White In The Snow

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Rarity trots through the Frozen North.

This story is written for the Noble Jury's third monthly writing contest thingie, with the previous writing contest winner, alamais, giving the prompt, [The Frozen North - Extreme Isolation].

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Czar_Yoshi

Czar_Yoshi #1 · Nov 2nd, 2016 · 1 · · 00 ·

...OK, then.

I'm really not quite sure what to make of this. Windigoes?

Kikio3000

Kikio3000 #2 · Nov 2nd, 2016 · · · 00 ·

Nice, but what is Rarity searching for? Why is she in the frozen North? BTW, you made a few mistakes in your story. At the beginning, fill is suppose to be 'filled'. Not a bad story idea though! :)

Leftover of Saikano

Leftover of Saikano #3 · Nov 2nd, 2016 · · · 00 ·

I am confusion.

CoffeeBean

CoffeeBean #4 · Nov 2nd, 2016 · 1 · · 00 ·

Needs a mystery tag, and a spoopy tag. I liked this, it's a neat little story, and I enjoy the vagueness of it.

You get an upboat.

EverfreePony

EverfreePony #5 · Nov 16th, 2016 · · · 00 ·

Hm... I'll keep tracking in case this gets prolonged, because this surely is an interesting prompt. And you are good at writing Rarity. However, I feel like there are a few little confusing questions, like why was Rarity alone in Frozen North? Who was the voice talking to her since it seems that the other pony came later?
Also, I noticed some writing errors, can point them out if you want.

Matthewl419