It had been a rough week for Sunset after the whole Anon A Miss fiasco left a painful scar on Sunset's soul. Can she get over her pain though and find a little bit of Heaven on Christmas Eve?
Written for the Sunset Shipping Contest: Changing Seasons.
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Pretty awesome! Love to read other pairings with this thme see hwo each ofthe Rainbooms try to make up to Sunset and try to win one last chance if possible.
I 'aaawwwwwed' so hard my hamster ran away
Really good storie, have a like
I second diablo's comment about this theme. This is an awesome premise for a shipping story.
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Not unless you learn to write better, no.
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Have you read one of my stories?
This is a very interesting idea
I feel like I'm missing a lot here. The brevity of the story doesn't do much justice for the relationship you are attempting to create, and I cannot get over the fact that I am missing something because of it. Did this Anon-a-Mis story arc actually have Sunset confess to Pinkie? Because I am going to be honest, I was lost from that exact moment.
I am probably going to read that comic to understand a little more, but as it stands for me, personally, I really don't know what to think. In terms of writing, this wasn't bad at all, but the grammar could have definitely needed a touch up. As I see it, editing is a necessary process of writing. You should be able to do it yourself first, and then you should send it off to someone else. Honestly, you could have fixed quite a few errors on your own through proofreading. Nothing detracted from the story itself, but it helps for readability.
If this story weren't so short, I think I would really enjoy it. I feel that the characterization of Pinkie was perfect, and if I could have seen you flesh her out a little more, I would have been impressed. As this stands, it's not a bad story at all, but you could improve upon this.
If you ask me, this makes the betrayal so much worse....
In my POV, this mean that even though Pinkie loved her so much, she still betrayed her so fast, on so little evidence.
Is this all of the trust Pinkie ever is able to give Sunset?
I would guess that a relationship between Pinkie and Sunset, after this would end up in two ways:
Stories that explain the reason for them turning on her so fast, because they still had not forgiven Sunset, for her three years of evil.
This, in my opinion, give them room to improve their friendship with Sunset, to something better than before.
If forgiveness is achieved.
It sure was a lot to take in of you ask me.
Now that is a great surprise to cheer up someone after a not so great week, especially for what sunset suffered.
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