Three tiny stories about Dinky, Scootaloo and more.
Noises in the Night [Slice of Life]:
When Lemon Scratch forgets the key to her house, she waits to decide on a course of action.
Until she hears hoof steps.
Expectations [Slice of Life]:
Cyan Skies now has a superpower! It's spectacular! Unbelievable! Amazing!
On second thought, maybe it's not so awesome...
Empty Slots [Sad] [Slice of Life]:
Alone in her grandfather's attic, Scootaloo finds an old photo album from before it happened.
Author's Note:
Keep in mind that this was written when I was going into the seventh grade.
Prompts provided by Prompt-a-Day.
Edited by Tamil Tiger and Checkmate the Unicorn.
Story Cover Credit:
Book Vector by MisterAibo
Library Background by Birdco
Twilight Vector by iFoxTrax
Shading and hair details by me.
Link to the deviantArt page.
Empty Slots Cover by me.
Link to the deviantArt page.
Noises in the Night Cover Sketch by me.
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Expectations Cover Sketch by me.
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Please post any grammatical and punctuation errors I made. It helps a lot!
Brilliant! Of course!
4771647
It was all part of my evil plan...
Oh, that last story?
Actually, it's one of my goals as an author to get someone to cry because of my story.
When I was writing this I kept rephrasing that sentence but I could never get it right. Thanks!
Thank you so much for editing. I really, really appreciate it.
In a world without editors I would be scared to read a story.
Thanks,
Snowfeather
Damn... that last one...
Kind of a nasty "mood whiplash" after two funny ones, but otherwise excellent work. Although the "orphan Scootaloo" (or rather "Scootaloo with either one or both parents missing") is not a new thing, the part at the end more than made up for it:
Sublime. In this short segment (plus that line or two where you mention her dad), you tell almost an entire life story (i.e "mother died, father had take care of Scootaloo on his own, they grieved for some time, then moved on" ). The use of the empty slots as a metaphor is absolutely brilliant.
I think you have a bright future in prose ahead of you.
4771760 Thank you!
That line was added at the end after I realized that I could use this as symbolism. Like your critique of Lonely Hearth's Warming, that line that you liked was added in there last minute.
Double woah...
Does this story need the comedy tag? The stories are borderline (I think), since I've never really considered myself good at comedy. What do you think?
Thank you for the comment!
(Oh, and how do you do the text block thing? I've never figured that out.)
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Actually, I think it's best if you just use the "slice of life" tag. The first two are not "sad" while the last one isn't "comedy." "Slice of life" can hold pretty much all of them.
And your comedy is alright. I wasn't rolling on the floor, but it made me smile.
Add "spoiler" before the text in square brackets, just like with the other tags (italics, quotes, etc.), then end it with "/spoiler" (NOTE: you have to do this separately for every individual paragraph in case you have more than one. It cuts off after the first one if you don't.)
It's not exactly the lamest superpower. You could use it to pretend to be sick or something.
4776144 Oh yeah, I never thought of that.
But would it be pretending to be hurting if you were really hurting?
poor scootsy