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Lise Eclaire

If you happen to cry, I will be there. If you happen to smile, will you do the same for me?


On the eve of the rest of their lives, Sweetie Belle has a chat with Scootaloo about life and wings.

Special thanks to Astrarian for editing.

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:unsuresweetie: Dragons have the same thing about wings...
:scootangel: I didn't know so Spikes in the same boat I'm in.
:unsuresweetie: More like under it
:scootangel: ouch!
:moustache: Way to go...
:duck: It's not ....
:twilightoops: nope nope nope nope
:moustache: they don't even have funny pills for it.:raritystarry::facehoof:
:pinkiehappy: Like dancing pigeons !

That ending was surprisingly cute :twilightsmile:

8104941 You're telling me! Scootaloo's cute lil tiny wings, and Sweetie Belle... mmm.

Short and sweet.

"Wait!" Sweetie Belle jumped to her hooves. "All the times Diamond Tiara called you micro wings, does that mean...?"
"Oh, definitely." Scootaloo hissed. "That saddleskin knew exactly what she was saying. You've no idea how many times I wanted to kick her in the muzzle. Thank the stars she got herself a colt."

That is the only part of this that I take issue with, considering Crusaders of the Lost Mark.

Otherwise, this was pretty good.

8104923 :D I've missed your comments :)))


What am I going to do with you two? :P

8105366 :D Thanks, King :)

8105633 Yes, it is a bit of a stretch. By my theory DT is no longer an enemy, but that one annoying friend that says things to spite every now and again :)

8106066 SHIP EEEET :pinkiecrazy::heart:

8106113 This is meant to be a girl chat, not a ship! :P

8106072. ..Eh, works for me

Don't worry, Scoots. If it exists, it's someone's fetish. You iust need to find someone who has a thing for the chairmare of the itty bitty flitty committee.


Okay, yeah, I had that coming. Ow.

This explains why Bulk Biceps is so obsessed with lifting.... he's compensating.

8106119 so? Things change! Embrace change, ship it! :pinkiecrazy:

It's cute as two girls talking too. It's just us dirty, dirty shippers trying to get our fix :rainbowwild:

8106064 :unsuresweetie: Size is everything!
:raritystarry: Sweetie Belle where did you get such an idea
:unsuresweetie: Spikes birthday that one time He was way bigger then any stallion I've ever seen
:raritycry: SWEETIE BELLE!
:moustache: I was rather impressive wouldn't you say
:twilightoops: Spike!
:duck: Well he wasn't lying
:unsuresweetie: I saw her take a long peek :applecry: More like a stare :scootangel: She was totally hooked
:facehoof: such dirty minds!

Aw Scoots it'll be ok and if not Sweetie's there. :rainbowwild:

It's a pretty nice scene all in all, but it really does feel like it's exactly that: a scene from something larger. I think it's probably as a result of that final line; the weighting of it feels a little off, and I did find myself double-checking that the fic wasn't incomplete. Perhaps developing the last few paragraphs to avoid the sense of closure/acceptance from feeling so sudden might also help.

I don't know whether it was intentional, but I did like the reality of Scoots' dilemma; criticising an unhealthy social status quo whilst simultaneously feeling as though she has no other choice but to participate in it. Some of the other elements didn't work quite as well for me, and didn't explore the raised issues in sufficient depth and with the same subtlety for me to find the piece overly thought-provoking. That, of course, makes the presumption that that was your objective in the first place, and so perhaps I should just learn to enjoy a story at face value. :twilightsmile:

Also: dialogue was quite nice, and I got a good sense of friendship between Scoots and SB in a relatively short space of time. So nice work there!

8106374 :) I can't find the clip on YouTube, but if you can watch the Wanderbolt Academy episode (specifically the look Spitfire gives him)

8106394 pfft! :P Comtrary to popular belief I'm not a shipper :D

8107016 Well, Scoots is the one with most issues in the show...

8108281 Ceffyl! Huge thanks for the review :D
Sadly yes, is just a one off scene (as I practice writing fluff). The plan is to master it enough to include it in a larger work at some point :D
I'll try to do a better filly Twi and filly Rarity short in the next few weeks :)

8110381 lies! There's no such thing as a no shipper. There are only those who have found our holy calling, and those that wallow in their deafness to it! :pinkiecrazy:

This actually reminds me of two things I've sometimes pondered.

Number one: Pegasi are the most insular of the greater pony tribes. They may say Unicorns are snobs, but they're not the ones whose ancestral home is near-unlivable for non-winged ponies.

Number two: It's possible even non-Pegasi find large wings attractive. The reason for this is interbreeding between tribes. In cosmopolitan places like Ponyville, you will eventually get mixed families much faster than in enclaves like Cloudsdale. Even Canterlot has a fair number of non-Unicorns. That would also mean that, unfortunately, Scootaloo can't just date an Earth Pony or Unicorn. They'd also find big wings sexy even though they don't have any themselves.

Delicious tiny wings.

any chance of a sequel, or even prequel(s) to this story? and awesome work by the way

"Nah, only matters if you're a pegasus."

I wonder If that applies to alicorns?

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