723977 Actually I meant that the strongest content of violence was going to be a dream; it's just that outside the dream it won't go as far as Pumpkin will want it; but there is still some violence left. She is attempting one more try, and a certain sibling is going to get hurt out of Pumpkin's frustration. Prepare for a epic showdown! As far as the bold lettering goes, that's when emphasize on something.
I'm pretty sure "affect" should have been "effect"
Other than that and minor things, mostly personal gripes, still a good read. I'm still scratching my head at the gummy thing though. But that's just one of the personal things I had. Looking forward to seeing what's next
*GASP* what could pumpkin be planning!.... And what are you hinting at With the bold lettering...
The story is going great! Can't wait for the next chapter!!!
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Actually I meant that the strongest content of violence was going to be a dream; it's just that outside the dream it won't go as far as Pumpkin will want it; but there is still some violence left. She is attempting one more try, and a certain sibling is going to get hurt out of Pumpkin's frustration.
Prepare for a epic showdown!
As far as the bold lettering goes, that's when emphasize on something.
I'm pretty sure "affect" should have been "effect"
Other than that and minor things, mostly personal gripes, still a good read. I'm still scratching my head at the gummy thing though. But that's just one of the personal things I had. Looking forward to seeing what's next