LT: Titles and Gifts

TLT: Night's Past
MLP: FiM
Romance
After being teased by day guards, a bat pony recruit seeks for answers about the origins of bat ponies
Alt. Universe
Luna
OC
Bat Pony
Royal Guard
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DuDisms

DuDisms #1 · Nov 24th, 2015 · 4 · ·

Aww. Such an adorable ending. Here's to the happy couple! *raises beer*

-Two hours later-
Why is the ceiling on the door?

Twidashforever

Twidashforever #2 · Nov 24th, 2015 · · ·

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Sign of a good night!

DuDisms

DuDisms #3 · Nov 25th, 2015 · 2 · ·

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Ahh. Makes sense.
(I've actually haven't drank any alcohol, I just have friends who love the stuff.)

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Harmony Split #4 · Nov 25th, 2015 · 2 · ·

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And we're not done with Night Watch and Blue Moon at all^^

Chapter 13

Chapter 13 #5 · Nov 26th, 2015 · 1 · ·

Hmm…

Hmm!!!

Whelp, I'm conflicted.

As a story, it seems troped to all hell and highly OP/Author-Ex-Machina. Though, it fills the "clop-with-plot" role quite nicely, I must admit. It feels more like a story that you threw clop into, rather then the latter.

Now, as much as the story was meh and pushed all of my wrong buttons, it was well written. Your grammar was good. You're vocabulary and sentence structure were advanced, to say the least. And your general writing style flowed nicely. I actually managed to push through and read this 'til the end because of that fact. Not the greatest fan of the storyline, but the writing and style kept me entertained and invested enough to see it through.

All-in-all, I feel like this was a personal, fantasy story, rather then one meant to entertain the masses. This is fine, and considering your writing is pronominal, I actually can't wait to check out your other published work.

I give the story a casual shrug, but I give you, the author, two thumbs up.

~ Neon Lights

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