• Published 3rd Apr 2017
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the dragonfire alicorn an anthros of harmony tie in - Tempest_Flare



hey my namei s Ayumi my penpal Rina sent my a strange email signed Pinkie a couple days ago in response to my signing up for a student exchange progam that would letme meet her in person my screen glowed a deep redish purple and now i've changed

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Chapter 1

The Dragonfire Alicorn
An Aspects of Harmony Tie-In
By Tempest Flare


The day started normally enough for me. I woke up, got dressed and Skype chatted with my sister at our first home in the United States. I told her that Mom and Dad had given the old house at the back of our 40-acre farm here in southern Siberia.

Oh, sorry. Guess I should introduce myself, huh? Well, my name is Ayumi Tempest Flare Dno’oove. I’m a pegasister; a female teen\adult fan of My Little Pony: Friendship is Magic. I’m 19 years old, but due to my parents moving back to Russia before I graduated in America, I had to start high school from my junior year again. Thus I signed up for a foreign exchange program to finish those last two years with the only friend I kept in touch with during the whole ordeal.

The friend I'm talking about is my penpal, Rina. The first letter I got from her was in third grade when my teacher decided that I needed somepony to talk to. I was a loner; an outcast, if you will, due to how I had a Russian-American father and a Japanese mother who had moved to Rochester, New York after my older sister was born so that my dad could get a job at Kodak. But after four years he was laid off, so when I was born we lived off of welfare and my dad’s odd jobs. My teacher was friends with Rina’s mother and got letters from them every month. She also knew my mother wanted me to practice writing, so she talked with both our parents and covered the mailing fees.

When I first wrote to Rina, I was hesitant, to say the least. I wrote a simple half page saying hi and telling her a little about myself. I wasn’t expecting to get more than a page of the same in return. Oh, boy! Was I wrong! What I got back could be called a manuscript, it was so thick! The girl wrote me her whole life’s story just as a way to say hi!

The reason I mentioned Rina is that after Skyping with my older sister, I got an email from her signed ‘Pinkie Pie’. I wrote back, asking her when she found the show and finally realized why I called her ‘Pinks’ for the last few years. After sending the email, I tried shutting my laptop down, but instead got shocked by static build-up - as usual when I forget to de-static the screen after waking up.

So while I shook off the pins and needles that came with the shock, the changes started. sitting on my bed I didn’t notice how my feet shifted into hooves and midnight purple fur and scales started to grow up from those hooves. by the time I stood up, the fur and scales had only reached mid-thigh. But inside me, some things had already changed. My heart and lungs had increased in efficiency and durability.

These changes also made me very tired, and I lay down to take a nap. As I slept the changes sped up. The fur and scales covered my whole body and my -already large- DDD cup bust grew to H cups while I grew three inches taller from 5’6” to 5’9” and I gained about 300 pounds of muscle, bone and other tissue, though I actually slimmed down due to the extra weight being that of increased density instead of regular muscle, bone and tissue gain, similar to how Superman or Wolverine weigh more than a normal human does in the comics.

A 9 inch long curved alicorn horn grew from the forehead of my new muzzle, while two curving dragon horns sprouted from the sides of my head just above my temples, while my ears migrated up the sides of my head reforming into pony ears larger than normal with scales on the edges. Leathery batlike wings grew out my back. If extended, these wings would span 15 feet. My hands shifted from human’s to that of a dragon, with retracting claws. My tail and mane changed color as they grew in. My dark red hair remained, but only as a streak, while midnight blue and near-white gray made up the rest.

When I awoke, I was laying on my stomach with my wings partially extended. Looking at my clock told me it was eleven at night. I felt fully awake and energized as if my four-hour nap was a full twelve hours of rest. Getting out of bed, I felt and heard my hooves touch the floor. Thinking something was different I walked over to my full-length mirror and instinctively lit my hand and horns alight. To say I was shocked would be a... bit of a lie as I sometimes lucid-dreamed of this happening to me. But after falling on my flank and feeling the pain, I knew I wasn’t asleep.

Standing up, I turned on my bedroom light and looked at my reflection. I noticed I looked like my main oc Ayumi-Twilight Aurora Sparkle, A.K.A. Tempest Flare. Realizing I had somehow become Tempest, I decided to test something. Focusing on my hooves, I imagined them turning into a fusion of human feet and dragon back claws. As I thought, they would they transform into what I pictured. Practicing a bit to see just how fast I could change my hooves showed me I could change them in a split second if need be. Satisfied with that, I moved on to larger parts of my body. I practiced Shifting -as I dubbed it- the scales on the leading edges of both my wings into sharp obsidian-like blades only much more durable.

While still practicing shifting, I levitated my laptop over to me. Rereading Rina’s email and her reply told me all I needed to know to determine that this wasn’t an isolated phenomenon. Rina’s reply went something like this.


“Hey there, you silly billy! it’s been a while. I just got your email and I’m super duper excited to finally meet you next week! You may not recognize me at first as I've… well, let’s just say I've changed since the last time I sent you a picture. But you’ll know it’s me, I promise. Cross my heart, hope to fly, stick a cupcake in my eye! I can’t wait!

Your super duper bestest penpal,

Rina/Pinkie Pie”


Figuring that Rina had somehow changed into Pinkie, I also thought there might be another Twilight Sparkle and decided to Shift my form slightly. I changed my horn length from its 9-inch norm to a more reasonable 6 inches. I left my pony fur and hair the same, due to the vast difference to my canon counterpart, but recolored my scales black. I grew out my canines a bit to make any snarl more threatening on my hybrid muzzle. The biggest thing I changed was my cutie mark. It was, at first, the normal six-pointed star. Now it had a blue sun and moon behind it to mark who my pony mothers were.

Satisfied I wouldn't be mistaken for my canon counterpart, I left it at that and looked at my closet. Using what I knew about magic from reading so many fanfics -and also writing a few-, I cast a hammerspace pocket spell to store my clothes -which had changed as I did- and was surprised to find a selection of armor, a couple of swords and a few spell books all addressed to me from the Equestria I thought Tempest up in. One of the books had a note inside saying these were gifts from a mother to her daughter and that when I received them I was to take the moon pendant from the silver armor and tap it twice as thanks.

I grabbed said pendant and tapped it twice as told. Knowing that mama would get the message, I put the pendant on under my shirt. And smiled. I continued packing up till all I had left in the whole house was my Ps3, my laptop, some games for both and a week's worth of... cleanish clothes to change into.

Stepping outside into the night, I felt as if I was ready to take on the world, but in my mind I knew I would have to practice with my newfound abilities if I would truly be able to match my canon counterpart someday. So began a grueling week of training.

As the week wore on, I took to practicing the spells within the books mama had given me. The spells were all offensive and mobility based, but I figured I needed something more powerful than Shiny’s shield spell and Trixie’s illusions. I could make do in those departments. The first thing I learned was that at my top speed, my gallop would cause the world to blur around me. The second thing was that I could breathe all the normal dragon elements; fire, ice, lightning, and some interesting ones as well: lava, steam, condensed light -a.k,a,, a freaking laser-, that kind of thing.

I learned how to teleport long distances, up to 40 miles. Though any more and I would strain my magic. I also figured out if my theory on just how fast base Rainbow Dash was before and after she activated her sonic rainboom was correct. And to my surprise, I wasn’t just right in the basic concept, but my whole theory turned out correct!

From what happened to me when trying the sonic rainboom myself. I could infer that about the same would happen to Rainbow Dash and any other winged creature who tried the same, now that magic could be channeled and controlled. Using Pegasus magic I bypassed the normal sound barrier without the sonic boom and continued to increase in speed rapidly. Once I hit the Mach 5 barrier, my magic started having trouble keeping up so I forced my magic into overdrive and heard a massive *KABOOM!* behind me as a ring of light expanded and my speed instantly doubled. Slowing down I let my speed bleed off ‘till I was just coasting at 300 miles an hour.

At the end of the week, I had trained both my body and mind in full. I packed up the last of my things in the hammerspace pocket and took to the air. As I got closer to the airport, I decided that I would just wing it if Pinkie’s mom said no to me living with them. After all, I don’t think Cloudy would be too welcoming to me at first, anyways.

Customs at first wouldn’t let me through, but after showing them my new id and the exchange paperwork, they decided I was more of a headache than they needed. I had chartered a private plane and crew to take me to Sydney. From there, I would fly under my own power to Pinkie’s hometown.

The crew was a little unnerved at my fearsome appearance at first, but I told them I only looked this way to dissuade people from trying to gold-dig me. Oh. Guess you’re wondering how I could afford all this? Well, truth is that, due to my uncle willing me over, 20 million US dollars later I'm pretty much set for life, but I live frugally. As for the first 18 years of my life, I was poorer than I would like to admit.

While on the plane, I slept. I had found I could sleep for four hours and be fully functional the next day. This had helped me immensely with my week’s worth of training/self-induced torture and it had the added benefit of giving me more time to read! I woke up a couple minutes before landing and got my stuff ready for customs.

Landing in Sydney was just as headache-inducing as leaving Russia, if not more so, as the government here knew about the anthro phenomenon and had set up procedures to detain any anthros coming into the country on grounds of threatening national security. They eventually gave me a pass as my exchange program was sponsored by NATO and the UN and I had already filed all proper paperwork for an anthro to enter the country after finding out about it in the first place. So after three hours of red tape cutting, I was free to take to the air again.

The feeling of flying under your own power is something indescribable. All who have tried to in the past have failed miserably and even the best can only call it the feeling of pure, unadulterated freedom. In truth, it’s so much more than that. If you’ve done it, you’ll know what I'm talking about, but to those who can’t, I truly pity you, as I hated being bound by gravity as a human.

As I flew through the air, I let out a whoop of sheer joy. I was my favorite character ever and I wasn’t alone;! the customs regulations had proven that! I was flying towards meeting my oldest friend in-pony for the first time and I would most likely meet my pony mothers if the rumors of Moonie showing up were true. So, yeah. It was a good day.

Then it hit me; I felt the weave embrace me and saw the connections I would make with the mane seven -Sunset included-. The future I saw was blurry, but Moonie was clear. I had to find her! I also saw a ship with Tia’s cutie mark with me entering it. Then the vision faded.

I was left flying over a small wood and as I slowed down. I saw the boat from the vision and landed. Using a spell I learned, I sensed no others nearby, but still felt a massive amount of magic coming off the ship itself. Reading the Equestrian script on the side, it said, ‘Star Seeker’.

After looking around, I entered the ship. Lighting my horns, I saw that there used to be a box sitting in the hold, but the magic I was sensing was from above me. Climbing up to the captain's cabin, I felt the magic coming from a long box sitting on the remains of the bed. Picking up the box I found it to be both light and heavy. Upon opening the box I found two things inside. One was a set of short ninjato-like blades with my cutie mark engraved into the handles, and the other was a black version of the alicorn amulet. I grabbed the swords and strapped them on my back, but I was wary of the amulet. Still, the magic I sensed coming from it wasn’t evil or malevolent, but dark. Just dark. Knowing it’s the will of the creator or user that make dark things evil, I touched the amulet. I was blinded by a flash of black light as the amulet reacted to my magic.

When I could see again I was wearing the silver armor from my hammerspace pocket. The moon pendant and alicorn amulet had fused into a purple siren pendant. Thinking this was too weird, I put the armor back in the hammerspace pocket. but still I wore the pendant. The weave showed me this pendant was more than it seemed, and that it was the equal to the Element of Magic in power.

Leaving the ‘Star Seeker’, I took to the air again, landing just out of sight by the school and waited.

Comments ( 50 )

Not to be rude, but please fix your grammar. When you do, then I'll read it.

I agree. I would recommend Tide Hunter or Chrome Masquerade. They have been nice enough to help me edit in my fan fics.

Sydney, Australia. Not certain if this is the exact city the fics take place in, you'd have to ask the author of Lavender Heart.

hey my name is Ayumi my penpal Rina sent my a strange email signed Pinkie a couple days ago in response to my signing up for a student exchange program that would let me meet her in person my screen glowed a deep redish purple and now i've changed oh well guess my secret ponysona is now my new life good thing i already loved the show i bet Rina will flip when she sees my new form! now how do i use these wings

For God's sake, use some punctuation.

8070636 give me a break my phone wouldn't let me

That description though. Classy.

Can I just say that that the comparison between your fic's decription and it's content is astounding? The differences are huge.

8070798 Why the shit are you posting on your phone? The description is the first impression people get of your story, and right now your description is giving the impression of a hyperactive preschooler with little to no respect for grammar and formatting.

8071147 That's a bit harsh, isn't it?

Still, yes, this story has severe flaws. Aside from the fact that I don't recommend posting on your phone, like I said, I'm not going to sit here and roast you. Just check out the groups I mentioned. I'd much rather you get help than get into an argument with us here.

8070119 kinda figured it was a small town on the southeastern coast as there is a small woods close to the sea nearby low chance of that in Sydney itself so maybe a small suburb

8071276 already got two ponies on it. Sry about the crap description compared to the story itself like i said before i posted that part with my phone

8071276 I just said that was the impression we were getting from the description. The story's just fine, but the casual reader couldn't tell that from this wretched description!

8069875 I know... I saw that and cringed hard....

I mean this not to be rude but like already said please A. fix your grammar or B. get an editor.... Please...


Edit: never mind.

I did say I would read it...

First, the title still isn't fixed. Second, wow. This looks like a summary of a self-insert Mary Sue story. You say that the main character lives in what I would assume is our world's Russia, yet her name is Ayumi Tempest Flare Dno’oove? Excuse me, but I believe no one names their child like that, unless they are really diehard MLP fans. Also, there is absolutely no dialogue whatsoever. It feels like a history book. You need to have your characters speak, since a lot of their characteristics can be inferred from what they say and how they say it. Allowing us to see their thoughts and emotions are also nice.

That's only for general writing. The content, on the other hand.... I know I shouldn't be one to speak. After all, if you check my sole story, it's also written pretty badly. But come on, this story is another example of people self-inserting themselves into it and making themselves overpowered. It's just not a fun story to read.

I would suggest you check out the groups mentioned by the other commenters, but my personal suggestion is to read the stories in the Featured box. They're there for a reason, and that is because they are good, well-written stories.

Hope I can see you improve :)

8072856 have a few things to say to your assessment 1 This is a tie in to a collab story 2 the reason it sounds like a history is because it is it's a small backstory of my character 3 the mary sue bit I admit to but there are even worse offenders in the mane story 4 reread the name bit my character had her name legally changed to Ayumi Tempest Flare Dno'oove From Ayumi Alexia Selene Dno'oove.

All in all the first chapter is just a way to introduce my character and a slice of her backstory Please read both 'Lavender Heart' and 'Aspects of Harmony' in the 'Anthros of Harmony' group that this story is featured in.

8073438
If it's a tie-in or a sequel, it would be good to link it in the story description so people wouldn't assume it is a stand-alone story.

Also, I rechecked, there is nothing about Ayumi legally changing her name in the beginning. If it's somewhere in the middle, which I'll admit I lightly skimmed, it's still a bad place to put a detail like that.

About the Mary Sue part. Just because there are worse offenders doesn't mean you should still do it. It's like saying stealing a few dollars is OK since some people steal a lot more than that.

Lastly, you should note somewhere, somehow that the first chapter is a retelling of previous events. An example could be making the title "Where We Left Off".

8071309 Ah, "Moonie." Nightmare Moon will have been defeated and turned back to human when she reaches where the main cast are. You know this. However, does Ayumi's mention of her somehow hint that there is another one somewhere already?

8110276 Eyup but due to factors out of Moonie's control she has yet to contact Luna or Celest (my nickname for Celestia) though she is already on earth and knows I have already Shifted :twilightsmile:

8110317 So Moonie is not quite the Nightmare Moon we know, then? Is she somehow good? That would sound almost like Nyx from Past Sins.

8110730 yes and no Moonie is good but she isn't like Nyx. in her's and Tempe's timeline she and Luna were secret lovers and wives.

8607093
I don't know if the chapter is out yet but my first chapter leads directly into one of the two main stories

Continue?

9060929 The chapter isn't out yet I'm waiting till that chapter is posted to post my second chapter

9061079 sorry but I don't want to jump too far ahead of the main story I'm already doing that in Harmony Mouse

9061080
You only posted one chapter.

9061082
I know. I'm working as a coauthor in Harmony Mouse. Like I said earlier I'll post the next chapter of this story after the chapter in the main story is posted as that story contains major details that pertain to my stories and you wouldn't be able to follow the story without.

9061088
To be honest I just want to see what happens in this particular story I'm not reading the other

9061092
sorry but the stories cross over a lot so it's hard to make chapters that don't

8070119
I believe Perth, WEstern Australia is where anthro Twilight and her friends attend school. Twilight visits Geographe Bay and finds the Elements of Harmony there. On one beach, she meets anthro Applejack and they talk about the different types of pony anthros: Pegasi, Earth Ponies, Unicorns, and the Alicorns. Later we meet other anthros who have assumed new forms (Bat ponies, etc). There are dragons like Spike and Ember, and many others yet to be discovered like Buffalo, Yak, Reformed Changelings, Hippogryphs and Griffons.

9061096 Curb your excitement and toxicity, please. People have lives. They do not exist solely to cater to your every whim. Give this poor writer a damn break. Hell, give every writer you go after a damn break.

10825107
I do believe I have considering this comment is THREE YEARS OLD.

10825271
You know that you are the reason I stopped writing this story

10825399
.....Really? I even stopped asking because I realized I went too far.

10826595
To be fair I also became homeless for awhile around then so I had no consistent internet for a few weeks

10826678
.....I am SO Sorry to hear that. I Hope you have a warm Home now.

Then it hit me; I felt the weave embrace me and saw the connections I would make with the mane seven -Sunset included-. The future I saw was blurry, but Moonie was clear. I had to find her! I also saw a ship with Tia’s cutie mark with me entering it. Then the vision faded.

What about Spike though?

11605975
I actually have his story as well I haven't worked on it because it wasn't mine to begin with and I haven't found any inspiration for it

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