Twilight Sparkle is the personal student of Princess Celestia, principal and founder of the Eos Dueling School. After her warnings about the possible return of an ancient, evil being are dismissed, Twilight is instructed to go to Ponyville and evaluate a potential Duel Monsters school. There she will meet an unlikely bunch of duelists.
Applejack, a farmer with high level dueling skills. Rainbow Dash, who doesn't know the meaning of the word "defeat". Rarity, who wants to dazzle the world with her dueling skills. Fluttershy, a timid girl who can see more than she lets on and Pinkie Pie, an energetic girl who wants to make others smile with her dueling. They will all have to work together to face the return of the Maiden in the Moon.
A humanized crossover with Yu-Gi-Oh!
Good job, looking forward to the next chapter!
Okay let's see how this rolls over.
Okay, I'm so happy to see your new story. Gotta admit that I didn't expected Celestia to use a Yugi deck against a minor character that uses a Kaiba deck. Once again, I laughed at how much Celestia makes people nervous with her attractiveness. Still, the prologue is solid and I like the new iteration of Nightmare Moon's legend, though I feel sad about Luna's new tragic role in your version. Have a fav. Hope the next chapter comes soon.
Wonder what deck the others will use
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First of all, Welcome back!
It’s awesome to finally see your new Yu-Gi-Oh! crossover story! I like the new angel you’re going with. Tweaking the original story a bit to set up a new backstory. However, I did notice a small error when you were setting up Nightmare Moon. You called her the “Maid” in the Moon. I think you meant to say “Maiden” in the Moon, right? Not that I have anything against an evil maid trying to conquer Equestria but that would be a bit silly to see and a bit hard to take seriously as an ancient evil villain.
[Nightmare Moon] “Beware my feather duster of Doom!”
I did like how you started off with the new background lore to set up the upcoming bad guy but I have to ask. Was Celestia telling all the new duel students this story? It didn’t really feel like she was. If not, then you might want to put some form of indication of the story is changing from the backstory into the current story.
The Eos Duel School sound like it might be this world's version of “Celestia’s School for Gifted Unicorns”. If so, then it sounds like you could get a lot of potential duelists for future chapters out of it. Especially if Ponyville is going to get their very own Duel School too. The possible setups for Duel School events and rivalries sounds awesome! But I have one question about it. What dose “Eos” stand for? I don’t believe that Eos is an actual word. If it is then could you explain it to me please because I’ve never heard of it before?
Also, Eos Duel School gives out structure decks to their new students to use right? The concept of structure decks existing in this story is awesome in my opinion. Especially if it means that Duelists can get their hands on powerful cards like the Blue-Eyes White Dragon. It makes the story more relatable to how the game is played in real life. I can also see the potential for duelists that favor certain cards to group up together and form either teams or gangs that revolve around using different way to summon/use their favored cards. I can just see a Red-Eyes gang trying to prove that the Red-Eyes Black Dragon is the best dragon in Duel Monsters by constantly taking on a gang/team of Blue-Eyes duelists. That would be really funny. However, that being said, I would advise that you make the structure decks hard to get. Like having them be a thing you can only get by joining a duel school or from a duel tournament as a prize. Something along those lines. Otherwise you risk having everyone in the story becoming an overly powerful duelist. Removing the sense that there’s a potential learning curve and end up with a story filled with duelist that are either competent or just have no idea what they’re doing. That’s just my opinion though. You can do whatever you want with your story.
Spike looks like he might be this story’s version of Joe from your last story considering how he reacted to the upskert shot he got from Twilight. If that’s true, then I can’t wait to see what happens when he runs into Rarity.
Well, good for him. He’s always been an underused and underappreciated part of the cast and it would be awesome to actually see Spike assisting Twilight in her duels. Either as a tag partner or as someone you'd have to duel first before you could duel Twilight.
I wonder what kind of deck Spike has.
Also, it would be awesome to see that Spike uses some kind of magical tablet that sends and receives E-mails (AKA Scrolls) to and from Princess Celestia. Seeing as Magic-tech is how Duel Disks work, why not use magic-tech to send and receive mail too? Just a thought.
Now I’m going to try and predict some decks that some characters might use in future chapters starting with Nightmare Moon. I predict that she will run some kind of “Yubel - The Ultimate Nightmare” deck. Just because of the whole “Nightmare” theme that tends to go with her. I’m just going to assume that AJ will actually be the first to duel once the intro chapters start so I predict she will be using either some kind of rock or warrior-type deck.
There are a handful of minor mistakes in the story that I’ve noticed but considering how long this comment is getting I’ll just PM you what little I’ve found later. This new chapter was awesome and I can’t wait to read the next one you make! Keep up the awesome work and I hope you never stop having fun writing your story.
To be fair, one of the definitions of maid is "an unmarried girl or woman especially when young".
Good point.
From Wikipedia: "In Greek mythology, Ēōs is a Titaness and the goddess of the dawn, who rose each morning from her home at the edge of the Oceanus. She had a brother and a sister, Helios, god of the sun, and Selene, goddess of the moon."
I thought it would be fitting.
Not exactly. I clarified they used those structure decks for the benefit of the readers, but plotwise, they are pre-constructed decks for practice. I choose them because, again plotwise, they seemed fitting to show the functions of a Duel Disk, seeing as how they have an extra deck as well as cards with searching and banishing effects. Regarding card rarity, there will be those which are "one of a kind", of course, but for others access will depend mostly on money. So yeah, a team of people using Blue-Eyes White Dragon is perfectly possible.
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I know, and the other term for Maid is “Virgin”. I just thought you should know that most people will read the word Maid and automatically assume you are talking about the profession rather than the unmarried female virgin. That and I just wanted to make sure.
I'm intrigued. But I'll hold on to like or dislike for a bit... Still; good job!
that was awesome and nice job giving Spike the dragunitys
Okay, this chapter was very entertaining. I love the fact that Granny Smith's story about her dueling career was basedon the infamous Kaiba's suicide threat scene. The duel with Spike and Apple Bloom was very entertaining, especially with the strategies Spike used to counter Apple Bloom's cards and how the academy was a good sport about dueling. Pinkie being practically the entire staff of the school and encouraging her students to just have fun was very heartwarming, especially since she didn't had much spotlight on the previous story. Twilight and Spike meeting AJ was extremely hilarious as AJ's workout gave them a free fanservice show and Twilight had to drag Spike and haul ass before something embarrassing happened to them (that scene was nostalgic to Joe's accidentally seein fanservice from the girls, only they were aware of the effect they had on him). Your creative license was also good for this chapter as I didn't expected Big Mac to be a horse rather than a person Overall, I loved the chapter.
Looking good, but my decision will hold a little bit longer...
This was an ok chapter but for some reason it felt shorter than the last chapter. Which is strange seeing as it’s actually longer than the first chapter. Maybe it’s just me.
I was a bit shocked to find out that Big Mac was just a normal horse in this world. I was even more shocked to find out that Pinkie was part of the Apple Family rather than part of the Pie Family. I don’t mind the change but now I’m curious to see what kind of new backstory Pinkie has now that she isn’t AJ’s cousin anymore, but her actual sister in Big Max’s place. 
Anyways, this chapter had a lot of things in it that I found interesting. The first being that they have pegasi in this world! That’s awesome! Are there unicorns and alicorns in this world too? And would they be considered rare and magical creatures to find? Sorry, I got a bit off track. Back to the chapter.
Looks like Applejack is still the same as she was from your last story. Poor Spike didn’t stand a chance against AJ’s white wet shirt.
Also, I get the feeling that Twilight might be romantically drawn to girls considering how she's reacted to both Celestia and Applejack upclose. That, or she might just have a thing for big boobs. 
That should help their school get officially recognized. 
I don’t have anything against Twilight liking girls over boys but it makes me wonder how her future friendships might end up. Either way, at least Twilight and Spike get to be in the same boat when it comes to that stuff.
I also love how Granny Smith’s story about one of her past duels was the Duelist Kingdom rematch for Yugi and Kaiba. Wait... does this make Granny Smith, The Queen of Games?!
Looks like my prediction about who the first intro duelist in this chapter was going to be was way off. Applebloom was actually the first to duel and she runs an Ojama Lockdown deck! I definitely didn’t see that coming. I also like how Spike runs a Dragunity deck. A deck themed around dragons and humans working together really reflects Spike’s role in life. Next up is Twilight Vs Pinkie Pie and I can’t wait to see what kind of decks they use to duel with.
If I had to guess their decks then I would guess that Twilight runs a Spellbook/Prophecy deck and Pinkie might be running a Rank 10 Train deck. I guessed a Spellbook/Prophecy deck for Twilight because books are what Twilight has been most passionate about on the show. Honestly, I don’t know why everyone keeps giving her a Dark Magician deck or a Spell-counter deck. Yes, they technically work with Twilight’s special talent but books have always been her thing. Both back in Canterlot and in Ponyville, she still lives in a giant library for crying out loud! As for why a Rank 10 Train deck for pinkie, mainly because her party cannon is the only real weapon she has. And if you're going to duel/battle someone then why not use what you're good with, right? If she is then all I have to say is: “Watch out Twilight because here comes the pain train!”
Also, I’m changing my prediction for Nightmare Moon’s deck. I think a Malefic deck would work much better than a Yubel deck. The field spell Malefic World even looks like a world of eternal night. That’s why I’m changing my prediction for her.
Just like last time, this comment post is getting a bit long so I’ll PM you any errors I find instead of adding them to the bottom. I really enjoyed reading this chapter and I look forward to reading the upcoming duel between Twilight and Pinkie. Keep up the awesome work and never stop having fun writing your story!
I loved this episode. I got to say, watching Twilight using Pendulum and Fusion was amazing, especially since Spike admits that she can XYZ/Synchro summon as well. I was surprised that Twilight used Odd Eyes Pendulum Dragon as her ace while RD used Clear Wing Synchro Dragon. Speaking of RD, I like how the pegasi are practically the D-Wheelers of the series and her Speedroid deck suits her. Overall, I loved the chapter. Hope the next one comes soon.
One question. Why are Spike and Twilight discussing about AJ being a powerful duelist if Apple Bloom was the one who fought?
Did you changed the chapter? See,s that instead of Spike vs AB, this time it's Spike vs AJ. Also, it seems that this time the fanservice went down with AJ being more modest and Big Mac went back to being an official Apple rather than a horse. I got to say, I love AJ's new deck as it reminds me a bit of Gongenzaka, specializing in summoning monsters with powerful defense and attack options along with the use of Synchro summoning. Overall, it's a good chaoter as it makes Twilight realize that there are powerful duelists out there that don't require any formal education.
I liked the rewrite you did for this chapter. It’s good to see Big Mac back as a character again and it was awesome to see Spike go at it without holding back too. I like how Applejack uses a Superheavy Samurai deck. I think this is the first time anyone has ever had AJ use them. It was also funny to see the reaction on Twilight’s face when she was told that AJ never went to a duel school. Apparently the concept of “Homeschooling” in the way of Duel Monsters never really crossed her mind before.
Well, it looks like Rainbow Dash is going to be the next duelist and I can’t wait to see what kind of deck she runs.
Oh, one more thing! I can understand Spike getting knocked back from AJ’s attacks if she has her duel disk’s damage limiter set to a higher level, but how was Spike able to do the same? Sence him and Twilight come from a duel school that has the damage limiter set to zero, shouldn’t Spike’s duel disk also be at zero and thus not able to push Applejack back with an attack? How does that work?
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The idea was that the limiter at minimum was only for that beginner's class. I should've been more explicit with it.
This was a fun chapter to read. Although, I can’t help noticing something. First, Applejack turns out to be running a Superheavy Samurai deck in the last chapter. Then in this chapter, Twilight is running an Odd-Eyes Pendulum deck and Rainbow Dash is running a Speedroid deck with Clear Wing Synchro Dragon in it. Are you giving the girls the Yu-Gi-Oh! Arc-V decks? If so, then I get the feeling that something really big might be coming up later in the story.
I also like how you turned Turbo Dueling into something called Sky Dueling. That’s quite fitting considering the similarities both dueling styles share. However, It’s a bit sad that anyone without wings can’t participate in a Sky Duel though. Who knows, maybe Turbo Dueling will be a thing in this world too and there might be a chapter where a Sky duelist faces off against a Turbo duelist? That would be awesome!
And the Ponyville Underground Dueling secret is now foreshadowed! Thanks a lot Spike.
I wonder if they would have Psychic Duelist there?
Well, next up is Rarity and I can’t wait to see if she’s still running a Harpie deck or if she’s going to have a completely new deck. If I had to guess Rarity’s deck, then (going off my Arc-V theory) I would predict that she will either be using an Aqua Actress deck or a Melodious deck. Although, Fluttershy would probably fit better with the Melodious deck than Rarity. So I’ll just guess that Rarity will have an Aqua Actress deck and Fluttershy will have a Melodious deck. She is a very good singer after all.
I can’t wait to read your next chapter and like last time, I’ll PM you whatever errors I’ve found. Keep up the awesome work and remember to always have fun writing your story.
I love the chapter. Rarity's characterization was excellent and I love her style of dueling incorporating using her dresses and glowing hands to dazzle the audience, along with the Lunalight/Forbidden combo. It was interesting to learn that Rarity was a graduate from the school or that Blueblood and Cadence are badass duelists from Eos Academy. Anyway, thanks for the chapter.
Wow, thanks for the shot out! But you didn’t really need to do that. After all, I’m not actually your official editor or anything. I’m just helping out a little bit.
But enough about that. This was an awesome chapter! I liked how Rarity has established plans set in place to secure her future. It tells the reader (or at least me) that she can and does think things ahead of time in advance before doing things, and it shows in her dueling too. However, when Twilight started asking her questions, I couldn’t help but feel like Rarity had some kind of mishap somewhere in her past that might have slowed down her attempts to achieve her goals. That should be some interesting backstory to read about in the future.
Also, Rarity running a Lunalight deck feels a bit off. Just like when she was using Harpies in your last story, Rarity is using a deck of sexulized monsters this time around too and Rarity is more of a class and sophistication kind of person rather than a sexual one. While everyone can agree that both Rarity and the Lunalight monsters are beautiful, I can’t see nobles or even members of high class society finding them appealing based on the skimpy clothing her monsters wear. Well, at least in public, that is.
However, since I personally can’t think of a deck that hasn’t been played to death with Rarity in other stories that would fit her better, I’m not going to say that they’re a bad fit. Because despite how people in high class society might (or might not) think about the appearance of the Lunalight monsters, I think they look good. And Rarity is all about looking good. 
Hey, wouldn’t it be awesome if the appearance of Rarity’s monsters of choice are actually slowing her down in achieving her goals of fame and fashion but refused to ditch them because of the opinions of others? It would make for some interesting character development for Rarity and also set up some obstacles for her to overcome in order to achieve her goals. But that’s just my opinion. I can’t wait to actually read what character development is in store for her as the chapters continue.
It’s also nice to see that despite Rarity being able to do anything she needs done by herself, she still has that “Prince Charming” fantasy going on in this world too. Also, finding out that Prince Blueblood is actually a Duke instead of an actual prince was funny. Not to mention him being a top ranked duelist was a surprise. He probably run as Monarch Stun deck or something. Now I would love to see Twilight get over a deck like that.
Finding out that there was an Eros Duel Institute in Manehattan was a nice surprise. Even more so when it turned out to be an all girls school to boot. However, it makes it feel like it’s one of those “You can’t come here unless you’re one of the privileged” kind of schools. Not that it’s a bad thing if it is. Just that it makes me wonder if all of Celestia’s Eros Duel Schools are like that. A place only for the rich and well off people to send their kids to school while everyone else is denied entry and looked down on. Now that I think about it, that definitely sounds like something those rich Canterlot snobs would do. However, having people like Duchess Cadence there to run things will probably keep some of the students from turning into major jerks.
Speaking of Cadence... So she’s known as The Crystal Rose in this world, is she? I wonder if that means she’s running a Gem-Knight deck? You know, seeing as Crystal Rose is a card that was used in the Arc-V Gem-Knight deck.
Now we just need Shining Armor to run a Noble Knight deck and they’ll have a matching theme together. 
Well, this is getting a bit long again so I’ll end it here. I’ll PM you whatever errors I find. Keep up the awesome work and always remember to have fun writing your story!
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True, but I do appreciate the fact you choose to do it when you didn't have to.
I admit I was thinking a bit of the fanservice part when I used Harpies last time, but I assure you it wasn't the case here. After all, Lunalights are nowhere near as skimpy-clothed as Harpies. Cat Dancer and Panther Dancer are probably the ones that "display" the most, with shoulders and neck for the former, and a bit of cleavage and thighs for the latter. I wanted cards that would reflect Rarity's beauty, gracefulness and also her aggressiveness when it comes to fighting. With that in mind, Lunalights seemed a good choice. I also considered Cyber Angels too.
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Don't forget about Lunalight Leo Dancer. She has even less clothing than the other two put together.
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Well, I'll be.
And here I was thinking she wore a blue, skin-tight suit. 
While I like aspects of this story, right now I don't think I'll follow or favorite. I'm not seeing Twilight as a great duelist. I can understand Spike losing, but Twilight was just sad in this chapter. Not saying she should be unbeatable
Thanks to you I realized I been using my nobledragon magician wrong I should read the effects a bit more often
Wow, that duel with Fluttershy was epic. I really love how Twilight managed to use different summoning methods with Odd Eyes and how Fluttershy managed to use the excavate mechanic of the Sylvian Knights to counter most of Twilight's effects and give her a good duel.
i love yugioh (all hail the prediction princess army hmm i can see trixie using them and a flip monster deck fit her character) anyway i only came right now (i have a personal rule that i don't read stories that are not completed) i just thought i'd show you this
and yet you did not include a human tag
p.s are you possibly going to add the link mechanic and the new board
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Thank you for the heads up. Fixed.
Probably, but not until it officialy comes out in the TCG.
Wow, the duel with Pinkie was my favorite so far with all the twists and turns Twilight and Pinkie did. Pinkie being a Dueltainer with a Performapal deck was a great idea and she had an excellent mastery of Pendulum summon. Likewise, Twilight was at her best in this duel due to using all type of summons (even the Ritual Summon that Yuya and Reiji didn't use) to give her Odd Eyes monsters a decisive advantage. Thanks for the chapter
> Spike scratches the back of his head. “But what if it’s something that’s got nothing to do with that?” Twilight quirks an eyebrow. He clicks his tongue and points with his index finger dramatically. “What if some of those monsters actually existed and Princess Celestia had to turn them into cards so they didn’t go around destroying everything?” He suggests enthusiastically.
There is no "Regal sister" card in the NMM deck?
Well done with the chapter.
A very interesting story here, mixing magic with Duel monsters. The opening has a very shonen and original feel to it. My only complaint was that the duel felt a little lifeless. As a fan of Yugioh, I know what the monsters look like, but some of them I didn't and I didn't feel as engrossed by the action as I should. But, I still like the idea and am faving it.
I had goosebumps from that duel.
Though it does leave the question, what was the card that made Pinke surrender?
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It wasn't the card per se, but the effect of Odd-Eyes Gravity Dragon. Even if Pinkie had, let's say, set Performapal Momoncarpet back on the Pendulum Scale and Performapal Parrotrio face-down on the field, Twilight only needed one more good draw, like Oafdragon Magician, to finish the duel. My idea was to show that even a Dueltainer like Pinkie can accept defeat gracefully.
Having said that, I corrected a mistake on the effect of Peformapal Teeter Totter Hopper. It shouldn't have been destroyed by the first attack.
Wow, that duel with Nightmare Moon was epic. Speaking of her, I was shocked to see her appear and effortlessly defeat the girls with her powers before accepting a Duel. Her Phantom Deck had an excellent balance of attack and defense as any move made against her was countered and the finishing move was overwhelming. The ending with Spike defeated in the Shadow Duel and the girls' reaction was tragic. Thanks for the great chapter.
Dude great job!
nice work
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It feels like forever since the last time I read a chapter from this story. It’s good to be back.
This was a fun chapter to read! I definitely didn’t see Fluttershy running a Sylvan deck coming at all. And here I thought you were just going to use ArcV decks. Good on you! Coming up next Is Twilight and Spike’s big duel with Pinkie Pie! I can’t wait to see what happens there.
I would advise against adding the new Link system into your story unless you want to add a bit of VR into it (considering that the next Yu-Gi-Oh! Show’s duels will supposedly be taking place virtual reality). The new Link system that’s coming out soon completely screws over the Extra Deck and forces you to chose between special summoning only one Extra Deck monster or to build a deck that runs a lot of Link Monsters so you can summon two or possibly three Extra Deck monsters instead. Not to mention that Pendulum Summoning is going to get severely nerfed to one Extra Deck summon without the aid of the new Link Monsters.
It’s less of a new mechanic and more of a reinventing of the Yu-Gi-Oh! Game as a whole.
This was an awesome chapter!
It seems completely obvious right now that Pinkie would be using a Performapal deck but honestly, I didn’t see that coming either. However, I’m a bit sad that she didn’t use Performapal Laugh Maker or Smile World in her deck though. Not that this wasn't an awesome duel or anything. It just feels like Pinkie would have thoughs cards, you know?
Maybe those cards will make an appearance in a future chapter?
Well, I can’t wait to read the next chapter and get all caught up so I’m off to read the next chapter!
Huh... this looks fun. I'll read more later.
Excellent duel. Really loves how AJ managed to hold off her opponent in the duel and her great use of effect monsters and Synchro summoning. The part where the girls forgot their Duel Disks was very amusing. Great chapter.
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Wow, great way to introduce the other Nightmare disciples. Especially liked the way that Fluttershy battled her opponent, gave a cold winter vs spring kind of vibe. Pinkie pissing her opponent off so that he focuses on a one-on-one duel wa interesting. Overall, I loved the chapter.
nice work.
.........Excuse me? BROTHER?! How.....Why......I don't even........
And next is Pink's dual and her perfomapals.
Excellent as always.
Interesting Duel with Pinkie. The snake guy had the advantage for most of the duel due to strengthening his top monsters, but Pinkie's use of Pendulum Summoning and effects were a good way to turn the tide.
Yes Pinkie we did enjoy that battle.