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Sunset has a crush on Twilight. The problem is, she seems to have a type: people who are incredibly powerful, have some measure of authority and power in their positions, and still have very sweet personalities.
And Twilight is far more powerful and popular than Flash ever was.
But it's okay. It's not like Twilight likes her back, right? Right.
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I feel like the second 'section' is a little bit... exposition-y? It's not anywhere near bad enough to detract from how sugary-sweet the story is overall by any means, and the information conveyed in that section is important to the story, as it gives us a glimpse inside Sunset's head. Still, I feel like another way to handle getting that information to the reader could be for Sunset to have a conversation about her concerns with another character; it could add some additional dynamic to the tale while still informing us readers of Sunset's state of mind.
The drawback of course would be that some of the focus on Sunset and Twilight would be lost by including another voice; maybe that was exactly what you were trying to avoid.
Either way, great piece of Sunlight fluff! Have a good trip!
this will be getting tons of likes soon i can just feel it sunlight for the win!!!!!
This story deserves a moustache!
Yay, new Princess Sunlight fic!
I liked the detailed look into Sunset's mindset, combined with her worries about backsliding into who she used to be. I kind of wish we had more screen time with Twilight and Sunset (they're so adorable together), but I guess by this point both had already fallen for the other, so they just had to admit it to each other. Well, that and Sunset deal with her lingering guilt, but Twilight always helps with that.
This story made me squee sooooo hard!
While I fully admit to being a huge Sunlight fan, this story had everything I like about the pairing! Sunset's personal doubts on her own integrity, Twilight's dorky cuteness and then them having an oh-so-adorable talk about their feelings!
Alright, so I may as well be honest here (I generally am); when I saw this story pop up, I wasn't as excited as I could have been. I was thrilled to see another story by you, because of course I was, but the description didn't exactly sell me on it. Not that it sounded bad; I just didn't see the what would draw me into the story, aside from it being written by you. Sunlight one shot about figuring out feelings and beginning a relationship? Not exactly breaking new ground. Sunset being drawn to power? Shockingly seldom used for her romances, and totes in line with my headcanon for her, so I suppose there was that, although it couldn't really sell me by itself.
Note that I don't mean to say anything is wrong with fluff stories. A huge part of this website is devoted to fluffy slice of life romances, because they're pretty great things when done well. So I don't mean to make it sound like I went into this with low expectation or anything of the sort – I like Sunlight, I like fluff, and most importantly I like your writing. I'm just not so sure I would have stopped to read this from a different author.
Now for the part of this comment where I stop looking like a explicit. Had I passed this up (which I wasn't considering, but still) I would have been passing up something truly amazing. I loved literally every moment I spent reading this story, and I don't mean that in any kind of hyperbolic way. I'm frankly surprised to find this was written sporadically over a long period of time, the whole thing felt very cohesive.
More than anything, I adore the narrative tone. Pretty sure this is like the fourth time I've said this, but something about the way you handle exposition just makes it not even feel like exposition to me. More like internal monologue, almost. The third person limited narrator getting skewed very close to being Sunset herself makes it incredibly easy to see everything through her eyes. Also really liked the use of sudden stops on various places. All in all, I just found this an absolute joy to read.
I know better than to hope, but sometimes I wish you wrote multi-chapter slice of life romances. I didn't want the story to end. I know you already said you don't plan on doing any other multi-chapter things aside from Now You Need Us, but sweet babies could I get behind that idea if you ever did. Heck, get the thing printed and bound and I'd buy it, pony or original story.
Noticed a few typos:
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Missing space inbetween paragraphs.
Mm. Cute. A little unfocused, but cute.
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Glad you enjoyed it.
And it's a fair criticism. Had this been a more expanded sort of a story and not so focused on Sunset and her mindset, I would have had her interacting with another character for the exposition. As it was I wanted to focus more on her thoughts and feelings, so it ended up the way it did because I felt like having her talk to another character about it would detract from the pace and the idea.
Still, something to keep in mind for next time.
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Thank you for the mustache!
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Thank you very much, glad you enjoyed it! There isn't enough Princess Sunlight since the last movie.
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Glad you enjoyed it!
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Typos and spacing will be the bane of my existence for as long as I'm on this site.
I'm going to have to bite the bullet eventually and figure out how to manage Google Docs so I can at least handle the spacing issue. And thank you very much for the in-depth comment, I'm glad you decided to give the story a chance despite the so-so description.
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Glad you found it cute!
The ship is strong within this one
Lovely little story. This ship is my OTP and is nice to see another good one, however "late" it might be.
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I do wholeheartedly recommend using Google Docs. It has a whole host of useful features.
And it's not that the description was bad or anything. It's just... ugh, it's kinda impossible to explain without sounding like I'm complaining, and I have zero complaints here, but basically it seemed like a pretty standard Sunlight one shot, the same type of story we've all seen time and again. And there's nothing wrong with that, it just didn't feel as exciting as if there was done sort of big twist to the story. In the end it didn't matter, of course, because everything about this was wonderful, and I think I've pretty much started taking in circles so I'm shutting up now
This was pretty good. I enjoyed it.
WELL THEN.
I now know a bar I must reach! Many thanks for the story; I've learned a little more about romance, especially between my favorite magic horses!
This take on the Twilight/Sunset dynamic demonstrates a strong understanding of the characters. The idea that Sunset is attracted to power is very interesting, and it's a nice link to her pre-reformation self. At one point, that good-naturedness she likes might have just been because she could exploit it, but now it means a lot more to her than it did previously. There is continuity, but her growth puts these traits in a new context. Meanwhile, that Twilight doesn't particularly like being a princess is something I've been thinking for a while, and I enjoyed how this story touched upon that. Sunset seems to be more comfortable with that, or at the very least, she has an easier time winging it, and Twilight seems to appreciate this. In the brief time that Sunset and Twilight spend together each weekend, I'm sure it's a great help.
I very much enjoyed reading this. Super cute, and with a lot of nice characterization touches that I really liked. Your SunLight fics are always a delight to read, especially because they often feel so close and complementary to my own headcanons and ideas about this pairing. Love love love it.
I like your writing Mr. Beam it is sweet and lovely. Look forward to more Sunlight fics to hopefully come.
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Thank you very much!
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Glad I could help! If you ever write any Sunlight of your own I'll keep an eye out for it.
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I wish a could put together a better response to your comment that isn't just me squealing and going "Thank you thank you thank you!" over and over again, but honestly I can't think of anything else to say because your comment sent me right back over the moon like Krickis's first comment on this story did. So thank you very much, I'm glad I managed to nail everything you love about Sunlight!
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Ms., actually. And thank you! Glad you enjoyed.
When there's a "right?" in the title, we know where it's going... And it's gonna be nice.
EXCUSE ME!!!
...This was a great read. It's almost impossible now to find EquestriaXEquestria Sunlight fics on here anymore thanks to Friendship Games. Great work, I loved it.
Beautiful story. Especially the part of Sunset trying to analyze her former relationship and the fear that came with those facts.
It was nice to read and -the talk- in the end is exactly how I would picture it to be.
Thanks for gifting us these wonderfull moments :3
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Thank you very much, glad you enjoyed the fic! And yes indeed, sadly, Princess Sunlight seems to be a rare thing these days after Friendship Games, but it's still the only Sunlight I ship, so I shall continue to write for it.
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You're welcome! Thank you for your comment, I'm glad you enjoyed the story.
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Thank you for your comment! Glad you read through the story despite its long length, and I'm happy you believe I nailed Sunset's character.
7330633 I know right ! I ship Princess Twilight x Sunset, but those fics are so rare now.
Love SunLight fics, but I still don't get why they're really rare to find. Anywaaaaaay, I
this story!
Adorable. Just adorable. This had me smiling the whole way through. Thank you.
Sequel/Continuation?
This was so sweet! Their characterization is spot on and reading this absolutely made my day!
Short and sweet and without all the fluff. I really appreciate this sort of thing every so often.
Well, I can safely say this is definitely the reason why I love SunTwi. They're in character and a nice little ending. Thanks for the story. Here's s like.
Wonderful cuteness with one of my favorite pairings that didn't drag out the communication issues for the sake of drama. What's not to like? Thank you for it.
This story is so adorable it makes me tear up
awww!!
And the writing itself, I'm not sure what it is, but i really enjoyed it. Maybe because it manages to be incredibly romantic without it being sappy at all. Just a great story in all regards really!
...this is unbelievably sweet!💖
Well that was adorable
Sunset should be happy that twilight has a thing for reformed unicorns/ alicorns.
Bad idea if you ask me.
You still did well sunset.
That's still a sign you want to make one.
Agreed.
https://m.Lol, of course she'd be prepared for this.
:| … it’s kinda like a anime
I love all the cute little interactions and physicality they have on pony form; its really adorable all the bumps and nuzzles! adorable fic <3