss, her friends along with Crystal Rose travel the universe to find her lost soul.

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Aftermath

The sky was dark, and everyone looked at the grave with teary eyes.

Here Lies, Sunset Shimmer

Just looking at it was enough to make everyone weep. Standing in front of the gravestone were Sunset's former friends. Applejack had her hat off and stared at the tombstone with bloodshot eyes. Fluttershy was crying her eyes out. Pinkie Pie's hair was flat and dark, as well as her pink skin. Her eyes were sore and puffy, not only from when Twilight poked her in the eyes, but from crying so much. Rarity was covering her mouth in shock, her makeup dripping from her face. Rainbow Dash, who is now in a leg cast and holding a pair of crutches just look at the dirt ground, refusing to look at the grave.

"I can't believe we did that." croacked Fluttershy, her voice raw from the sobbing.

"Why were we such assholes?" said Rarity, dabbing her eyes and blowing her nose with a tissue.

"What friends are we?" said Dash, "Turning our backs on our best friend without a second thought."

"Rest in peace, Sunset Shimmer. Rest in peace." said Applejack placing her hat back on her head.

The all looked at the grave for a long time saying their goodbyes and how sorry they were. After five minutes of crying Rainbow looked up.

"Why would they do it?" She said, her voice hinting a bit of hatred.

"What do you mean?" Asked 'Shy.

"I mean, why would Apple Bloom, Sweetie Belle, and Scootaloo, create Anon-a-Miss and frame Sunset for it."

"Ah just can't believe it; Apple Bloom was lyin' and Ah believed her. Ah'm pratically a lie detector, Ah coulda just looked at the truth in Bloom's eyes. But Ah didn't."

"I hear you Applejack, I can't believe my own sister would do such a thing. I'm so ashamed." said Rarity, stroking her short hair.

Rainbow Dash wiped the tears from her face, she clenched her fists and teeth in rage as her sadness was replaced with hatred.

"This is your fault, Applejack." she suddenly called out. "This would have never happened if you weren't the first person to blame Sunset!"

"We're all to blame, Rainbow; and we're weren't the only ones."

"Oh sure!" said Dash sarcastically. "May I remind you, that you're the first person to confront Sunset in the first place."

"And may ah remind you that you convinced us that Sunset was going to be expelled in the assembly."

"Yea, Rainbow" said Rarity.

"And what about you Rarity," said the sad Pinkie, "I thought the you were the generous one. But you were too selfish to even think about her."

"Said the person who made her miserable." That made Pinkie step back in guilt as fresh tears flooded her eyes.

"Stop," said/whispered Fluttershy, "we can't lose anymore friends like this."

"Oh," sneered Rainbow, "now you're quiet. And there I thought that you were going to be the loudest one in the school, after you screamed with joy at the assembly. And you said the worst thing to Sunset, saying that she's not our friend. And wishing that you were never her friend in the first place." She slapped Fluttershy across the face so hard it left a handprint bruise on her face.

Fluttershy began to cry again, collapsing to the ground. Rainbow gave no sympathy.

"Crying won't get you out of this Flutterslut!"

The other Rainbooms ran to aid/comfort the broken girl.

"What the hell Dash!" Said Rarity.

"Yea, Fluttershy's hurt enough already!" said Pinkie Pie.

"STOP!" Applejack screamed out, "IT'S OUR FAULT! WE'VE BEEN NOTHIN' BUT SKANKS TO SUNSET, AND ONLY BECAUSE WE'VE LOOKED AT HER SINS IN THE PAST! THIS SHOULDA NEVER HAPPENED IF WE JUST LISTENED TO HER IN THE FIRST PLACE!"

Fluttershy, Rarity, and Rainbow Dash looked at AJ, their sadness returning.

"You're right Applejack." whimpered Fluttershy.

"Twilight was right about everything; we're not worthy of the magic of friendship." said Rarity tearfully.

"We're the worst friends in the world. We're no better than the Sirens." sobbed out Rainbow Dash.

The Rainbooms walked away from the grave, going their separate ways and to their homes.


Fast Forward to Christmas Morning


Apple Bloom had pulled herself out of bed. She hadn't got a lot of sleep since she've confessed about being Anon-a-Miss. She felt a sink of dread in her stomach as she walked downstairs to the living room. Right there was her grandmother, Granny Smith, sitting on the couch, with that angry granny look.

"G'mornin' Apple Bloom" she said sternly.

"G-g'mornin', Granny" Apple Bloom said nervously.

"Come here," the woman commanded. Cautiously, Bloom walked face to face to her grandmother, who've grabbed her by the ear. "Ya do know yer gettin' punished fer creatin' Anon-a-Miss," Apple Bloom nodded, "but before we get ta that, time fer presents! Git on mah lap!"

Apple Bloom knew exactly what was going to happen; but she didn't wanted to make this any worst for herself, so she pulled down her pants, (only showing her butt) and knelt down over Granny's lap. Granny herself pulled off her rubber yellow glove revealing her bare hand, and positioned herself.

"Merry Christmas Apple Bloom!" She exclaimed slapping the girl's butt.

The first few were light and bare able, but as the spanking continued, become harder and harsher. Apple Bloom squirmed and kicked her legs begging her granny to stop but she didn't listen; this was the pain she deserved. Apple Bloom on the other hand, was crying her eyes out, blubbering like a toddler, She wished she had never created Anon-a-Miss . Granny didn't stop intil Apple Bloom's bum was red and swollen.

"Now that ya got yer present, time for punishments: Yer grounded 'til the next school year begins. Also yer doin' all the chores and housework yerself for a year. And furthermore, you'll be usin' a flip phone until the police give yer smartphone back. And until ya go ta college, yer banned from the Internet unless it's fer school, even then, we'll be supervisin' you ta make sure ya don't goof off. Understand."

"Uh-huh."

"Good. Now go to yer room and stay there."

Apple Bloom gave a quick nod and shamefully walked upstairs.

"Why did Ah made Anon-a-Miss? What was Ah thinkin'?"

"Ah was about to ask you the same thing, Apple Bloom." said a voice. Apple Bloom looked behind her, and there was Applejack, with the most angry and hurt expression she ever had.

"Applejack!" She ran to hug her sister, but she was rudely pushed away. "Ah'm so so sorry! Ah've never meant tah-"

"It's a little too early for apologies sis!" AJ said coldly.

"Applejack! Ah can explain!"

"Ah'm listenin'"

"Ah, was just jealous that you were spendin' more time with Sunset instead of me! And-"

"Then why didn't you tell me! You'd know Ah'd listen!"

"Well, Ah thought you wouldn't..." Apple Bloom broke down crying as her sister rolled her eyes.

"Just suck it up Apple Bloom, just suck it up. Fer land's sake! Can't you even feel the weight of want you've done. You posted people's most embarrassin' and private secrets, nearly drove the school into chaos, you broke up so many friendships, and blamed it all on Sunset! Didja forget that the #1 rule of the Apple Family: Always Tell The Truth?"

"Yes, but, but..."

"Go on."

"Ah just wanted us to be together again."

Applejack glared at her sister.

"Well, Bloom, congratulations, yer wish is granted."

"What do ya mean?"

"we're spendin' every day, of every hour, of every minute, of every second together. Ah'll be supervisin' you. From now on Apple Bloom, Ah don't trust you."

Apple Bloom looked at the ground with sheer guilt.


Sweetie Belle woke up a little later feeling the same feeling as Apple Bloom.

"Sweetie Belle, come down her please!" said her mother, Cookie Crumbles. Sweetie Belle took a deep breath, mentally bracing herself, and walked downstairs.

"Morning mom. Morning dad." She nervously greeted.

"Take a seat." said her Father, Hondo Flanks, pointing to a chair in front of the couch.

"Here's your present Sweetie Belle. Merry Christmas." said Hondo, handing her a small rectangle box wrapped in yellow gift wrap and held together by a red ribbon. Sweetie Belle was confused, but nonetheless, she ripped it open and saw that it was a black flip phone.

"You might be wondering why you're getting a flip phone. Well it'll be your new phone from now on, even after you get your smartphone back. And also, you're grounded and banned from the Internet for a year." said Hondo, with a scowl on his face.

"You won't believe how lucky you are that Principal Celestia didn't expel you, and you're even more lucky that you weren't arrested by the police, or you'd be spending Christmas in jail." said Cookie, disappointed. "Now go to your room; Your grounding starts today."

Sweetie Belle couldn't believe it, she was grounded on Christmas morning. But then again, she deserved it. On her way to her bedroom, she ran into Rarity who just came out of the washroom, . Her face had no makeup, so it figured she was washing it.

"R-rarity! Are you okay!?" said Sweetie concerned.

Rarity glared at her sister, clenching her teeth. More tears leaked out of her already bloodshot eyes.

"Okay?!" She screamed, "HOW CAN I BE OKAY AFTER YOU AND YOUR FRIENDS CREATED THAT SHITTY ANON-A-MISS! SUNSET SHIMMER COMMITED SUICIDE! AND ALL BECAUSE YOU WERE FUCKING JEALOUS THAT I WAS SPENDING MORE TIME WITH SUNSET THAN YOU! WHAT DO YOU THINK I FEEL?!"

Sweetie Belle stepped back in fear as her sister went into her face. "I just can't believe it," said Rarity, "my sister, my own flesh and blood, would do such a thing."

"Rarity, I-"

"Just stop," sighed a disgusted Rarity, "I already know, everyone does. I just, can't be near you anymore."

"What do you mea-"

"Enough. I'm just too embarrassed to even be near you. Goodbye."

Rarity walked to her room and slammed the door behind her, right in Sweetie's face.

"Rarity?" Said Sweetie Belle as she tried to open the door, but quickly found out the door was locked. "Rarity please open up!" no answer, "Please! Please open the door! I'm Sorry!" Sweetie slammed her hands on the door as tears came out of her eyes like a running faucet, "Please! Please! I'm sorry! I'm sorry! I'm sorry! Please I'm sorry! Please! I never wanted thing to be like this! I'm sorry!"

Rarity on the other hand just ignored her sister. She didn't wanted anything to do with her anymore. But Sweetie Belle didn't stop, she wanted to make amends with her sister. She was leaning on the other side of the door crying. She cried so hard for the door to be open, but Rarity didn't listen. Eventually, Sweetie Belle gave up and headed to her room, where she laid on her bed crying herself to sleep. "I'm so sorry..." She whimpered, hugging herself.


"And until we can trust you can use the Internet responsibly," said Rainbow's mother and Scootaloo's adoptive mother, Windy Whistles, "you're banned from it."

"And you'll be using a flip phone until farther notice." said Hot Bowhoof sternly

Scootaloo had nodded and headed upstairs to her room, but was interrupted by a sharp pain in her lower back. The impact was so hard she was knocked down to the ground. It took her quite awhile to figure out what just happened. As her back ached in agony she looked and saw an angry Rainbow Dash who had just hit her with one of her crutches.

"D-dash, I-"

"Fuck you!" Dash growled, "You're just a bitch! I can't believe I was stupid enough to get my parents to adopt you!" Rainbow hit Scootaloo's back again.

"Rainbow! I'm sorry! I didn't mean for- OW!" Rainbow jabbed the crutch in Scootaloo's stomach.

"Shut up! You are not my sister! You never were!" Dash shouted, that brought tears to Scootaloo's eyes. "I can believe you actually tricked me and played with my mind!"

Scootaloo was crying and shaking in fear, she never seen her sister so angry before, no one did. Without thinking, Scootaloo did the second biggest thing she regrets: in a stammered tone, Scootaloo opened her mouth.

"What are you gonna do?" Rainbow furiously smacked her left cheek.

"What am I gonna do? I'll tell you what I'm gonna do!" She pinned Scootaloo to the wall, "I am going to make you feel worst than Sunset. Much, much worse. More than you'll ever imagine. I'll make your life a living hell. Just you wait, you ugly bitch."

Scootaloo gulped and feared for her life as her breathing stopped and her heartbeat increased.

'What have I done?' she thought. 'Why did I messed up so badly? Why?"

Author's Note:

I hope this is better.

Comments ( 79 )

Good chapter tho rainbow is going way over board near the end but instead of changing it use it to give rainbows a you never learn moment since she's basically repeating what she did to sunset and acting out her rage over not being a dumbass and learning shes the one at fault (since the rainboom didnt have to believe anon-a-miss was sunset its still mostly on them

I can't take this anymore. I'm outta here. This is too harsh. Goodbye.

9299420 I agree with this.
Apple Bloom's and Sweetie's punishments were perfect, but more so their family's actions toward them.
I.E., they didn't go overboard.
(Well, Rarity did.)
(Eh, a little.)

And while I still think it woud've been better to have had Twi take Sunset's body back to Equestria for burial, maybe this was better.
This way, the Rainbums will have bear the knowledge that's she's buried where she is.

And if that didn't make a lick of sense, I'm sorry.

9299420
I have to agree Rainbow only repeating her mistakes, and going way to far, she push scoota to taking her own life.
You either change it and tone it down or have her Parents rip into Rainbow harshly and make her realize she only doing things wrong.

Have Rainbow break down crying, and saying how ashamed she is of Scoota for what she done. That be more than enough.
Could have her hear Rainbow sobbing blaming herself over what she done and begging Sunset for forgiveness, that will make Scoota feel all the more guilt fill.

No need for Rainbow to start abusing Scoota like that.

The others were fine, maybe Rarity went a tiny bit overboard but she still reeling from what happened.

Well, at least they're consistent, unlike in some fics. The Rainbooms treated Sunset like dirt over Anon-a-miss after calling her family, but at least they're not giving the actual culprits different treatment to Sunset now they know who's really guilty.
Which doesn't mean that Rainbow doesn't need a boot to the head since nothing short of that seems likely to get her to learn from her mistakes. Being consistent in how she treats people doesn't mean she's actually right in what she's doing.

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She's too distracted by grief and guilt to even realize what she's doing.

Why does this feel familiar?

Oh wait, because PonyJoel's already done it!

This should also be marked as Sad and Dark. The girls are wayyyyy too out of character. Twilight would never physically hurt the girls. She would probably scream at them and walk out of their lives for good but she wouldn’t hurt them. The girls also acting super vindicative and voicing out extremely nasty things like Flutters acting like a 8 year old are totally OOC. That’s the main thing I don’t like about this story.

For a first attempt it’s not very good. You need to work on the outline properly to give a hint of what’s coming along. At this stage I’m bored and will stop tracking here.

9300062
The chapter also copies PonyJoel a lot. It astonishes me that the CMC are being smashed into the floor whilst their siblings are being allowed to get away with murder (quite literally, as their behaviour is the short-term cause of Sunset's suicide). At least PonyJoel dealt with that aspect by having the Mane 5 punished as well,

I'll keep tracking it purely for the comedy value, as some bits of this chapter were unintentionally hilarious.

9299437
Even Dainn didn't go this far!

I hope this is better.

Nope.

9299781
I think they are reacting to either your decision to continue the story, the CMC bashing, or the Scootabuse.

I assume the next chapter is 'Applejack joins the KGB'?

9300210
1. Everyone is still OOC.
2. The first punishment comes across as retribution (I've always strongly disapproved of corporal punishment, on the grounds that those who use it instantly lose whatever moral high ground they held).
3. WHY IS SUNSET BURIED IN OUR WORLD?
4. Rarity is simply making the problem worse.
5. There is a fine line between appropriate punishment and child abuse, and Rainbow Dash not only crosses the line, she parks at least 2 car lengths over it. I've been hit in the face with a crutch, and I can tell you it's not fun.
6. Applejack is a secret member of the NKVD with that attitude.

That, and the entire chapter is very similar to PonyJoel's own take on Anon-a-Miss.

Comment posted by draph91 deleted Nov 18th, 2018

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The NKVD was Stalin's Secret Police. I drew the parallel after one of AJ's lines resembles a quote of Stalin's.

eh tone down the abuse with Scootaloo, you went a bit too far with that, also just a suggestion but have Applejack/Rarity/Rainbow Dash say this to Applebloom/Scootaloo/Sweetie Belle and have them acknowledge that they share some of the blame (imagine they're saying this at the same time)

Rainbow Dash: While it's true that me and my friends share some of the blame for abandoning Sunset and we have paid for it....

Rarity:...however your jealousy has cost us two friends and I dread what will happen if another magic threat comes along as well as the potential fallout that our family will face....

Applejack: ....not to mention you three threw the school into chaos and you ruined a lot of lives just for your own selfish desires....

Rainbow Dash:....You could have talked to me but instead you went and did this, this is it....

Rarity:....I can't trust you anymore, I'm sorry but you did this to me and my friends....

Applejack:...so from now on, apologize all you want...

AJ/R/RD:....but I don't have to listen

got a bit personal when writing this, if one of my friends or family members did this and it resulted in someone killing themselves, I would never forgive them.

also have Twilight take Sunset's body back to Equestria, if anyone else has suggestions how the chapter could be improved, feel free to reply

9300423
Indeed. They DON'T have to listen, but they would be wise to. Refusal to forgive others or oneself simply leads to a perpetual cycle of hate.

9300614
I believe forgiveness has its limits

they may forgive their sisters in time, trusting them however

Comment posted by Guardian Amy deleted Nov 18th, 2018

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As do I. However, it is crucial to forgive, or else, as I say, we get locked in a perpetual cycle of hate.

Dang this story is getting more and more darker. CMC I hope this was worth it cause now you lost your sisters Applejack gonna be keeping an eye on Bloom and she has lost her love and trust, Rarity cant even look at sweetie belle the same anymore , and Dash is gonna treat Scoot's worse than she treated Sunset during the whole ordeal ( better keep your door locked kid). When the time comes for them to travel back the rainbooms better think long and hard about what they will say otherwise they might lose Sunset forever, Those three better pray their sisters let them come along. Cant wait to see whats next.

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"That's putting it mildly, darling."
-Rarity.

9301994
Sorry I hope my review didnt sound to dark. Its just that this chapter had a few dark moments I just wanted to voice my opinion on it didnt mean to sound too dark.

9305423
My point being that your commentary is mild compared to the content of the chapter, which feels like somebody threw all of the darkest Anon-a-Miss stories into a blender and saw what came out.

I thought the Rainbooms would also be grounded and have their phones confiscated or maybe break them as well.

They're the ones who needed to be punished more and should've stop this whole chaos, had they just listen to Sunset and perhaps stop her from committing suicide.

9315563
:rainbowderp::facehoof: Clean up what?

You still having Dash about to be a abusive elder sister. Making her life a living hell like she did to Sunset?
So she going to beat her up and drive her to kill herself as well?

she still repeating the same mistake as before. Nothing changed.

Welp, I'm out. This story has gone far too overboard with how violent everything's gotten. On top of nearly everyone being completely out of character, the only reasonably close ones would have been the crowd of jeering students in the last chapter. Everyone in this was contradicting themselves every other word, and it got to the point it was a chore to slog through.

9316100
Oooh. Yeah you did clean that up.Thought i already replied to it But still standing firm by the last chapter and what I said. Rainbow too harsh and vicious.

also will the Rainbooms be suffering consequences for how they cheered for Sunsets death you did leave that in it.

9315878
Took the words right out of my mouth!

9315996
Very true. Good God, Rainbow's parents are useless!

9300062
I corrected Ch. 4. read it!

Hmmm I think there was a song line that goes with this?

OH YEAH!
Friends on the Other Side from The Princess and The Frog:
"You got what you wanted. But you lost what you had!"

I like this. Also Rainbow dash wouldn't learn any thing from what she did to sunset after all once a bad person always a bad person.

9329481
Yeah, but...Bow and Windy do nothing! WHY???

Dammit canceled! While i didn't agree with the story, was still hoping to see and read what happens.

9337131
It was a bit of a mess, mind.

9337205
I'm making a rewrite; and I'll be a lot better than this.

9337472
If you want some help, I can edit.

there is a move by the same name hopefully it is as good or almost as good as it.:scootangel:💖

9520600
Nope. As far as AaM stories go, this is one of the worst.

9612683
ya i guest after seeing the cancelled thing. well i hope the other one is better cuz i only read part of it i think.

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