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Sky Blue CMC


"You can change destiny, but you can’t change fate.” Simon sighed... “And you and I are fated to be together, I know it in my heart.”

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Life. Death. Two clearly different things. Reality. Dreams. As different as light and darkness. But how different are they really? Sky Blue, orphaned middle child of the Blue family, needs to know. She's been having the same dream every night. But...

...suddenly, she stops dreaming altogether. She sees the shadow that haunted her for seven years... the shadow of her mother's killer.

Contains spoilers for season 6 finale, LoE, and some headcanons. Thou hast been warned.

Cover art designed by yours truly and RavenTheGhost. but mostly Raven.

PM me for the password... if you're Level 3 or higher, I'll tell you. (200+ Star Points)

(I might add more to the long description later, but the short one has 250 characters in it already.)

Chapters (5)
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Obviously, not all the spoilers are in place yet.

That was... interesting? fun? informative! Let us call it informative. My advice on writing slower is that you simply go back and edit it to a slower pace... or do what I do and take a long time to write, but it comes with the advantage of not needing very much editing. I need to change it to a moderate speed, so things actually get done. Until the next chapter!

Found this story through your post on deadpansnarker's page.

I have a couple of questions about the prologue here.

Over two and a half thousand times, seven straight years, she had this dream.

She kept count? I would have lost count by then. :unsuresweetie:

. . . was brainwashed by King Sombra's son, but even if he wasn't, he'd take the Fire Ruby and combine it with the Ice Sapphire and the Nether Emerald to make the Star of Illusions.

Wait, the King Timber Wolf knows how to combine these gems? I wasn't aware that Timber Wolves had the kind of intelligence to do that. I think I would establish in some way here that the Rex had a higher intelligence than a regular Timber Wolf. Unless you're trying to say Sombra's son is the one that would combine them, but if that was the case, then the sentence doesn't read as that. :duck:

"I wonder if one of us will become evil at some point. I can only hope that we don't, but...

Have the crusaders ever done anything to Sky that would lead her to have this concern, or is she naturally untrusting of others? I don't know about you, but I generally don't have these kinds of thoughts about my friends based off of what other people's friends do to them. This is fine as it is, but this is a thought for you going forward with your narration.

Also, wouldn't Sweetie Belle have something to say about this in response? I can't imagine anyone ignoring that statement.

7994523 Sky was worried that she herself would become evil, not her friends. It's a reference to the fact that her sister worked in the Rainbow Factory. Also, she didn't count, she did the math... 7 x 365 is 2555, but two of those years were leap years, so it's 2557 days.

Another question to think about.

Tirek, Antasma, Queen Arachne, The Wither Storm, The Dark Star, The Paradox Myst, and the rest!

I only recognized two names in this list, one of them being a boss from Minecraft. From this quote, I can surmise that we're going to have an ensemble of villainous foe for our protagonists to fight against. I would give an adequate description of each so the audience has something to associate with the names, even if they don't know what they were originally in reference to. as it is in your narration, the unfamiliar names mean nothing besides villain.

And I'm not sure what your star points from the author's description are for exactly, but I guess I get one for recognizing one of the references? :unsuresweetie:

Thank you for taking the time to write this story.

7994595 :raritystarry::raritystarry::raritystarry::raritystarry::raritystarry::raritystarry: 6 Star Points for recognising the Wither Storm. I'll describe the other villains when the heroes meet them.

7994564

There is more than one? I only see one other chapter, unless this is a sequel to something else that I wasn't familiar with? If that was the case, then some of the names and events might be less confusing to me. I was treating this as its own standalone entity.

7994614 (Wait until the other ones come out... I suggest you track the story) Also, Queen Arachne was from Daughter of Discord, the rest were from video games. (The Paradox Myst was from a game I made up)

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Uhh... I thought you were trying to withhold where the references came from to give 'star points' to people for recognizing them. :rainbowhuh:

I only got one of the references; there are still others for people to figure out.

7994625 I only give the points to the first person who gets it... the rest was my bad.

7994625 Also, I didn't say the names of the games.

Before I read this, what is the Dark tag for ?
And how bad does it get ?

8000246 Nightmare spirits... on a scale of 1 to 10... (1 being happy sunshine times and 10 being 50000000000000 Nights at Freddy's, it's about a 7)

Well, Sky will have some stuff to look forward too. Queen Arachne sounds like the Witch Arachne from Soul Eater, but that one might just be me.

I'm interested in seeing the rest of the villains you have assembled. I do wonder why Discord is helping so much.

8021596 Prepare to be pleasantly surprised about Discord... and the villains... and the mountains.

Hello sir and or ma'am. You requested a review for this story in the Reviewer's Café. Unfortunately, ya didnt make it. But don't feel bad. This is a pretty decent story. You'll see the problems I had in the review.

"Don't" put that song in the comments

:pinkiecrazy::pinkiecrazy::pinkiecrazy::pinkiecrazy::pinkiecrazy::pinkiecrazy::pinkiecrazy:

have fun:pinkiecrazy::pinkiecrazy::pinkiecrazy::pinkiecrazy::pinkiecrazy::pinkiecrazy:

8056962 I'll get you back with my next cheeapter... trolling you, my guest!

Hi Sky.
Sorry, I've had a lot on my plate but I think I might give this a read.
First off, let me start by saying I love how you've developed Sweetie and the others. Overall, this looks good.

"So did I, but apparently Peewee the Phoenix returned and gave her some magic feathers or something." Sweetie explained.

I love it when characters react the same way audiences react to these sorts of things.
'Scoots got some magic phoenix feathers an' stuff.

"Nothing, really. I just thought I'd mention it." Sky replied casually.

You aren't related to a certain Miss Pinkie Pie, are you?

The flying badgers would find it and feed off it the way that the Changelings do... or did, before they were reformed."

:rainbowhuh:DABUQ?!:rainbowhuh:
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"I am not Sweetie Belle." The dream world Sweetie Belle replied. "Or, at least, not as you know her. I am... Dreamy Sweetie! You must wake the real me up to make the portal open up again. Find something that gives my dream a great shock, and use it to wake up the real me. I suggest confronting the spirit of the Nether Emerald."

Very, very cryptic and convoluted but good.
I look forward to seeing the contest-winning villains showing up.:pinkiehappy:

Pigasi.
Oh right...Pigs might fly.:trollestia:

"Eleven thousand... that's OVER NINE THOUSAAAAAAAAND!!!

Nope, 1006. You were holding the scouter upside-down.

Can I lick it?"

Wow...All the way to third base, just like that?!

So she asked for Pinkie Pie's sled that she lost in the cave, and when he returned it, it was shattered remains of nothing.

Rosebud was her sled.

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