V - Her
I barely even remember the next few seconds—there's a hole in my memory from me behind the podium to the doors shutting between Lily and me. My mind probably blacked out the part where I walked with my head down past her, unable to look, unable to speak, and most of all unable to process what was happening.
But I did end up looking one last time. One last moment, before the doors closed between us. It was the last time I saw Lily Flower. I think I expected her to have an emotionless gaze, maybe not even in my direction. Or worse, she could have been sneering. But she didn't. And she wasn't. She held her head high and turned it away from me. She was smiling—wide and full of her feelings. I didn't understand it. I hated it. I hated that happy look so much. I suppose that says a lot more about me than I care to admit.
The guard cleared his throat. "So how do you know the bride?" he asked.
"I don't," I responded. And maybe I did know how to be sincere, because I looked right at him, despite my burning eyes, and I said, "I've never met her before in my life."
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That was a really emotional story. And such a sad ending...
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Thanks for reading!
Solid tragedy. This is criminally underrated.
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Thanks for stopping by, PP. Always glad to have you as a reader.
I don't know what to say... It's like a piece of my heart has just been ripped out. Tragic
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*hugs* thanks for stopping by.
I had the thought that this is a very personal story, and even if it isn't, it absolutely feels that way. Well done.
I really liked this story. Good use of foreshadowing. I was surprised a few times and was always able to think back and say, "oooooh, that makes sense!"
My only issue was that the main characters gender was never specified until the end of the story, and that really threw me for a loop. The whole time, I'd been reading Streak as a mare.
This was very much a character piece, and it was done well. Two flawed characters, both viewed through the eyes of the bitter one. Both wearing masks, and both uncomfortable with who they are.
A pleasant read, for sure.
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Well, guys can be catty too
But that's interesting insight, Hap. Thanks for sharing the interpretation—the gender of the character was certainly a difficult aspect when I wrote this story. Thanks for stopping by, and see you in the writeoff!
God, that's a fantastic ending, and something so totally plausible to happen than another story that attempts to pull a cheap fairy tale-esque closing for the happy ending crusader types. Very well done! It's a nice, bitter, and somewhat enchanting little piece.
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See, I went back and looked, and couldn't find any indications that it was a male character.
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Thanks, Ice! Glad you found and enjoyed this one; it's really gotten zero traction on this site for some reason.
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I could've sworn there was. My mistake.
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Thanks for writing this! I'm glad I found it. Might blog about it or dump it in a server or two to give it Love. Though, changing the tags to a character that people can search for more easily when they want stories about her could help.
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Oh, thanks a lot, but there's certainly no obligation. It's enough that you've read it.
And to your idea: You know what, why not? It's been live long enough. Let's see what happens.
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Sticking it in a few more groups would really help get the ball rolling for that experiment.
This is indeed criminally underrated.
Oh well. At least it's not inherently tied to MLP, so you can fairly easily rewrite it as an original story and submit to a journal or something.
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Thanks so much for stopping by and for leaving a comment. Big ups!
I'm gonna be depressed after this because this could seriously happen to me later, with how the broken remnants of my current relationship are faring.
Ouch. Just - it was so painful. Ouch, just ouch. I wonder how this story is so Celestia-damned underrated.
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Thank you for reading
Nice story ever. I was attracted here by the Chinese edition. is someone translating your fic?
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I did receive a message once from somebody looking to translate my work to Chinese! Nice to hear it's out there somewhere.
Thanks for stopping by!
My friend, you are cut from a different cloth. Very underrated story.
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Thank you so much for reading and commenting
Ouch.
The narrating character is obviously in the wrong here... but it’s such a sad tale for them. They’ve lived with bitterness in their heart for so long that they became what they beheld in others, and are now so blind that they cannot even see when things have changed or when kindness and an offer at reconnection are offered. This is Darth Plagious levels of tragedy.