Absolutely amazing! And props to the artist who drew that awesome picture in the end! I love this story and can't wait for sequel!

Say for the poor choice of wording and the slew of gramatical errors, among other smaller things, I liked it. Not sure I like how easy the Cakes took the news though. Pinkie seemed to have more of a motherly atitude for the situation than the Cakes did. And by situation, I mean Pumpkin being called a devil and the doctors' choice of treatment. Also, Pumpkin's change of heart right at the very end like that seemed a bit extreme. All I'm saying is that it stretches plausibility a bit. That's just me though

Looking forward to what you have in store for the future. If you ever want a proofreader, just let me know and I will be happy to try and lend a hand

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I understand everything you mean by all of that and maybe you're right; maybe I'll change some of the worddings of the parents to make them seem more passionate about the situation.
But the end part, how Pumpkin was acting, that was a slight part of her conscious sane side showing from Pinkie kind strong words (that side only appeared for a minute); she knew what happen but also knew that she couldn't control her other side around Pinkie; she is the emotional source of her sudden insanity after all.
7 years later sequel coming soon... maybe at the end of the week.

I made changes to the final chapter of my first story to make the Cakes sound more desperate for their child; and also the last scene so it will definitively show a good reason of how long Pumpkin's sanity recovery will take. Thinks it seems better?

818035

The changes you made were really good. Definitely brought out the emotion a lot better. Good job

I saw that your other story had a pre qual, so this will be interesting.

832635
It's okay, fan fics like that can make us feel that way towards characters... especially when it's done a lot.
But hey, I'm good with it.

831452
Oh... it will...

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I am unshure about how strong Pumpkin's magic was. I have some questions about how a one year old can know how to kill, but whitout that we wuld not have this story. Also I see that grammar wuld need some training in some places, but I need that too. It was somewhat interesting if I don't take in the flaws. And, well saying there title before ther names in the narration is a bit unneeded. We wuld not realy be here if we did not know there elements. It will be fun to read the sequil. Never reas a fiction whit Pound and Pumpkin not as babys before. And that dream, never thougt I wuld read Pinkamina be the one to be cut up.

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I might have exaggerated a bit on Pumpkin's magic fact, but at least I made it make sense; plus it's the fact that her disorder is causing that side of her to come out; despite her being 1yr. old.
I have also seen other stories where Pinkie was caught in a violent situation, it's just this time it's Pumpkin; strange, I know.

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Well, it is a change atleast. And I hope I wuld not been taken into that wing for my mental problems...

Wow nice story, sad that little filly got mad etc but that overpowering Twilight was little uh you know what i mean

837399 is that a picture at the end of the chapter becauce i cant see it

certainly one of the creepiest stories involving Pinkie I have read, and I have read Cupcakes.

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If you continue, just wait until you read part three... and part four; it gets a bit creepier

3608812
Doesn't look like an anime I'd watch.

See? I told you, I freaking told you.

3608842 I find that funny seeing as you wrote this, I don't know why.

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Yeah I know; but for me, reading about bloody violence and watching it are two different experiences in my case.