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Wise Cracker
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7446209 Sane here.
Not sure if gusta *perverted, yet confused face*
Fascinating. I certainly did not expect Aloe to be the ... villain, i guess? Whatever. Although the muscle bulking went a bit against my gusta, it is a well written story. Others would have simply made a mindless clopfest out of this idea, but what you did is "awesometastic" as Dashie would say.
9/10 would read again.
C Y @.
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Well, sir, I'm glad you gave it a chance despite being against your gusta, and thank you for sentiment and the compliment. It's always nice to see that effort put into a work is appreciated.
7446413 I would actually like to offer you an idea for a longer story.
displaced; Pony on earth/Human in Equestria
Starts with the defeat of Nightmare Moon. However, instead of simply turning her back into Luna, she is sent to earth where she swaps place with a young student. Alone and without any knowledge of their respective places they must now try to get along with it until a way is found to reverse the swap.
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My apologies, but I am already sorely behind on ideas to write out, my friend. I've already got my next 20+ chapter monster in the pipelines, with... two, three? (Spike and Twi vs Scootaloo and Vinyl at the Sisterhooves, second Changeling Blood fic, spiritual successor to Grabby) Two and a half concepts waiting for fleshing out after that. I can't divert any attention to a new project, especially considering how long they've been in concept stage as it is. Really sorry.
7446446 No problem bro, gonna find somepony. My writing sucks harder than the entire population of Ponyville in heat so I won't write it myself. My thing is constructing plot ideas and OCs.
I don't understand why it's called titanic
7446474 Tender Taps used to stutter the "t" plus he got [for his age] titanic muscles.
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Titanic muscles?
7446486 contains, and i quote "muscle growth". Further, it is not described how buff he is after the whole incident, but he actually is strong enough to buck apples, which is, if you consider he is a pegasus colt, rather impressive.
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I think you're mistaking him for Featherweight or Rumble there. Tender Taps was the colt introduced in Season 6, and he is stated in the first chapter to be an Earth pony. There are a few descriptions of how buff he is, actually, but it comes in different stages and he covers himself up after some of the more advanced changes, so it's not always clear what the total end sum of it all is.
Also, his situation is directly compared to that of Bulk Biceps, which should give a slightly clearer picture of the level of definition and growth he has by the end.
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Because Tender Taps only stuttered when he said the word 'Terrifying', and he becomes titanic in terms of muscles by the end. He doesn't get taller, though. It was the obvious choice for a title.
What did you think it was a reference to?
7446553 My bad. I'm not watching the show at all. Just like it for what fans do with it.
Well written although a little dark. But that was the point. I like your description of Aloe using earthpony magic.
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Just thinkin' inside the chimney with that one
"He was a good boy now. A big boy. For her."
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I'm inclined to disagree with ransom username. Admittedly not right away, but when it kept coming back to Apple Bloom being the obvious choice, it kind of started to seem too obvious to the point of being a red herring, especially after Tender Taps did not remember walking to Sweet Apple Acres after his "massage" when Aloe touched his head. To me, it was one of those moments where the obvious choice was too much so, ironically making it seem less likely. It's a danger when trying to create a twist like this.
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I don't know maybe the movie Titanic
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Yeah, at that point it was supposed to go from a red herring to an 'Oh, no' realisation for the reader, at least to a degree. Past that second massage, things are set up to appear more ominous with everything that happens to Tender and especially with what he does and how he thinks.
It's kind of like a movie about a serial killer, you might say. The obvious suspect is quickly found, but even if the viewer thinks they know who the real killer is, there's still suspense when that killer finds himself alone with the main protagonist.
That's part of the reason Apple Bloom's motivation is kept ambiguous 'till the end: it's obvious Aloe is affecting Tender, but it's less obvious she's manipulating the girl, too, especially to that relatively minor extent. Plus, the dreamcatchers were a dead giveaway: can't have Princess Luna interrupting a programming session while the boy naps, right?
As well written and interesting in concept as this was, I can't really get over the Bad End. An optional good-end chapter would be nice, I figure Luna is bound to check up on Tender Tap's dreams after this and notice something off.
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Bonus chapters for the other things I've promised first, and I'll collect more input on this story's response (I am starting to see pattern in people's feedback on this, and it's definitely noted, but I'll wait for Megapone to do the reviews and such) before I consider additional material. There is certainly room for a different ending, but I hadn't done an objectively bad ending before, so I figured I'd do it on this one, chalk that up on my checklist.
I dunno. I'd either have to re-think the motivations of the villain, or create an ending where she gets caught. Or do two epilogues: one continuing on the same vein, the other showing a less grim fate.
Fuck. Muscle colt is great but I HATE the mind control/personality death part
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I'll take that two ways, then:
1) the physical aspect is fine, and more muscle foalcon is welcome. So, other writers, take note.
2) the mind control part was written well enough to unsettle people.
So in both cases, a win. I hope you find other stories that hit your needs more closely, then. At the time of writing, this was the only story that came up with both muscle growth and foalcon. So the bar has been set, so to speak. I'm sure once Megapone gets around to discussing this story, it'll get some more attention and maybe inspire people. Mind control and corruption don't float everyone's boat, I'm sure there are other avenues to approach it. Heavens know there are for weight gain and diaper fics...
Again, I've also got a non-sexual muscle colt story, but it's kind of old and definitely weird. I might revisit this story and give it a good ending/bad ending split chapter, but right now I have other things that need finishing. Regardless, your feedback is appreciated and noted.
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Basically what I'm saying is "I can't clop to this" will the future muscle colt story you mentioned in the notes involve mind control?
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If you're referring to the Flight Camp sequel, it's rated PG, Teen at most. It's not a clopfic. There will be some manipulation, yes, in the sense of sweet-talking, but no mind control or hypnosis. And the colt character himself is already muscled, so he won't grow during the story, either.
Next person who makes a tender tapps clipfic make it tenderbloom
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I understood maybe one fifth of that sentence's point.
That was a heck of a ride.
I wonder if Luna ever figures out what's really going on.
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There's been some debate over that, actually. Some people prefer a happy ending, some want it to stay as is. I'm leaving the options open for now while I work on other stuff.
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I like that it ends there. It doesn't need a happy ending.
7446209
Damn you, you're the only comment I can find on that.
According to the site rules, Anthropomorphic + Human/EQ Girls have to be 18+. Ponies do not
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Exactly. And these are neither human nor EqG nor anthro, beyond the anthro levels of the show, of course.
Edit: for clarity's sake, I think I wrote this story and that addition to the description specifically right around the time I got involved in a discussion/accusation with a (now former) rival of mine. It was also around the first time I got around to reading this article on the matter.
I'll never knowingly break site rules, but I disagree on censorship of these kinds of materials in general, purely from a religious point of view. And by that I mean: my religion says you're not supposed to censor. I'm not against the site rule, I'm against people whining about these types of stories even existing or trying to enforce something stronger through shame tactics. Not overly attached to it either way, though. This story was an exercise, one I've done before, but not repeated since, as far as I can recall. If I ever repeated it, it'd be in a different fandom. If.
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Well, here in the USA, the rules on child porn are crazy strict.
You could go to jail for posting it, I could go to jail for downloading it
& the site WOULD get closed down if it happened too often (& sometimes once is too often)
Under the circumstances, do you REALLY blame Knighty for not allowing it?
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I stand by my previous post, edits and all.
Witch hunts are a thing, and practical considerations are a constant factor. So I don't blame anyone for it, no. But I'll still reference that old George Carlin skit to voice my ire against its more vocal proponents.
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I agree with you there. They don’t LKE porn? Then, they shouldn’t read it.
When I posted this, there were 127,402 stories with over 2,000 million words & dozens of filters.
Surely, they can find SOMETHING that they like
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Corrected the first, the second one is as intended. It's kind of a common trope in brainwashing/corruption stories to have the suggestion be along the lines of "Good X do this," which cements in the mind before the victim is made to identify as a good X. It wasn't a reference to the object/noun of a smell in that particular instance.
Thanks for catching it, regardless. The signal boosting was a bust, but at least it was practice in doing something new, right?
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Dept. of “I Shudder To Think”
Practice makes perfect
Poor Tender Taps.