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Harms Way


Brony, Gamer, Titanic Enthusiast, Bowler, and Admirer of Sunset Shimmer and Adagio Dazzle

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You never cease to amaze me with your work my friend. :twilightsmile:

Oh celestia this story was uploaded just as i declare EQ Dashie my waifu :rainbowkiss:

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Perfect timing then lol :rainbowlaugh:

Meh, not a fan of annal, but still well writen.

P.S. I just realised I'm not following you. Go figure.

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Well, I appreciate the follow very much, my friend. :twilightsmile:

OK, you got Rarity to turn in her V-card,:raritystarry: but not Rainbow Dash?:rainbowhuh:

Great story, anyway. That just leaves Pinkie Pie and Applejack.

Nice, can't wait for the next story.

P.s. Idk if voting is up at the moment but I vote for twilight next.
:twilightoops:what!?!:twilightangry2:
Opps, gtg before she turns me into a frog or something lol
get back here you @$$#0//!!!

Ok, I'm not gonna lie, that was hot:rainbowkiss:

"Our first workout team..." Ms. Harshwinny says before pulling. "Is Lyra and... Bon Bon."

Well.... that's almost too much of a co-incidence to be called one.

"Anon..." Ms. Harshwinny says. "Your partner will be... Bulk Biceps."

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Oh I am having faaaaaar too much fun with this story. :rainbowlaugh:

You gulp while imagining how intense of a workout he does.

I guess that leaves you with Ms. Dash as your workout partner.

Danm. Hot, oily, gay sex with a dude that takes steroids 18 times a day would have been far more interesting.
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"Anon... is it?"

Things like this always distract me from the story.
FimFiction should add an ability to change any instance of the word 'Anon' to whatever you choose. (I assume that the point of things like this is immersion.)

She starts walking for the door leading out to the little hallway. "You gonna come?"

Oh-hohooho, yes he will.

It's completely dripping with her saliva as she turns around and gets down on her hands, leaving her ass to face you. "No way!" You think as she moves her ass in a seductive fashion. "She seriously wants me to give her anal?!"

Ahhhh, shit.
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I love these type of stories. It was a good read and I enjoyed every second of it. being a huge RD fan, I could relate to my own, secretes. ;)

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I'm glad you guys enjoyed the story! :twilightsmile: I put a lot of thought and work into this one and I'm glad to see that it was worth it.

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You guys are awesome! :rainbowdetermined2: I'm glad you enjoyed this story.

Found this one being featured and I absolutely enjoyed it. #Favorite

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Thank you and thanks for the fave too! :rainbowdetermined2:

So the guy and Rainbow become a couple and Lightning gets the strongest team partner in Bulk a few weeks later, everyone wins!

Great job on another terrific story. :rainbowdetermined2:

Excellent story! :pinkiehappy: Their last little act of 'fun' caught me a bit of guard, but it was still pretty damn hot.

Can't wait for the next one! :twilightsmile:

Are you going to do the other eq girls still waiting for that dazzling story but i can wait

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You mean A New Beginning? That next chapter is being planned as you read this.

6453488 oh that one ? I once did a blog for a fetish story and someone replyed saying it was a good idea but im not sure if they planed on using it or ot and i dont remember who it was it was mostly a feet fetish story and between you and me that part with dashies feet was hot:moustache:

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Ah yes, that story. Don't worry. I'm still planning on making it, my friend. :twilightsmile:

And also, thanks. :raritywink:

"I'll go see if I can find some paper and a pen in Coach Spitfire's office."

Spitfire is actually a student, along with what appears to be the rest of the Wonderbolts. Somewhat unsurprisingly, they seem to be the 'Canterlot Wondercolts' footie team that everyone keeps harping on about but is never actually seen outside of the comics.

And clop is featured!:rainbowlaugh:

Again, not complaining though.:twilightsmile:

That reaction on your face when I was grinding my ass against you was pretty epic."

NAAAAAAAAAHHHHHHHH, MATE!

Not the reaction you expected wasn't it?

Oh, forgot something, have a like.:moustache:

and...

DAAT ASS!

CALLED IT!

This Anon is rather cryptic, not much to him, still he needs a name.... Not athletic not, overly anyway, hormone issues leading to warmth in places, hmmmm gonna say he is more of a carpenter type, good in shop class, hence the name "Woody"

I just sit back and enjoy this. Then I will fave the crap out of it.

Just read the full series. They're... decent. There's a consistent grammatical error about using a period instead of a comma on a dialogue sentence with a speaker tag at the end, though, and that drove me up the wall. I more or less skimmed the actual sex part as well, as I don't find myself super into reading about direct coitus (I prefer the characters to undress and perhaps gently massage each other a bit, but stop short of actual sex). I can say with certainty that their bodies need way more detail, though. Fluttershy's characterization felt a bit off near the end of hers (I can imagine her stripping for someone she likes, but she would almost certainly be a bit nervous about it-your portrayal is inaccurate to her character). Overall, I enjoyed them a bit, but I'm not particularly inclined to stick around for Pinkie's either.

Also... Anon? That's a cop-out name for bland characters. You can do better than that.

Awwwww.....:fluttershyouch:

I dislike reading a great story, only to end with anal, but no vaginal...

Rainbow's quite the kinky one:rainbowwild:

A strong entry, Rainbow Dash felt very authentic :twilightsmile: Felt like the two characters did have a bond prior to and throughout the story, and that can be quite difficult to accomplish given the length of these stories :eeyup:

Ummmm... One question.
Is this compilation gonna end with the mane 6 and sunset, or are there plans to continue it with side characters?

Also, awesome job.

6453488 NICE great story harms you the man I like how dash was a hard girl for anon to get but in the end... HE GOT DAT ASS :moustache: kinda like how this girl name marlyin is around me :fluttershysad:

6455490 You know, I was just wondering that too.

I feel like that note at the end suggest a sequel in terms of lightning dust x bulk.:duck:

"That's fine." Ms. Harshwinny replies. "Just make sure the equipment you use is wiped off afterwards."

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This is gonna be some kinky shit isn't it? :duck:

"Well, I guess your set will have to wait for next time." She says, pointing her finger over to the clock after setting the bar back on the rack. "We gotta get going."
"Alright." You reply. You and Rainbow then spend the next minute or so wiping off the bar that she used. "Well, I guess I'll see ya tomorrow."

Oh come on! :facehoof: :raritydespair:

Rarity's was pretty good. Maybe that's because it set the standard for your other stories but the following ones just felt like pale copies. Same scenarios, same positions, and about the same ending. Rainbow comes in and is now the best out of them. Made longer with different positions, a better set up that wasn't awkward, an ending that felt satisfying beyond measure, and...well it's Rainbow Dash. Come on. All around awesome and I look forward to your next clop fic in the series.

Rarity's was pretty good. Maybe that's because it set the standard for your other stories but the following ones just felt like pale copies. Same scenarios, same positions, and about the same ending. Rainbow comes in and is now the best out of them. Made longer with different positions, a better set up that wasn't awkward, an ending that felt satisfying beyond measure, and...well it's Rainbow Dash. Come on. All around awesome and I look forward to your next clop fic in the series.

I lerved it! :pinkiehappy: Although moar "A New Beginning" plz.

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