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Harmony Split

Love has no desire but to fulfill itself. To melt and be like a running brook that sings its melody to the night. To wake at dawn with a winged heart and give thanks for another day of loving

Comments ( 21 )

A downvote exactly 1 minute after the story got posted.
Congratulations dear sir/ma'am.
You are a dick.:twilightsmile:

7042595 There are some asstards out there who will go and downvote every clopfic that they see. :twilightoops:

Still annoys and hurts if you write a story for everypony to enjoy

This was cute Tavi, nicely done.


Thanks. I tried to keep the blood and biting away this time:twilightsmile:

I actually like that unique aspect of your thestrals.

As Midnight bit harder, her fangs penetrating her skin, she came harder than she could ever remember.

And then Celestia was a vampire fruit bat. :rainbowlaugh:

dam that was nice

*Mouth hangs open after reading the description*
Kudos for such a vivid plot! Was an amazing read!

Maybe :ajsmug:
Glad u liked it :twilightsmile:

This actually was a very hot lesbian scene. Thank you!

Great story!

I already enjoyed the prequel, and this one is a worthy successor!

One question:
What happened to the Solar Guards, which are originally supposed to guard Celestia's door?
Did Luna somehow 'convince' them to leave their post?

Glad you liked it.
Hmm that, will stay the thestrals secret:pinkiecrazy:
Your welcome^^

Short, sweet, to the point, and cloppable. A solid 7/10!

Midnight the thestral.
now i've heard that before.

short trust with her hips


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I really did not like the original story, but this was pretty surprising, not to mention decently written. :) So thanks for making this a pleasant experience!

oops, sry missed that.
Glad you liked it. :twilightsmile:

Not bad, not bad. I could have done without the head-hopping POV, especially at certain points like where it says Luna thought something and then she goes on to say what she thought... But otherwise, this was quite nice, and I even enjoy the dig at the original's lack of consent. The clop itself was pretty well handled, though I personally could have done with a little more body exploration and slowing down of them stripping off their armor, along with a little less wingplay (which I don't find erotic at all) ... but then again, different strokes for different folks. (Really, though... so much wingplay and no hornplay? Come on!) Oh, and in the final part of the clop (with the strapon), I was a bit confused about how the other two bat ponies were laying.

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Thank you!
Well, I simply love wings! Not so much into horns :twilightsheepish:
I noticed for myself that I went pretty fast on some spots why I slowed down on others.
But hey, I'm not the best in writing and I'm proud I made it that far^^

For the position...

Mhh Dream was on her back, marehood towards Celestia.
Strawberry was placed on Dream, belly to belly and her marehood also towards Celestia, able to lick and pleasure both! :trollestia:

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