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Wonder


Sometimes I like to just sit down and do nothing. Alright fine, all the time.

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I was around before this world was born and before the old war turned my world to ash. I may not know everything, but I will tell you what I remember and what I learn.

Chapters (9)
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Comments ( 13 )

7310925
I'm attempting to make it so his recounts of history are unbiased.

It's a good idea but your character is a bit of a gary stue what with the whole taking them under her wing thing. I suggest changing the narrative from first to third person. Otherwise it just looks like you're making an excuse to self-insert.

For a decent idea of what I mean and a good guide for this kind of story check out 'On The Beach' by Neville Chute.

Not sure about this one yet.

7314016
I'm not sure how to do a third person diary.... :raritycry:
And I'm not a fan of self inserts so sorry if it seems like that. If I were to insert myself into the mlp universe I would make myself godlike.
I'll check it out, but do you have a link to save me time?

so a to b kind of points from here on out for this story?

7368338
The whole thing is just short records or periods of a fictional journal. I have small ideas of what might happen but every chapter is written within half an hour and is complete improv. This is more of an experiment for me than anything. I don't even know what is happening to an extent.

Please continue!!! I'm loving this story :pinkiehappy:

I love the idea of a post apocalyptic Equestria. Also, I like that the character doesn't add too much unnecessary emotion, I really want to find out what they're going to discover in the Helix. The dynamic between the ponies and the human is well done, and I find it cute that Applejack is warming up to him. Keep going, this is an excellent story that has me very interested.

Using Apple's head as a beach?
Get a good tan there?

7892517 I know what you meant, but I couldn't help myself when I saw that typo.

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