Every year, when it comes down to a few days before Rainbow Dash's birthday, the speedster pegasus hides out in her cloud home away from her friends. What keeps up her there, none of them know. During a friendly get together at Sugarcube Corner, one thing leads to another and the conversation ends up on the situation. About half way through the small talk, Fluttershy sneaks out without notice and makes her way to the cloud home, to try and find the answer.
EDIT: Now has a dramatic reading - http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=kGfF9PRo7VY&list=FL0F-1rjcXl7IUbEIXDdOceQ&index=3&feature=plpp_video
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Bloody awesome!
Great to have this one here. I like a lot of whats in this story.
There were some basic grammar errors (your/you're), a few typos, and those hyphenings were really confusing to read, but the majority of the story was well written, I would just work on editing this a little bit
A very nice story there, i like how you put a letter to celestia in there as well
Very well written, loved it.
i was expecting a diamond in the box XD
This was nice, but one thing bugged me.
Immediately after saying she wasn't going to force Dash to tell her what was wrong...Fluttershy pins Dash to the ground and forces her to tell her what's wrong...
Still a nice story though.
Some basic errors, but easily fixable. The characters seemed... somewhat off at times.
But overall, this story wasn't too bad. And I love Fluttershy. She truly is one of the harder characters to write, her personality makes it so. Good for you, a challenge.
My first pony fanfic ever. So cute. Good job!
BEATUIFUL
1007286 Glad it was your first and that you enjoyed it!
Grammar mistakes galore. Meh, I can ignore those for the quality of this fic! I really like the work you've done here and the plot was cute and original. Good job
And as always, FLUTTERDASH FTW
1022403 Care to point some out? So, I can go and fix them.
Two of my cyborg future stalkers read this...
Gj btw, although I felt the mane 6 over reacted to rainbow dash being depressed. I understand fluttershy being depressed, but the others...
:) im always happy when i read one of your stories nothing negative and always posative
1037260 Thank you
1037746 :D
hey with your permission MLP friendship got skillz YT would like to see if its okay to do a dramatic reading for there channel
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1040993 Yes, certainly send me a link when it's uploaded. I would love to see it!
I like sad fics, perhaps more than the next guy, but honestly, I think that there has to be more to inspire the emotions than this gave. Parental issues especially this particular one are so overdone on this site. (Consider the fact that it is so easy to believe that any character could have family problems because many of their parents are never mentioned in the show or are only given the barest of descriptions) Also, personally I am affected a lot more if I as the reader experience a life-changing moment with the character (something hopefully less overdone) then just hear a short story about it from them.
1058719 Oh, I see what your saying. I had to read this comment a few times to fully understand what you were saying. (not that it's hard to understand). Yes, Rainbow tells the story herself. I know in a lot of other fan-fictions, that the story wouldn't be told by the character facing it. And would be a whole scene instead.
In this story, this is something that Rainbow has been keeping inside for a very long time, and when it happened she was pretty young so she wouldn't remember it enough for a full out reenactment of it. So, Rainbow tells the story herself as best as she could. I also wanted it to be like this because if Rainbow tells the story herself, it would help her overcome her past. And with the experience for the readers, I guess your right. It doesn't give a perfect image of how much it effected Rainbow. But, if the scene was written it wouldn't be any different, because like I said...she was young, and didn't remember what happened as clearly. So there wouldn't be any difference between them. Sure, more conversation, and probably more crying.
But, other then more crying and such...there wouldn't be any difference otherwise. I hope this explains it, I tried my best.
theres the vid part 1 i'll be releasing 2 in a week.
1074144 What is the name of the video?
http://youtu.be/kGfF9PRo7VY A Dramatic Reading of, That One Memory
Dawwwww
1120432 thank you
awww yeah! i dont give a damn about some minor grammar mistakes here! because it is filled with mothafuckin yays! rampaging thumbs up to you!
[youtube=kGfF9PRo7VY] Dramatic reading of 'That One Memory
That idiot didn't post it right
Anyway good story. Had me D'AAWW Ing a couple times and
1835959 Thank ya kindly!
I love it
Nice story, I'm more for the soarindash but i still really liked this