Fluttershy's Change Of Heart

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twidash1993

twidash1993 #1 · Jul 7th, 2016 · · ·

"Do you remember what happened at the end of season two?"
This is where I stopped taking this story seriously

Eclair the Pegasus

Eclair the Pegasus #2 · Jul 7th, 2016 · 3 · ·

Way too fast paced. I mean, I love the idea and concept but the delivery... Yeah...

swirliesPonyfic12

swirliesPonyfic12 #3 · Jul 7th, 2016 · · ·

hmm not too bad,Just wow i didn't know Fluttershy would take this all in so fast

//But good enough

Midnight Phoenix

Midnight Phoenix #4 · Jul 7th, 2016 · 1 · ·

7371055 Uh oh, I put that as a joke, I forgot to delete it.

Music the Looping Traceu

Music the Looping Traceu #5 · Jul 7th, 2016 · · ·

I've been looking for this story forever! I finally found it!

Liam White

Liam White #6 · Jul 8th, 2016 · 2 · ·

The pacing was a bit jarring (especially the "The Next Morning" transitions), and I couldn't maintain my suspension of disbelief for certain things:

• Twilight seems particularly lacking in judgement today.
• If he is entirely new to sex, unless there is some kind of instinctual response that he has and we weren't told about, Fluttershy might be telling him that he has to thrust.
• Does he have some sort of magical stamina booster in effect? On his real first time he probably would have blown after 20 seconds.
• Once more, how would he know to pull out before cumming? How would he even know what it feels like?

Other than that cute fic, upvoted

Midnight Phoenix