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DoctorDerpy


The show may have ended, but I'm going to keep on reading until the last writer stops writing!

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Darkness envelops Equestria. No one could have stopped Nightmare Moon from taking over, and with no Celestia and no hope at all the world is in a grim place. Unbeknownst to the new Empress, two colours bring a new light in her precious land of darkness.

A poem in ten parts, this story was created for Monochromatic's Rari/Twi fanfic contest, and funnily enough inspired by their work, The Enchanted Library.

Cover art was drawn by the amazing Multiversecruise.

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Comments ( 13 )

Sounds interesting, I can't wait to read it later tonight!

Well that was diffrwnt. Very impresive.

I am just astonished at a four thousand word fic composed entirely of quatrains. That alone would've been impressive. But to tell a beautiful and evocative love story on top of that? Amazing.

This was an absolute joy to read, thank you so much for sharing!

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Thank you! I'm glad you liked it :twilightsmile:
I can tell you the whole rhyming thing got old fast when you need to write so much, but I'm glad how it came out in the end :twilightsheepish:

Wow, this is amazing!!! :raritystarry: This mine as well be one of the best stories- er, poems I've ever read! I actually don't know what else to say, I'm speechless! I hope this story wins the contest! It is amazing!!! :pinkiehappy:

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Thank you! I wouldn't say it's the best story, but poems are always nice to read, and poems that tell a story even more so. I don't mind if it wins or not I just hope Mono enjoys it too! :twilightsmile:

I wasn't sure how much I'd like this when I saw it was poetry, as I'm not a big fan of it, but this was delightful! The lines were really clever and well thought out. Very skillful indeed! The story itself was interesting too, I liked the alternate universe aspect of this as well as the dream realm. Thank you so much for sharing it with us!

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Thanks Peachy Keen! Really pleased you gave it a try, and even more pleased that you enjoyed it as well :pinkiehappy:

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There's spot after spot where it could be improved, but this is damned impressive, well done. :)

The last thing I expected was to find poetry in this contest. I actually came across this first when I started to read the stories and decided to skip it until the end. More because I wasn't in the right headspace to properly appreciate poetry at the time rather than any serious thoughts against it. Still, I'm glad I went through it. I haven't been a poet in a very long time, but I will say that the story did move me far more than I expected. Especially since the author is telling a variant AU of Nightmare Moon's attack. While the ending is indeed rushed a little, I actually don't think the story suffers too much from that.

It was a gorgeous, wonderous piece.

(I was actually one of the judges for the contest and I realized I'd never posted my comments, so very sorry for forgetting that and thank you for such a UNIQUE piece!)

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Wow! Thanks for the comment Novel, it was nice to see this out of the blue. Iā€™m happy that you liked it, it means a lot to hear you say that :twilightsmile:

The attempt was impressive, and I have to admire your ambition, but the execution leaves something to be desired. Still, thank you for the effort.

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Author Interviewer

Hi, I did you a reading! Unfortunately, you can hear all the spots where the meter doesn't work really well. :/

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