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Fear - BlueColton



The only thing we have to fear is fear itself...or is it?

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It was a dark and stormy night...

Fear

“…and when she looked back, she saw her best friend smiling at her…with no face! BRAAAAAHHHHHH!”

Outside, a crack of thunder bellowed in the night. Rain assailed the walls of Friendship Palace like irate army intent on breaching the wall. They were the only sounds following the conclusion of Scootaloo’s Nightmare Night story.

Lowering the flashlight, Scootaloo waited for a reaction from her best friends. Sitting across from her, both Sweetie Belle and Apple Bloom looked at her with bemused faces.

“Nothing?” The small pegasus asked. “Nothing at all.”

“How can she smile if she has no face?” Asked Apple Bloom.

Rolling her eyes—as if it were obvious—Scootaloo replied, “Duh! She still has face muscles. Only her skin is gone.”

“When did that happen?” Asked the little earth pony.

“After Skinny Minnie got her,” Scootaloo huffed. “Weren’t you paying attention to the story?”

Apple Bloom thought on it. “So…Skinny Minnie got her and took her hide…when?”

“Before they escaped the bakery! Sometime before they got out, Skinny Minnie captured Winnie Hoof and,” Scootaloo stopped when she saw Sweetie’s face. “What?”

“Your story had a lot of plot holes.” Her brow furrowed in thought, Sweetie Belle recounted what she thought were the most poignant points. “Okay, I get that Skinny Minnie liked to skin her victims, but it’s never explained why. Was there some traumatic experience in her past that made her psychotic? Was she possessed? Did she escape a lunatic asylum?”

“Yeah. And what’s the deal with the muffins?” Apple Bloom asked. “Ah was real curious to find out the meanin’ behind that.”

Her face turning back and forth between her friends, Scootaloo spread her hooves in defeat. “It’s a story.”

“Not a very good one,” Apple Bloom said.

Taking insult, Scootaloo said, “Oh, and I suppose Pumpkin Horn was a better one?”

“What?” Feeling sheepish, Apple Bloom rubbed her arm nervously. “Pumpkins are scary.”

“A unicorn with a pumpkin for a horn? Seriously?”

Looking at Scootaloo directly, Apple Bloom said, “But ya had yer face covered the whole time when Ah told ya that story.”

“That’s because I was trying to stifle my laughs. I almost lost it when Billy Bone Hoofington farted when he was being eaten alive.”

“That’s because ya loose yer bowels when yer dyin’!” Apple Bloom told her. “It’s a common fact, not like bein’ alive after ya had yer skin taken off ya.”

“And least mine was original.”

“Ya stole the whole premise from another story!”

“No I didn’t.”

“Guys!” The fillies jumped as Sweetie Belle’s high-pitched voice called them to silence. Outside, the storm bellowed and the windows rattled as if someone were trying to break in. Someone, or something.

With silence finally overcoming the room, Sweetie Belle took a deep breath. “Look, let’s face it. We’re not very good storytellers.”

“Ah beg to differ,” Apple Bloom complained. “Tall Tales runs in ma family!”

“Obviously. We met him last Apple Family Reunion, remember?”

Glaring at Scootaloo, Apple Bloom said, “Ah mean tellin’ Tall Tales! And ya knew what Ah was gettin’ at, Scootaloo.”

“Please don’t fight,” the pretty young unicorn begged. “This Nightmare Night has been bad enough without us bickering all the time.” Sighing, Sweetie Belle looked up at the window. The room they had chosen to tell their “Cutie Mark Crusaders Spooky Awesome Creepshow Story Palooza” was sparsely furnished. As most of the rooms in the immense palace were uninhabited, it mainly consisted of draped furniture and unopened boxes. Princess Twilight had gracefully offered them any room of their choice, so long as it wasn’t her bedroom, the throne room, the kitchen, the basement, the solar, or her private study to tell their stories before heading off to Canterlot on some important meeting with the other alicorns.

This year’s Nightmare Night turned out to be a terrible evening. The storm hit late into the evening, cancelling much of the beloved festivities that fell on this beloved holiday. That meant no trick-or-treating, no hayrides, and no visiting Nightmare Moon’s statue on the outskirts of town to pay tribute to the fallen she-demon.

The Cutie Mark Crusaders had gotten all ghouled up for the evening. Sweetie Belle was dressed as a vampire princess, Scootaloo as the god of thunder, and Apple Bloom as an undertaker. They’d really gone all out for their costumes in preparation of going out for some candy. Their very first stop had been Friendship Palace to scare the scales off of Spike, but no sooner had they arrived when the storm hit, forcing them to take shelter. Princess Twilight, dressed as a pirate for some reason, had welcomed them into her home, but an emergency call from Canterlot had forced her to leave immediately. She left Spike in charge of the girls before sending a message to their big sisters to let them know that the fillies were okay.

Spike had locked himself up in his room, terrified of all the pranks and scares the girls would subject him to. With no pony to torment, the Cutie Mark Crusaders had decided to tell scary stories so they found a room that looked ghoulish enough to begin the tales. The one good thing about the storm was that it lent a sense of ambiance as lightning flashed and thunder boomed. One would think it would be the perfect setting for telling Nightmare Night stories.

Too bad all the stories were a bust.

The trio let out a collective sigh.

“Sweetie Belle’s right,” Apple Bloom said. “We do suck at tellin’ scary stories.”

“I thought my story was kind of scary,” said Scootaloo, fiddling home-made hammer, which was really an actual hammer with a lightning bolt sketched on the handle. “Though I guess it sounded better in my head.”

“It’s not easy,” Sweetie Belle said. “Fear is a powerful emotion. It takes more than blood, gore, and death to make a story terrifying.”

“Those always creep me out,” Apple Bloom admitted.

“Each pony has something that creeps them out. For you, it’s pumpkins. For Scootaloo, it’s getting skinned.”

“And spiders.” The pegasus shivered as if one had just crawled up her back.

“And spiders. Though come to think of it, I don’t like spiders either. And I really don’t like going to the dentist. Something about all those teeth going chitt-chitt all the time just gives me nightmares.” Sweetie Belle pulled her vampire cape in close, as if cold. “The point is it takes more than an imagination to make really good scary stories.”

“Right!” Scootaloo said as she fixed her helmet on her head. “You need a good monster.”

“Don’t ya mean a bad monster?” said Apple Bloom.

“Uh-huh. And someplace creepy. A museum. A haunted house. An abandoned zoo.”

“A castle!” Apple Bloom exclaimed.

“Or a dentist office,” Sweetie Belle shivered.

“Okay,” Scootaloo began, now excited. “So we’re in a spooky castle in the middle of a storm. What kind of monster lives in it?”

“Scootaloo!”

Scootaloo regarded Sweetie Belle. “What? We gotta relate to the story, right? So what better way to do that than to put ourselves in the story? Right, Apple Bloom?”

The red-haired filly nodded. “Yeah. How about…a ghost?”

“Or a spirit?”

“That means the same thing, Scootaloo,” Apple Bloom deadpanned.

“No! No! I mean those spirits that like to haunt places. They’re called, um, weights?”

“Wraiths,” Apple Bloom corrected.

“Yeah. You can’t see them, but they’re always there. Shaking bookcases. Moving chairs. Giving you nightmares.”

“And saying things backwards.”

Apple Bloom and Scootaloo regarded Sweetie Belle with raised eyebrows.

“What?”

“Or,” Apple Bloom continued, “How about some kind of Boogey Mare. Ya know, the kind that eats kids?”

“Like candy?”

“And laughs when she’s doin’ it.”

“Sick!”

“Guys!” Sweetie Belle shivered. Outside, the storm bellowed.

“What about changelings?” Scootaloo suggested. “They’re pretty scary. Think about it? They can be whoever they want.”

“Yer right, Scoots. They can be your own family and ya wouldn’t even know it.”

“Which meant you can’t trust anyone.”

“Not even yer best friends when they come a knockin.”

“Begging you to let them in.”

“Guys!” Scootaloo was on her stomach now.

“How about the return of Nightmare Moon?” Scootaloo began. “Only she wasn’t gone to begin with.”

“Nah,” Apple Bloom added, “Her spirit was just trapped somewhere. Only to be released by a couple fillies,”

“who should have kept their noses out they didn’t belong,”

“but didn’t listen to the warnins’,”

“so that when they did release Nightmare Moon,”

“she followed them back home,”

“where she remains to this day,”

“like some unwanted guest,”

“who’ll never leave!”

“GUYS!” Even the rainfall was drowned out by Sweetie Belle’s voice. Angry, she stood on all four legs. “All you’re doing is making up monsters. That’s not how you write a scary story.”

Both fillies looked at one another, then back to Sweetie Belle. It was Apple Bloom who asked, “Well then, how would you write a scary story?”

Before Sweetie Belle could answer, the window to their room burst open, sending wind and rain pouring through. The fillies screamed. Sweetie Belle was the first to bolt as a crash of thunder boomed like some angry beast who finally had its way in. Her two friends followed her as she fled the room, screaming all the way. They didn’t know how long they’d been running, only that they were out of breath by the time they finally slowed down.

“Okay,” Scootaloo rasped. “Now that…was scary.”

The hallway they were in was well lit by glowing sconces. Still, every now and then a sconce would flicker, casting weird shadows across the hall. Still catching her breath, Sweetie Belle said, “Let’s not…go back in there.”

“Why?” Apple Bloom said with a smile. “Didn’t ya’ll want to be scared?”

“Not like that!”

“Hey.” Both turned to Scootaloo. “Where are we anyway?”

“Ah don’t know. Ah got turned around after that fifth hallway.”

With their breathing finally under control, the three fillies suddenly realized how quiet it was. “Does anyone know where Spike’s room is?” Sweetie Belle asked as they began to walk.

The light played weird tricks on their shadows. Given that they were all wearing costumes made the shadows appear distorted, less pony-like. The trio traveled to the next corridor, searching for signs that would lead them back to someplace that seemed familiar. Granted none of them had been in the palace enough times to get to know the place, but surely they would have seen something by now that would ring a bell?

“Ah think we’re goin’ around in circles,” Apple Bloom said after turning a corner.

“How can you tell? The walls all look the same,” Scootaloo said.

They kept looking for signs, directions, anything. They should at least have run into the foyer by now. It was the largest room in the palace next to the throne room.

Apple Bloom groaned. “How in the blazes does Princess Twilight find her way around here? It’s like some kind of factory.”

“Where all your fears and horrors come true,” Scootaloo muttered.

“What’s that, Scoots?”

“Nothing.”

When they turned another corner they spotted an open doorway. Poking their heads in, slowly, they found it to be a rather large room filled with rows and rows of books.

“Great,” Scootaloo sulked. “Of all the rooms we’d have to find the library.”

“Beats runnin’ around those halls all night.” Apple Bloom noticed a candle burning at the far end. It was situated just below a large window whose drapes were pulled shut. “Now why in tarnation would Princess Twilight leave a candle burnin’ all night? Don’t she know that’s just askin’ for a fire?”

“Maybe it’s a magic candle.” Scootaloo approached the candle, which was situated beside an open book on a raised dais. “Think that’s a spell book?”

“You guys!” Sweetie chased after them. “I don’t think we’re supposed to be in here.”

But her friends ignored her. While Scootaloo approached the dais, Apple Bloom was regarding the room itself. “Ah’ll bet there’s a ton of scary stories in here. We could learn a thing or two.”

“How about we just leave?” Sweetie Belle protested.

“How about you guys help me?” Scootaloo was trying to push a step ladder closer to the dais. Her small frame could barely budge the contraption. Only with the help of her friends did the ladder finally prove mobile and they pushed it against the dais. Once there, Scootaloo hopped on up and began to read.

“Well,” said Apple Bloom from below. “Is it a book of spells or ain’t it?”

“I don’t think so.” Scootaloo kept reading without regarding her friends. “It’s definitely Twilight’s writing. I recognize it from all the homework she used to give us.” Scootaloo turned the page. “Huh?”

“What huh?” Said Apple Bloom.

“She’s writing about some kind of creature.” Reading a little further she added, “Something that’s not from Equestria.”

“A monster?” Apple Bloom asked with piqued interest.

“Maybe.”

Beside the dais, Sweetie Belle began to cower. The room was large and very dark. Aside from the candle there was no light that didn’t come from the hallway and even that seemed to be getting dimmer, like the scones were being blown out one by one. “I really think we should keep looking for Spike.”

“Hold on,” Apple Bloom looked up at Scootaloo. “What’s it say, Scoots?”

“It’s about something that walks on two legs,” the pegasus said. “It has a small, flat face with rows of tiny teeth, and beady eyes.”

Below, Sweetie Belle and Apple Bloom tried to picture the creature that was just described. “That sounds,” Sweetie Belle began,

“Creepy,” finished Apple Bloom.

“Get this, you guys. This thing doesn’t have fur anywhere on its body expect for the very top of its head.”

“Now that’s the funniest-looking monster Ah can think of. No fur? Beady eyes? Small teeth?” She chuckled.

That ended just as soon as Scootaloo said, “That eats the flesh of other animals.”

Silence filled the room.

“Wh-What?” A nervous Sweetie Belle asked.

Gulping, Scootaloo read a passage, “Using their talon-like appendages, the two-leggers fashion crude devices to hunt and kill animals, usually of the four-legged or winged variety. They then take them back to their homes where the bodies are butchered, drained of blood, and skinned before cut up into edible pieces prior to consumption. The remnants of these poor, defenseless animals are then served to their children, allowing them to increase their numbers and multiply to the point where they’ve overrun their world. I fear that should these carnivorous bipeds ever find a way into Equestria…”

Scootaloo couldn’t finish. She didn’t want to finish. She was too busy imagining those “things” Twilight mentioned hunting her down, using their talon-like appendages to render her to pieces before serving her to their children. The stair ladder began to shake because of her.

“G-Guys?” Sweetie Belle squeaked. “I’m scared.

Apple Bloom shivered. “Yeah. Ah don’t think Ah ever want to run into one of those things.”

“It’s…nothing,” Scootaloo stammered. “It’s just a story, right? Just a stupid made-up story about a monster. We shouldn’t be scared of things that don’t exist. That’s what Nightmare Night is for. To make fun of those things. To not be afraid of the monsters.”

The candle…blew out.

Sweetie Belle screamed and backed into the stairs, causing Scootaloo to lose her footing and come crashing down atop her friends. Huddled in a frightened ball, the Cutie Mark Crusaders heard something approaching them. From the dim light that seeped in through the hallway, they spotted a shadow that peeled off from the darkness. It moved not on four legs, but two. Its arms, if that’s what they were, were longer than its torso, swinging in wide arcs that ended in four, razor sharp claws. The creature moved deliberately toward the fillies, gawking at them with its beady, glowing eyes. Opening its mouth, it’s wide mouth, they caught the glint of light off its rows of sharp teeth.

“That east the flesh of other animals.”

“I…I am afraid of the monsters,” Scootaloo whimpered right before the creature sprung on them.

Screaming, the Cutie Mark Crusaders fled the room. Never had three such small ponies moved so fast in all their lives as they somehow, and finally, discovered the foyer that led to the main entrance. The trio burst through into the night, their screams drowned out by a powerful clap of thunder as if the night itself were taking joy in their plight. They kept running, not once looking back, or they would have seen the monster watching them go from a certain library window.

Lighting another candle with his fire breath, Spike easily dispatched himself from the stilts he used to stand seven feet above the ground. Removing the rakes he used for arms took some effort, but it wasn’t long before the dragon was back to his original height and feeling quite accomplished with himself. Taking a moment to chuckle, Spike regarded the spot where he last saw the fillies run.

“Silly girls,” he said. “Don’t they know it’s not the monsters or the stories that fill us with fear?” His reptilian eyes glinting in the candlelight, he smiled, showing rows of razor-sharp teeth—perfect for rendering flesh off of animals.

“In the end, the only thing we have to fear is fear itself.”

Happy (Early) Nightmare Night

Author's Note:

It's Nightmare Night in June!

Truth is, I've been writing so many stories lately that I couldn't wait to post it in October. Besides, I have some really creepy pasta ideas that I want to save for the big month. This is more to whet my appetite, and yours, for the coming darkness.

Points if you can catch all the MLP creepy pasta story references I made throughout the story. I even made reference to one of my own.

Comments ( 39 )

OH, NO! THE DREADED HUMAN!!!!!!!!!! :derpyderp1:

7278730 The inspiration behind this story is that since the CMC have never seen a human, they have nothing to go on but Twilight's description. Placing the story during Nightmare Night came on a whim, I thought if anything the image capture what I believe such a horrible creatures (humans) would look like to a young filly's mind.

Plus, eating four-legged animals, scary stuff!

This is a very good one-shot.

Good story and good idea lol fillys imagining humans they have not seen. It was fun to have this story early, you don't need it to be Halloween to share a good ghost story. Well done.

Oh my Celestia. I actually caught the reference to your story "Chitt-Chitt" and the Rainbow Factory one. Clever you, clever you.

7285827 Did you catch the references to other grim darks? :pinkiecrazy:

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Looks like I'll have to read it again some time soon. :derpytongue2:

SPOILERS AHEAD!
If you haven't read the story and you're browsing comments, GO BACK UP THERE AND READ IT (PLZ)

Outside, a crack of thunder bellowed in the night. Rain assailed the walls of Friendship Palace like irate army intent on breaching the wall.

ohhhh nice detail!

“Your story had a lot of plot holes.”

Scootaloo's Internal Thoughts, MaYbe: My bucking friends with their bucking nerd criticism and their bucking nitpicking of my story I tell you the next time Sweetie Belle and Apples make fun of my tale Imma wreck their houses and steal all their pets

I like the nitpicking of Scootaloo's story. Somehow, before you even wrote a name, I knew it was Scootaloo telling the story :)

“Guys!” The fillies jumped as Sweetie Belle’s high-pitched voice called them to silence. Outside, the storm bellowed and the windows rattled as if someone were trying to break in. Someone, or something.

I'm loving the way that you describe the environment as though it were threatening the CMC, because with overactive imaginations, that's exactly what it would seem like :)

With silence finally overcoming the room, Sweetie Belle took a deep breath. “Look, let’s face it. We’re not very good storytellers.”
“Ah beg to differ,” Apple Bloom complained. “Tall Tales runs in ma family!”
“Obviously. We met him last Apple Family Reunion, remember?”

I'm loving these jokes. The naming conventions of ponies makes it perfect <3

Princess Twilight had gracefully offered them any room of their choice, so long as it wasn’t her bedroom, the throne room, the kitchen, the basement, the solar, or her private study to tell their stories before heading off to Canterlot on some important meeting with the other alicorns.

Twilight: "You can have any room in the house as long it's not any of the rooms in the house save for maybe this one." :P

I love the joke you made there with Twilight's restrictions.

She left Spike in charge of the girls before sending a message to their big sisters to let them know that the fillies were okay.
Spike had locked himself up in his room, terrified of all the pranks and scares the girls would subject him to.

The comedy here is wonderful, immediately telling the reader that Spike is not every good at this particular job. :P

“I thought my story was kind of scary,” said Scootaloo, fiddling home-made hammer, which was really an actual hammer with a lightning bolt sketched on the handle.

That's cute :)

“It’s not easy,” Sweetie Belle said. “Fear is a powerful emotion. It takes more than blood, gore, and death to make a story terrifying.”

I feel Sweetie Belle is your in-world avatar, bringing your knowledge to the characters and the readers. :P

“And spiders. Though come to think of it, I don’t like spiders either. And I really don’t like going to the dentist. Something about all those teeth going chitt-chitt all the time just gives me nightmares.”

Yeah Sweetie Belle! I hope you feel really good about making that joke/reference when your mutliverse self is experiencing unbridled (heh) terror at the thing that's been haunting her at night:
http://www.fimfiction.net/story/294748/chitt-chitt

I like your references in this story :)

Apple Bloom groaned. “How in the blazes does Princess Twilight find her way around here? It’s like some kind of factory.”
“Where all your fears and horrors come true,” Scootaloo muttered.
“What’s that, Scoots?”
“Nothing.”

Scootaloo, you know not what you say O.o [Rainbow Factory]

“Now that’s the funniest-looking monster Ah can think of. No fur? Beady eyes? Small teeth?” She chuckled.
That ended just as soon as Scootaloo said, “That eats the flesh of other animals.”
Silence filled the room.
“Wh-What?” A nervous Sweetie Belle asked.

I bet carnivores are terrifying to these herbivores. Nice spin on that!

Gulping, Scootaloo read a passage, “Using their talon-like appendages, the two-leggers fashion crude devices to hunt and kill animals, usually of the four-legged or winged variety. They then take them back to their homes where the bodies are butchered, drained of blood, and skinned before cut up into edible pieces prior to consumption. The remnants of these poor, defenseless animals are then served to their children, allowing them to increase their numbers and multiply to the point where they’ve overrun their world. I fear that should these carnivorous bipeds ever find a way into Equestria…”

Well if you put it THAT WAY, then wow, humans really are pretty terrifying. Unless we're talking about two-legged dragons :P

Sweetie Belle screamed and backed into the stairs, causing Scootaloo to lose her footing and come crashing down atop her friends. Huddled in a frightened ball, the Cutie Mark Crusaders heard something approaching them. From the dim light that seeped in through the hallway, they spotted a shadow that peeled off from the darkness. It moved not on four legs, but two. Its arms, if that’s what they were, were longer than its torso, swinging in wide arcs that ended in four, razor sharp claws. The creature moved deliberately toward the fillies, gawking at them with its beady, glowing eyes. Opening its mouth, it’s wide mouth, they caught the glint of light off its rows of sharp teeth.

Spike! :D I honestly knew it was him the moment that description started. But it was still wonderful, nonetheless :)

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I really enjoyed this story! The comedy was great, and the bits of creepiness made it work wonders. The references were good too (and I'm sure I missed quite a few of them). I like seeing the CMC have fun together. It's inspiring to see their friendship and you did a fantastic job with the banter back and forth.

Fav, liked and commented! Great story!

7363631 So you did catch the reference to my now story. :yay: And you found "Rainbow Factory" as well. I made reference to several other grim darks in this story. Can you find them all? :rainbowhuh:

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Hah! I know there's a NIghtmare Moon grimdark references, but I don't recall the story. I've been a brony since spring 2011, but I didn't get into grimdarks until recently :)

7363731 If you look at my list Dark stories, you might find out the grim darks I am referring to. They all gave me nightmares.

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NICE! I look forward to it. I'm writing the extended review for "Off the Road" right now. What a nightmare! :D

I laughed at the end when Spike turned out to be the one walking around :rainbowlaugh: P.S spooky scary humans!!!!!

7364128 The premise of the story is you have nothing to fear but fear itself...or the fears you make up in your mind. As the CMC have never seen humans before, it's only fitting that Twilight's description of them would have them them conjuring morbid depictions of the two-legged carnivores. Besides, Spike should get a little payback for all the crap he's put through.

7364152 Of course. Sometimes the scariest shit is merely a product of our minds

Wait... but I read the trees are screaming multiple times long ago, so where is the reference to it? I know that thing very well, but I didn't find a reference to it in here.

Also, my mind can start playing music at the drop of a hat, and of course, Wooden Toaster's Pegasus Device song started playing around the time I got to the reference to it.

7366433 Okay, I didn't make reference to all of the Dark stories. But if you read them, you'll figure out which ones I'm referring to.

Fun! You tricked me for a bit there, you know: what with the Equestria Girls series, one would think Twilight wouldn't describe humans in such terms, and I thought maybe we were supposed to think it was humans but it was actually something else, but then it turned into a prank. :pinkiehappy:

I never knew humans were so scary...

7941114 We all fear what we dont understand. The CMC learned that the hard way. Thanks for commenting.

7973536 Yeah, it's nice and spooky!

Holy fucking shit I know for a fact that cover art is going to give me fuckin nightmares for fuckin weeks jesus fucking christ

8252895 Nothing's scarier than the imagination. :scoot angel:

References I caught off the top of my head:
Reference to Chitt-Chitt
Reference to Please Open The Door
Reference to Rainbow Factory

I think the Nightmare Moon thing was a reference, and possibly the whole Boogey Mare thing, but I'm still looking for all the good grimdarks I can find.

Up next: WHITE

8406863
Not bad. Though the BoogeyMare is a reference to one of my absolute favorite MLP Grimdarks.

Thanks for reviewing!

8407105
Really? Care to link it?

Also, my absolute favorite Dark fic is Please Open The Door. The atmosphere was fantastic, the sense that they could have been real(although, I think only visitor two really was,) was great for questioning morals and putting yourself into AJs shoes, and the twist at the end was great. I find my mind wandering at times, like.. Did Applebloom think AJ was a changeling in her final moments? I mean, Applejack DID ask her "Do you love me?" right before she killed her.

Apologies for this weird post. Sleep deprived atm.

Do you mind linking the Boogey Mare story?

“Guys!” Scootaloo was on her stomach now.

Do you mean Sweetie Belle? :moustache:

Opening its mouth, it’s wide mouth, they caught the glint of light off its rows of sharp teeth.

*its :moustache:

“That east the flesh of other animals.”

*eats :moustache:

That damn picture is the stuff of nightmares...I'm gonna see the cover art for this story in My dreams.

“Something about all those teeth going chitt-chitt all the time just gives me nightmares.”

Me: Heheheheheheheheh. That one was a good story, too.

“Where all your fears and horrors come true,” Scootaloo muttered.

You're on a roll!

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Good catch. How many more king find? :raritystarry:

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Found a few more, then realized I should give others a chance to find them (if they're like me, they look at comments to gauge a story before reading sometimes).

I appreciate the detail in the description of humans as these (unintentionally) horrific creatures, though I feel like it went too quickly into disturbing territory. A little more buildup of gradually more unsettling details would boost the scare factor a lot.

Either way, good work!

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