Lyra's Monster

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Phantom_Eclipse

Phantom_Eclipse #1 · Dec 24th, 2015 · 1 · · Ch 01: From the Everfree ·

I am...intrigued so far. Like to see where this story goes. But it's too early for me to be passing judgment, definitely has a spot in my tracking folder though.

Heiryuu

Heiryuu #2 · Jan 31st, 2016 · 1 · · Ch 02: Hide 'n Seek's Over ·

Keep it up, its off to a pretty good start! I'll withhold all judgment until chapter 5

Ravvij

Ravvij #3 · Feb 1st, 2016 · · · Ch 02: Hide 'n Seek's Over ·

6891539 I'm actually pretty curious to know if there's anything missing from the story. I've often been told my stories need more detail and description.

NightmareKnight

NightmareKnight #4 · Feb 15th, 2016 · · · Ch 02: Hide 'n Seek's Over ·

Hm... quite a few spelling errors littering the chapters, but overall I enjoyed this. Would love to see this continued.

Ravvij

Ravvij #5 · Feb 15th, 2016 · · · Ch 02: Hide 'n Seek's Over ·

6939079 Thanks, I'm glad you enjoyed it! I'm trying to get together a group of editors to help with this story. The second chapter hasn't had a passing edit yet, it's my next thing to edit. I'm not entirely sure I'm going to keep everything that's happened in there, but it's a nice guide.

blankanon

blankanon #6 · Feb 16th, 2016 · 1 · · Ch 02: Hide 'n Seek's Over ·

I haven'the read the story yet but I do want to become an editor for this story. And once I read this I'll give you some feedback.

Ravvij

Ravvij #7 · Apr 4th, 2018 · · · Ch 02: Hide 'n Seek's Over ·

Okay, so, I'm curious. Do any of you think I should change the "monster" in this story? I mean, I love the edgy stuff, but this seems like a deadend story if I don't alter him to be a bit more normal and less edge-lord-y.

leaderofstars