Princess Celestia dispatches the Mane Six into the Everfree Forest to recover a meteorite. What happens when vicious, dangerous aliens suddenly land in the peaceful land of Equestria? Part II: The past of the aliens is explored. New relationships blossom, old relationships sink, a vendetta is settled, and friendship is thicker than blood. Part III: Reports of missing ponies concerns the regal sisters, reports of strange activity in the Everfree gets Twilight's attention. What is Darqlon up to? The denouement approaches!
Simple enough initial chapter: straight forward and easy to read, didn't see any grammatical errors but then again I did read this at 1 am. I don't generally read anything that crosses over with humans but it caught my attention and I felt like reading something new. I'll come back to see if anything interesting comes of this.
Is this a crossover?
6557654 No it is not a cross over. The sequel will be... this one happens in season five.
6557654 You bring up a good point. I didn't put a crossover tag because the characters are all from original stories of mine. But should I put a crossover tag? I think I will, just to be on the safe side. The sequel will be a crossover and alternate universeif there is a sequel. What I might end up doing is keep adding parts to the story and updating the description.
Dude, put this in some groups so that it'll get more readers.
6616449 I'm done for now. Busy with work and life.
6868931 Do you still think it is a lie?
This story shows promise you get 6 out of 5 mustaches!
Jesus it is a wasteland down here helloooooooooooo?hellooooooooo?helloooooooo?hellooooooooo?
Wow good chapter!
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7083364 Thank you! I am thrilled by your enthusiasm and thanks for the staches, comrade.
id give this 7 out of 10
great work btw!
7163552 Thank you very much.
......wakey wakey eggs and bacy
7423170 Sounds good right about now.
7423216 lol
Awfully forward aint he?
7423541 Yup.
So......Christy is pretty much burnt chicken huh?
7424384 For the time being.
wow ........tias being a bitch hope thing with grey turn out better
by the way what is this a crossover of ? im......not familiar with this so far
by the way what other fics you working on ?
7427172 It is a crossover of my oc universe. In my stories tab you should see all the ones I am working on. I am working on a oneshot right now, but it is taking longer than I thought. New ideas keep popping up in my head and I write it in, then I dislike them, and have to start over.
7424384 DIE FUCK DIE
7083213 haha!!!! i know!
Gonna have to leave a dislike. Unoriginal premise, bland characterization, and the OCs weren't very likeable.
7446707 Thank you. I thought so, as well.
7446707 I shouldn't have rushed it.
How do you pronounce Darqlon?
7855955 Dark - lawn
lol
Dawww
7889922 I'm glad you like it.