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Admiral Biscuit


"This was quite well written, and the characters had a very natural feeling back and forth. Shame I didn't like it at all."

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This story is a sequel to Derpy Accidentally a Portal Gun V: Tetralogy


In the conclusion to the thrilling* Derpy Accidentally A Portal Gun Franchise, Sparkler finds herself stranded on Earth, in a cardboard box. Can she survive Flint long enough to be summoned back to Equestria?

Of course she can, because she has a particular set of skills.

Can Flint survive her?

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*for some values of 'thrilling'

Chapters (4)
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Comments ( 35 )

And this people is why we can't have ponies visit us. We are greedy and stupid. Go Amethyst!

Well that happened. It was a good time to get out of that town the way it was.

A my little dashie based story with Sparkler? Count me in! And shouldn’t she say Buck instead of Fuck?

Sensible choice, Frederick. You can even hope that Amethyst won't hold a grudge.

He tumbled forward into the spread of buckshot and expired on the floor,

period, not comma.

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A my little dashie based story with Sparkler? Count me in!

Suggested (and pre-read) but the author of My Little Dashie, no less.

And shouldn’t she say Buck instead of Fuck?

When my ponies swear, they mostly use real curses.

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I know, right? Good thing that Amethyst knows how to deal with humans, even without being able to use her horn.

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She's a pro at this. Years of practice fighting off changelings, humans in Equestria, and then getting sucked into Battlefield IRL.

The humans aren't ready for her.

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I guess i got too excited finally writing the unicorn with a shotgun scene I've always wanted. :rainbowlaugh:
Correction made; thank you!

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On the plus side for Frederick, he's got what's left in that sack of gold to start a new life far, far away from Flint, and this is the perfect opportunity to do so.

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She's probably not mad at him. Probably. He should certainly hope she isn't, anyway.

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Then why hasn’t anypony tried to make her join the Royal Guards yet?

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Considering the line

People betray you, she thought as she charged up the stairs, well ahead of the guy with the knife.Sooner or later.

I would run and work on my Pleading for Mercy face.

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Then why hasn’t anypony tried to make her join the Royal Guards yet?

She's not really into discipline, plus she's probably a little bit too trigger happy for them. She's more of a special ops type of pony.

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Considering the line

People betray you, she thought as she charged up the stairs, well ahead of the guy with the knife.Sooner or later.

I would run and work on myPleading for Mercyface.

Oh, yeah. Good point, there. She's probably not mad enough at him to chase him for too long. But maybe if he does come back, he ought to have a nice big apology bouquet.

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I see. If the Royal Guard would have a special ops unit, she would be the perfect candidat. Reminds me of a OC of mine that is also kinda the stealth type.

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Actually, funny story, ROBCakeran53 and I were talking about special ops ponies at the bar, too, and I wondered if they had camouflage coats. Or maybe an enchantment like the ones that the guardponies presumably have that makes them all look alike.

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Good idea. Said OC Of mine is also in the Royal GUard but indirectly.

Well. That was a trip. I am kind of sorry I didn't follow along with the journey as it went, but this was still an incredible amount of fun. Thank you for it. I'm definitely going to need to remember that individual unicorn Kryptonite concept at some point.

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Well. That was a trip.

:heart:

I am kind of sorry I didn't follow along with the journey as it went, but this was still an incredible amount of fun.

I'm not sure if this is one of those things that was better reading once/year, or if seeing it all in one go is the right way to do it. Also, FWIW I think the third one is the best overall.

I'm definitely going to need to remember that individual unicorn Kryptonite concept at some point.

Oh, yeah, totally! If nothing else, that drunken idea of ROBCakeran and I is totally worth keeping for later.

Also, thinking on that, if it applied to pony Sunset, would it also apply to humanized Sunset; secondly, might it apply to the human analogues of unicorns? Does EqG Sparkler also have some sort of problem with peanut butter? Can Sci-Twi not deal with cheese, especially in quesadilla form?

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Looks good. In my stories, most humans were part of the military before going to Equestria and the Royal Guard is the closest job to this, isn’t it?

And did I mention I enjoy this chats with you?

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Looks good. In my stories, most humans were part of the military before going to Equestria and the Royal Guard is the closest job to this, isn’t it?

It's probably the closest. There's obviously some fanon argument about how military the Royal Guard is (especially since it generally falls to Twilight and company to fix things instead of the Royal Guard). The Wonderbolts is another possibility, although of course not being able to fly would be a downside to a human having a career with them.

One thing that probably isn't in any story (not one that I know of, anyhow) is a Coastie joining some sort of pony S&R team. That might be an interesting plot if done right . . . I assume that ponies have S&R.

And did I mention I enjoy this chats with you?

:heart:

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Yeah, it could be the closest to a military. And I agree with the S&R. If you like to chat more, I can send a PM. Reminds me, for Noi, like with your story, some fans think she and Carrot top are sisters due the sisters special, others think they have a daughter-mother relashionship. I kinda combinated both for my story with her. Their parents died while Noi was still a baby, so her big sister Carrot top took care to her, she Noi sees her as sister and mother.

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Yeah, it could be the closest to a military. And I agree with the S&R. If you like to chat more, I can send a PM.

I'm like, super slow at replying to PMs but that'd be cool. :heart:

Reminds me, for Noi, like with your story, some fans think she and Carrot top are sisters due the sisters special, others think they have a daughter-mother relashionship. I kinda combinated both for my story with her. Their parents died while Noi was still a baby, so her big sister Carrot top took care to her, she Noi sees her as sister and mother.

That's a pairing where I'm not opposed to mother/daughter (after all, it's not like we know how old Carrot Top is), but it seemed to me that she was more like a big sister. Obviously, it's canon that AJ's parents are dead and presumably AJ and Apple Bloom have a combination mother/daughter and sister/sister relationship.

Off the top of my head, I can't think of any ponies in Ponyville who are likely to be Carrot Top's parents. I do think that Carrot Cake is her older brother, though.

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Okay. And with Noi, I meant it’s supposed to be a combination of mother/daughter and sister/sister relationship like with AJ and AB.

:rainbowlaugh: I just read this whole series, it was a blast!

Any chance of more sequels?

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