Bundle without joy
Canterlot was bustling as it was every sunny day. The gentle breeze carried the laughter of young ponies as they headed to school. The sun was warm but not too warm with pretty white, fluffy clouds scattered here and there. It was a perfect day. All this only served to enlighten the mood of a Pegasus couple who were flying in from Cloudsdale. They wove patterns in the clouds like young foals who had just learned to fly. The male, a dark blue Pegasus with red hair looked completely beside himself as he spun through the soft cloud.
The female, a yellow pony with white hair was trying to do the same but was a bit sloppy in her excitement.
"Oh, I am so excited!" She squealed, not for the first time. "We finally get to see if we're having a boy or a girl!"
"Don't overdo it." The stallion said coming to fly next to her. "You don't want to hurt yourself while you’re pregnant."
"Oh, I'm fine." She replied. "I'm just too excited! Our first foal and we finally get to see him or her! With the new technology that combines magic we can even see the color of our baby!" She exclaimed. "Oh, I am so excited! We can already start planning the color scheme for the baby room and we'll know that it matches! It was so worth it to come all the way to Canterlot!"
"There's the hospital!" Her husband said pointing downwards.
The mare dove straight for it leaving her husband trying to catch up. The mare didn't bother to land. She swooped in through the doors as an exiting group of ponies opened them. She skidded panting up to the front desk. "Yellow Rose and Storm here for an imaging of our baby."
The mare behind the desk looked at her through the bifocals on the end of her nose then checked the schedule. "Alright, you’re early but we're slow today so you'll probably get in pretty soon." She said as Storm caught up. "Take a seat and a nurse will come out and call you."
The pair scampered to a seat. The room was nearly empty but they still managed to annoy the others with their nonstop chatter as they guessed what color their first born would be. Perhaps that was why it only took a few minutes for them to be called.
"I think it will have my coat or maybe my grandmothers." Yellow Rose said.
"Those are more recessive color and none of the ponies in my family have it so it's not likely." Storm replied.
"But possible." Yellow Rose argued.
"But not very likely. It's more likely to be blue or black."
"Colors also mix too. Like how an offspring can be the color of a lighter colored parent but made darker from the other parent and even sometimes there are hidden genes that make a completely unexpected color."
"That's true but I hope for blue like me or black like my dad. Makes them look strong and-"
"Yellow Rose and Storm." A nurse called as she opened the door leading to the different medical rooms. The couple jumped up and scurried after her. They walked down the hall passing many rooms on the left and right. They could hear the chatter of ponies echoing from some of them. There was the occasional beeping of some machine. One door was open and they saw a colt in a jersey waring cast. There was the loud and upset voice of a young colt that was trying to convince a doctor and his mother that he really didn't need to get shots. The softer voices of his mother and doctor tried to explain to him how the short pains would make him better for a lifetime.
"We're here." The nurse said stopping and opening a door. She had no need to usher them in and another nurse took over while she went to call another pony. In short order Yellow Rose was laying back on a medical bed with her stomach covered in jell. The nurse took some blood for test before the doctor arrived. Yellow Rose could hardly sit still as they waited.
Soon enough the doctor came in, a unicorn because magic was needed to power the machine.
"Good morning. How are you we today?" He asked.
"Wonderful!" Yellow Rose replied straining to look at the machine even though they hadn’t even started yet. To her dismay when the doctor stopped the machine she could not see the screen. "Hey I can't see." She complained.
"Oh, sorry. You see when we do one of these scans for the first time we doctors check it first just in case there is an issue. Might be hard for the parents to see." The doctor explained.
"Issue?" Both expecting parents echoed with fear in their voice.
"Don't worry. That is rare. This in only a guideline we have to follow." The doctor replied. "Are you ready to start?"
"Yes!" Yellow Rose replied.
With a burst of his magic the machine lit up while the nurse moved a device over the mare's stomach. It only took a few moments for a complete image of the expected to form on the machine. The doctor studied the image for a moment that seemed so long while the couple watched him with anticipation and now a little bit of fear in the back of their minds but they dismissed it. Surely not their baby.
Then the doctor gave a deep, sad sigh. Fear filled Yellow Rose and Storm felt sick.
"No! You didn't find anything wrong! Tell me that you didn't find anything wrong!" Yellow Rose cried.
The doctor looked away from the screen and to the couple. "I am very sorry to say that your fetus has Anisoptergia."
"What!? What is Anisoptergia!?" Storm demanded.
"Anisoptergia means unequal wings. Its wings are unequal to what a normal Pegasus’s should be. Anisoptergia is a term used for a rare condition where the wings of a Pegasus are not fully developed. As a result they cannot fly."
"What!? Are you sure!? Maybe it's not that!" Yellow Rose exclaimed and tried to lunge up to see the screen but the nurse held her back.
"There is no mistaking it." The doctor replied. "When a Pegasus reaches twenty weeks in the womb their wings should be defined. Yours is past that and only has what is not much more than two little bumps with badly undersized bones."
Yellow Rose felt so numb on the outside but so pained on the inside. She could do nothing but cry and her husband could do nothing but hold her. The doctor gave them a few minutes and then walked out from behind the screen. "We can set you up for fetal termination before it reaches 24 weeks."
"Termination!" Storm exclaimed staring in shock at the doctor.
"But it's our first!" Yellow Rose cried.
"You will have more." The doctor replied. "It only takes nine months to develop another better Pegasus and this way it will not suffer. Also if the foal is not terminated it could pass on the defect to more generations making a line of suffering that could have been prevented."
"But....let me see the screen." Yellow Rose said with tears in her eyes.
The doctor shook his head. "I'm afraid that I must discourage that. It will only make it harder on you."
As they talked the screen was still on showing a curled up filly with the beginnings of a magenta mane and an orange coat twitching inside the womb of Yellow Rose.
A short time later after more discussion with the couple the doctor stepped out as the nurse set up an appointment with the couple.
"It is hard." He said to himself. "But it is kind. It's like that case years ago, what was it? Another female fetus of a Pegasus. Would have been cute with the blond mane and gray coat but it would have had a mental disorder. It never would have been like other ponies. It would have only suffered and been a burden to others.”
Not long before a white Unicorn and a yellow Earth pony would become somepony’s bundle of joy another bundle was thrown into a hospital’s bio waste bin.
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Story is well done however Stephen Hawking is a poor example as his disability did not manifest itself until he was grown.
6383353 He's still badly disabled though but still productive. The point is that born with or gained they deserve life and to be treated as a another valuable human being as well as capable of great accomplishments and living a good life. An ever sadder thing is that in this day in age where we have so much technology to better help them it is encouraged that they be culled.
I am pro-life, so I approve of the author's note.
6385345 Thank you. Please share it. I hope that it might save a life one day.
This is a really good story, especially for a first. It's simple, it gets to the point, and it's very clear and well written. I especially like the message that you are trying to convey. Great work.
6448728 Thank you. I have had practice writing before I came to FIMfiction. I was working on another story for my first but a disturbing exchange with a user I wrote this one instead. I wanted to lay out what the belief was and really did.
That was heartbreaking...good job...
6461178 Thank you. That belief breaks my heart.
Glad to see someone else who is passionate about the pro-life cause.
6509138 Me too.
I believe many people with disorders are rather successful. The creator of Pokemon, for god sakes, is Autistic!
6519976 Me too & even if they aren't their life should not be respected any less. No one can determine a life before it is lived. Everyone deserves a chance & a right to that chance.
6524924 Unless there is a sure way to prove that child would go through hell, then people don't deserve the chance at killing it.
6524936 There is now way to prove such. People with the worst have in life have been & have become the happiest & vice versa. Children whom you would think would have the best life setup can end up the most miserable & vice versa. This is the same for handicapped & non handicapped. They are no different than non handicapped in life.
6525151 I know. ^^`
In fact if your really pro abortion go to youtube and watch videos of babies born alive during abortions. If you can't stand to watch them struggle then you really don't believe in it.
6562870 I delete anything that can become a flame war. I will not have it trailing my stories.
6562878 not all doctors are professional & the idea that u should abort children for disability is a very real thing. His words are often the way they try to reason it. If you really believe that abortion is right go & watch videos of aborted children born alive. If u can't u really don't believe in its right.
If u know my mind can't change then why did u present arguments? It is the nature of people.
Let me rephrase that. If u want to state your opinion & can do so calmly then PM. I have no problems with people having different opinions but reserve my right to mine & to point out murder of infants. Nor do I waste time on those just throwing around outrage.
Oh, buddy, no. Deleting comments? You're reputation is not gonna last long here. Hell, some of those comments were on your side.
6566129 your right it is like gathering all your friends to bash something that you don't believe in. So is blocking. I am not taking this story down. Move on and know that you condone and promote the murder of babies. You can reason it all you want but that will never change.
6569426 Sorry can not stand a flame war.
6569446
You're not sorry. You just don't want to hear any disagreeing opinions.
EDIT: Thanks, Eldorado.
6569446 So (honest question) why are you writing stories that are so controversial in nature if you don't want to deal with controversy?
6569458 Funny thing to say when that guy calls in a mob to attack a story that disagrees with his. No I don't have a problem with other opinions, why do you think I told them to PM me. I am not having a flame war under my story and that is that.
6569470
Some of those comments were legitimate criticisms of your work. Again, you just don't want to hear others opinions when they don't praise your work. Ive noticed that you've left several other comments that only said good things about it.
6569497 They said good things about pro-life not starting an argument about it. The comments I deleted before this last round had nothing to criticizing my writing but arguments about abortion. If I accidently deleted some that only had to do with the writing which I really doubt I'm sorry. Nor were any of them calm and simply wanting to discuss the matter that too is fine. That is way I'm leaving your comments and taking the time to reply. Angry insult and in your face is another matter.
You accuse me of not wanting other opinions but no criticism of someone who doesn't even have to look at the story once he realizes what it is calling in all of his friends to come bash. That is someone who can't even stand for someone else's ideas to exist.
Good times ahead.
Oh, really?
There's also this.
Many of them were calm and were willing to discuss the issue. But, of course to you, dissenting opinion = flame war, gotta censor!
Also, there's the fact that you just straight up lie. You say that the anti-abortion opinion is not yours, yet you vehemently strike out against those who don't agree. From your author's note to how you talk with commentors, it's fucking obvious that not only do you have the same views as the story, you also want to make them blatantly known.
You call people baby murderers and condoners of infant death and you somehow don't expect people to react to that?
6569528
Indeed.
6569497
6569520 I'm afraid the author is saying the thing that is not. This is what I actually said:
Tell me where that says anything about abortion, pro or con. That was a criticism of your writing. If you want to write a pro-life fic, go ahead. The comments you kept suggest that it would have an audience. In order for it to succeed, it would have to be subtle. The message would have to take a back seat to the story. You'd have to make us care about the characters. It wouldn't have a preachy author's note: you'd know that the fic could stand on its own two feet.
The tags are wrong. "Tragedy" does not go with "slice of life." Note FAQ.
And I'd suggest not implying that Scootaloo was the aborted fetus. It's really gross and upsetting, not to mention that if you still insist on doing this, you must use the AU tag, for obvious reasons.
EDIT: Deleting this will do no good. I have been taking screencaps.
And FYI, I screencapped this. I'll make sure to PM it you if you do delete this.
That's absolute bullshit and you know it. I only said that your story wasn't subtle.
Liar.
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Though 6569468 has a good point. FIM may be a brony web sight, but I find there are many here who don't really follow the messages of the show or choice to ignore certain once. I'm going to like an favorite your story to support your work and being brave. I myself had to stop debating this issue on FiM because it was cause me problems. The SJW on this site are very malicious and will troll/spam/mock anyone that says anything they find counter to there feelings.
The key is to figure out who's being a but-hurt winy scrub and who's actually giving you good constructive criticism. And as a premature baby, I know what it like to have a disabilities, but I fought and I feel I have a bright future ahead of me. I love my Mom and Dad for all the scarifies they made to help me get to my final year of Collage (people told her I would never make it that far.) Well guess what, those people were wrong.
#AllLivesMatter
There are those, unfortunately, who see it as their life's great duty to silence anyone who dares to challenge their worldview -- typically a far-left, Marxist worldview which puts little value on individual lives & freedom. They accomplish this by piling on people who don't agree with them, especially in the creative & social spheres, bullying them until they give up and stop saying what they believe.
This is a well written piece, although I think you could have done more with the end, especially mentioning things like the doctor not allowing them to see the screen (this is common with abortion providers, as they realize mothers who see their ultrascan are less likely to abort). The pacing was, in my opinion, less than ideal and you could have stretched it a little further.
However, do not give up and keep sharing your views and your stories. You aren't alone in your beliefs and your literary skill is very good.