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Scootaloo's friends mean more to her than anything in the world. They have the same goals and they are always there for her, no matter how hard the times are and what problems she has to face.
Yet, as much as two of those friends mean to Scootaloo, there is a third friend she has, one that understands her even better and has more things in common with her than she ever thought possible.
As fate interferes with this friendship, it is on Scootaloo to do something to not lose her friend's company.
What she does to prevent this from happening is something simple, really, but also something of great meaning.....



A short and fluffy fic about friendship. Inspired by real events and dedicated to the best friend a pony can wish for.

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Comments ( 20 )

Indeed, that's what friends are for, helping each other when in need. Good story:twilightsmile::yay:

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Thank you! :scootangel: This means a lot if people like this story, it's a very personal piece. :heart:
Thank you for favouriting it!^^

7800851 You're welcome, Dinky is my favorite background filly and I support the idea that she is a member of the CMC and a good friend of them:twilightsmile: Every good Dinky story has a place in my favorites and bookshelves.

Great fanfic, it feels completely in character for Scoots too, great job.

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Awesome! That's really the best thing that can happen, that the fic nails Scoots' personality! :scootangel:
Thank you so much for your comment and the favourite! :heart:

7800906 You're welcome, I really liked it, so nice job :scootangel:.

FIMfiction really needs more stories with these two in the forefront. Excellent work.

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I won't disagree on this. :scootangel: Thank you for the favourite and the follow! :heart:

I thought this was gonna be another one where Dinky dies after just reading one of those. I'm glad I took the risk and read this though - I absolutely adored Scoots and Dinky's friendship! I was so glad when Dinky's problem was solved by her best friend :scootangel: 11/10, will read again. And favorite, upvote and click that follow button on yo' account!

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These are three good things at once! :pinkiegasp: Thanks for giving it a read and for upvoting, favouriting and following! :scootangel:

I thought this was gonna be another one where Dinky dies after just reading one of those.

There are many of those? I only ever read one and that fic was written so good and heartwrenching that it haunts me until today. :fluttercry:

Dinky and scootaloo are always tied for first as my favorite ponies. This is perfect for me

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Thank you! Glad to have written something enjoyable for you! :scootangel:

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You should go and thank NovemberDragon for this!^^ I included a few links in the Author's Notes.

Well, this fic was good. The idea is wonderful; the message is fitting; and the execution is excellent.

However... I do have two rather noteworthy problems I wish to address. Well, three, but the third is less important. They are issues I have with enjoying this fic more.

1) It wavers on the edge of romantic, but it doesn't go as far to either heavily imply such a thing or outright state it (both of which are totally fine). Because of this, the super tight hugs, and the kiss in particular, seem to be trying hard not to be romantic even though they do seem to be. The fic feels like it's fighting about whether or not to ship the two, which is fine for larger stories that have a definite conclusion on the matter, but this leaves me hanging, and it has me believing by the lack of a Romantic tag that it wasn't intended to be this way.

2) These fillies talk rather... odd for being in elementary, don't you think? I could give you a pass on Dinky, since we don't know her character personally, but Scootaloo doesn't seem like the sharpest tool in the shed, or at least not intellectual enough to talk how she does here. "And you must"? "installments on her house"? "Give me a moment"? It just sounds like more... mature language from somepony who is definitely NOT very mature.

3) Like I said, this is shorter than the others. This needs to be proofread. It's definitely not the worst I've seen, but there seem to be a good number of errors here and there. For example,

Both of them, neither Scootaloo nor Dinky, did understand why they always landed in the same group in such weeks.

When you find yourself with a sentence like this, don't try to think outside the box to think of a way to structure it; instead, think simply.
"Neither of them - Scootaloo nor Dinky - understood why they always landed in the same group in such weeks."

TL;DR: This was a good fic that just wasn't my cup of tea, but it's still a good fic.

Hi there and great that you could finally read it. :twilightsmile: For the issues.....


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It wavers on the edge of romantic, but it doesn't go as far to either heavily imply such a thing or outright state it (both of which are totally fine). Because of this, the super tight hugs, and the kiss in particular, seem to be trying hard not to be romantic even though they do seem to be. The fic feels like it's fighting about whether or not to ship the two, which is fine for larger stories that have a definite conclusion on the matter, but this leaves me hanging, and it has me believing by the lack of a Romantic tag that it wasn't intended to be this way.

The kiss at the end is just a thank you. They are friends in this fic and don't have a crush on each other.
The way I thought of them during writing this fic, is, that they are soulmates. They are so similar to each other, they think the same about everything, they always land together in the same group like destiny wants them to be together as friends.....
They would even do something romantic together, but solely for benefit reasons, not because of romantic love or romantic feelings for each other. Soulmates with benefits, if you want. The kiss by Dinky was still just a thank you, though, and Scoots' hugs happened out of relief over not losing her friend now.

2) These fillies talk rather... odd for being in elementary, don't you think? I could give you a pass on Dinky, since we don't know her character personally, but Scootaloo doesn't seem like the sharpest tool in the shed, or at least not intellectual enough to talk how she does here. "And you must"? "installments on her house"? "Give me a moment"? It just sounds like more... mature language from somepony who is definitely NOT very mature.

Not intellectual enough? Letting aside that this sounds a bit insulting, I think the way she expresses herself fits very well to her, actually.
A thing you have to know about this fic (the end of the description hints at this), is, that it is a little self-insert and, at the same time, isn't.
The dialogue parts are taken from me and my friend and come from a Skype conversation, when something similar happened like what you read in the fic here. Dinky's parts are from her messages, Scoots' parts from my messages.
After that happened, I felt I needed to incorporate that into a fic since it was an important moment for both of us, as a personal fic for the two of us. It turned out well, so I asked her if she's okay with publishing it.
She was and so I did. I was pondering if I should say that it's partially self-insert in the description, but when I read through it after writing it, I found that the way I talked fits Scoots quite well.
We've heard her expressing herself in a quite deep and meaningful way before in several, intense situations and she has always shown an impressive amount of maturity for her age since we got to know to her during Season 1.
Scoots is very important to me, so I'm paying a lot of attention to her, and also have roleplayed as her quite a bit. I manage to nail her personality very well in my fics and here, even though those are things that I said, I found it fits her nicely when comparing them with things we heard her saying. Scoots can be very mature and deep in certain situations.
So, I decided to not mention that her dialogues come from me, since I found they still sound a lot like her.

When you find yourself with a sentence like this, don't try to think outside the box to think of a way to structure it; instead, think simply.
"Neither of them - Scootaloo nor Dinky - understood why they always landed in the same group in such weeks."

Yes, the sentence structures, my achilles hoof..... I'm slowly getting better at english grammar this year, but properly constructing the sentences with the words in the right order and at the right position is something I'm struggling with a lot as a non-native english speaker.
I'm currently revising the first two chapters of another fic of mine to bring them up to my current writing level before I finally continue the fic after years and that concentrated work on fixing flaws in the sentences I feel helps me a lot with learning this.
I also make progress reports on the revision occasionally and want to publish one a week now, if you're interested, you can see a few improvements made to the first two chapters here:

https://www.fimfiction.net/blog/739475/the-most-elegant-sentence-ive-ever-written

https://www.fimfiction.net/blog/744044/revision-progress-report-journeys-and-destinations-a-friendship-for-eternity

https://www.fimfiction.net/blog/753661/journeys-and-destinations-a-friendship-for-eternity-revision-progress-report-2

INB4 my most elegant sentence in the first one is still wrong and I just haven't realized it. xD But I just read it again and, even though it's long, it flows nicely and gets the things I mentioned across in one, quick swoop, without having to dedicate a whole paragraph to explain them.

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Sorry I didn't reply sooner. I never got the notification since you replied to me on the wrong chapter. :twilightblush:

Like I said, it was a good fic. Those were just the issues *I* had with it. I never said it would be a problem for readers in general.

And the soul-mate thing just seems forced to me. I believe in friends with benefits, but they seem to treat each other as something more here. (And DinkyLoo isn't even in my head-canon, so that's not why I'm thinking this way.) Again, that's just my opinion. Do with it what you will.

I didn't write the long post to critique the work, really, because the writing was great. It just wasn't my cup of tea in terms of story. I was simply giving my thoughts. If you want a critique, the most I can say is to keep writing like this and evolve where you can, and there isn't much room for improvement here, aside from what I see as forced non-romance.

Imma just gonna leave this here.

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I remember this. That was long ago, back when I watched this my english was poor, so I didn't understand most of the lyrics. But now upon listening to this again, I can hear how this is is very fitting, both to my story here and Friendship is Magic in general. Someone should take the scene with "Friends Are Always There For You" and put this song over it, it would fit perfectly.
Also, your comment here reminded me on it how readers of mine did this under my story "Aunt Millie", which was in better times before my writing took a dive last year due to an event.
I still need to recover from this and get back to where I was when I wrote this story and your comment here has given me a bit more confidence that I can get back there. :twilightsmile:

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