Breakage

After an argument with Twilight, Luna is out of sorts. Smasher, a clumsy colt with a penchant for breaking valuables, isn’t having the best day either.

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Sunshines Wings

Sunshines Wings #1 · Mar 21st, 2017 · 1 · ·

That was an exceptional story! I like how the plot wasn't entirely focused on the fight, that can get boring. This was well thought out and flowed wonderfully. It didn't feel rushed or choppy. Very well done!

Eclipse Guardian

Eclipse Guardian #2 · Mar 21st, 2017 · 1 · ·

Great story. I loved it.

dlazerous

dlazerous #3 · Mar 22nd, 2017 · 1 · ·

Wonderfully done, I the throughly enjoyed this.

TheLastBrunnenG

TheLastBrunnenG #4 · Mar 23rd, 2017 · 1 · ·

Good choice to have the argument offscreen and to stick with Luna’s perspective throughout. Luna’s worries were palpable and her advice to the colt was spot-on, even though we all know in the end she’d end up taking her own advice. Nicely done!

Xanni

Xanni #5 · Mar 31st, 2017 · · ·

"Tomb" should be "tome" - two very different words! Also "exasperated" should be "exacerbated", and "charleton" is presumably meant to be "charlatan". Fun story!

latte89

latte89 #6 · Mar 31st, 2017 · 1 · ·

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Man, tomb/tome has been my undoing lately. Thanks. Fixed.

lillytheomegawolf

lillytheomegawolf #7 · Apr 27th, 2017 · 1 · ·

Very nice.
I like how accepting the young ones are and I like the little one that Luna had to deal with.

fractalman

fractalman #8 · Oct 10th, 2017 · · ·

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And now I want to see a story with the line "May this eldtricth tome be your everlasting tomb, foul beast!"

SPark

SPark #9 · Jan 26th, 2018 · 6 · ·

I quite enjoyed this. It's the kind of thing that could perhaps be a show episode, if they ever actually did anything with mare romances, anyway. Very sweet.

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