Twilight Sparkle has lied to Princess Celestia; tried to deceive her.
Caught in her misdeed, Twilight needed to repair the damage she had done. Saying that she was sorry and a little groveling should have worked. Celestia is kind. Celestia is forgiving. The fear that Celestia would banish her to magic kindergarten for what she had done, was just that, an irrational fear. It should have worked. It would have if Trixie had kept her big... fat... mouth... closed.
If only she had been banished to magic kindergarten instead.
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Actually, Starlight is a match for Twilight in power, if not more.
Starswirl confirms that a unicorn can be more powerful than an Alicorn. The show makes this canon.
And if you look at Starlight's cutie mark, it's a star with a swirl of magic over it. Meaning it's her destiny to be a match for Starswirl.
Trixie and Celestia hitting it off as friends? I love it!
Cracking stuff, an excellent piece.
8852048 When? I'm assuming it's sometime in the season 7 finale, but I don't remember it.
On a separate matter, I never understood where Twilight's antagonism against Trixie came from. At the end of Magic Duel, it was made quite clear that Twilight had forgiven Trixie, as her actions had been agravated by the Alicorn Amulet, and so like Princess Luna, she was not responsible for her actions.
If anything she should have been happy to see that Trixie was making friendships of her own, and that Starlight had reached out to her.
The tonal shifts were a bit too common.
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I can answer that for you. Twilight only forgave Trixie but she didn't befriend her at the end of Magic Duel. Forgiving a person is different then liking or accepting a person. Which Twilight has shown this before in Equestria girl movie "Rainbow Rocks." with Sunset Shimmer. Discord himself revealed that flaw as well in later Episode in which he finally befriended the remaining main 6 and Twilight taught he put them under a spell because how greatly he bonded with them.
In other words Twilight can forgive a person easily but trusting or accepting is a bit harder for her. Also Trixie become only hostile in "In no 2nd prances" after Twilight subtle revealed that she disapproved of Starlight choice for "new" friend.
It is just one of Twilight more subtle flaws she has as a character. She easy to forgive, but not easy to trust a person if they did something wrong before they got bonded/befriended.
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Tonal shifts? What are tonal shifts?
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[Re-reads story. Spots 2 errors. (Should have read it a second time after I fixed
allalmost all the errors introduced when I copy-pasted the story into the edit box.)]I'm not a professional or hobbyist writer so I'm having trouble seeing these shifts you've mentioned. I will say this in my defense: Comedy is best when there is something to contrast it to. You can have 100% comedy, but it won't have the same impact as comedy that is surrounded by something a bit more serious. I think that what caused these tonal shift that you mentioned. I have added the slice of life tag to the story to make clear that this not a pure comedy.
If I am wrong feel free to correct me.
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If you're using permanently crippling someone and achieving nigh-godhood as contrasts, the joke(s) should be excellent.
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Unfortunately the theme I was using, roasts, is limited to verbal assaults: jibes, barbs, put downs, embarrassing stories and the like. I couldn't use death, dismemberment, disfigurement or disease to maximize the contrast, to heighten the effects of the comedy. Such was the limits I imposed on myself. Unfortunate but I made do.
I feel as if a lot of the writing here was stilted. Part of that may be the frequent dialogue breaks in between characters, especially with Trixie's manner of speaking. But there's definitely a weird dissonance reading it through. Giving it a quick skim on a second read-through, I'd say there's really not enough feeling to any of the characters. They don't really seem to have internal thoughts, which would make it a richer piece. It's all external.
Still, Trixie and Princess Celestia certainly appear to have hit it off quite well. Part of their dynamic requires tuning down on Trixie's most egregious character quirks. Celestia is also good at offering some Daoist advice, as it's pretty obvious that while Trixie is a good pony with some bad incidents, she's also a little obnoxious. That, and she was quick to admit to her failings and shortcomings, such as being the reason Twilight and Glimmy were late for dinner.
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Afraid I have to agree here. I like what the fic was going for, laughed at several of the jokes, but the characters felt... well, out-of-character at several points, there were random alterations to the canon (Celestia spies, Trixie being magically burnt-out for months), Twilight was depicted as more of a jerk/liar, Celestia seemed to have little or no real regard for Twilight's station as a princess (something she has been desperately trying to build up in Twilight in-canon), Trixie is far smoother in dialogue and almost never makes a silly pratfall socially, etc.,
It's all just very distracting, whereas in a fic like this I feel like either every deviation from canon should be intentionally funny (as the show often does it, becoming suddenly outlandish for the sake of a really good joke) or really interesting. I felt most of these didn't add much, and the fic wasn't screwball enough (especially starting out) for me to just disregard all of it.
I feel like the author had a strong idea here, but struggled in execution, is all. Better luck next time. I hope my criticism aids you in making better design decisions down the line.