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While Nightmare Moon is gone along with the threat of Eternal Night, the essence of the Nightmare still exists after the Elements of Harmony banished it from Princess Luna.

Having had a year to plan, it has now turned its sights toward what it sees as the weakest of the Elements' bearers.

A storm is brewing...

Chapters (11)
Comments ( 50 )

AAAAAAAAAAWWWWWWWWWWWWWEEEEEEEEEEEEEEESSSSSSSSSSSSOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOMMMMMMMMMMEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEE!!!!!!111!!!!1!!!!!!!one!!1! That's all I can say to this story so far TDarkchylde. But srsly that's some good stuff that you don't find everywhere(maybe I'm wrong maybe not) hope to see more in the future. Oh and always look behiind you...never know when a car comes speedin' from the side:pinkiecrazy:. Ohterwise I wish a good day/night/evening or whatever.:moustache:

this story is dark and awesome and YAY!! :pinkiecrazy::pinkiegasp::pinkiesad2::pinkiehappy::flutterrage::fluttercry::ajsmug::applecry:

Sounds exciting im looking forward to reading it :heart:

Good so far, following :) :twilightsheepish:


Please please please update next chapter :raritycry:

Thanks so far for the comments. It's good to see that trying to avoid some of the normal grimdark staples is paying off so far. :twilightsmile:

Keep them coming.

Dr Lizardo Voice: Laugh while you can, wingless Pegasus!

Exciting stuff please do keep going :heart:

Holy wow. 2000 views so far. Unbelievable. Either I did something right for once, or 2000 bronies are silently joking about how much my writing sucks. :rainbowlaugh:

One minor quibble with this chapter, Spike kinda just appeared out of nowhere despite not appearing in Ch. 5 or 6 or most of 7 then randomly finds the book needed, his character seems poorly integrated in this particular instance. Overall I'm enjoying the story.

I know, I know. To be honest, he feels that way in the show unless the episode is Spike-centric.
I'll probably shoehorn a mention of where he went someplace.

Well, stop talking to use and get the last chapter finished already!!!

The next one won't be the last. You'll know when it's the last. :raritywink:

It'll hopefully be up either tonight or tomorrow morning assuming RL errands don't get in the way.

Nice! Cant wait for next chapter :pinkiehappy:

:pinkiehappy:This is a brain explodingly good fic. Kept me hooked all the way through so far.

Keeps getting better and better... So hurry and finish it already! All this buildup is making me anxious for the final showdown.

Heh...discords loose again...nice ending...I loved this story...hope to see more.

8578 Actually, the epilogue drops the reader right into the start of Season 2.

YES!!!!!! :pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy:

I've been waiting a long time to see how this would end. You have a lot of talent, and I would love more fics from you. I'll be watching you!

That was pretty good, I like how the nightmare for yours twists the desires of each individually instead of being a sentient parasite. Made for an interesting antagonist where Dash was concerned. Being a weather pony and having a life building storms and then being forced to create the worst one imaginable while not directly caring what it does to anyone else was a nice touch. Not really malevolent but certainly not benevolent. True indifference is what made this story for me. Not often you have a story with an antagonist that doesn't care one way or another.

well thats just great. the ending was going well until the COTTON CANDY CLOUDS OF CHOCOLATE MILK DOOM arrived. oh well, great story bro.

Standing Sonic Rainboom ftw! :heart: Well done on writing an excellent story it was great to read and your updates were done pleasantly fast :rainbowkiss:

Great ending good sir. 5/5! :pinkiehappy:

8624 Blame the TV show's writers for that one.
8644 Ah... uhm... not one of those. But thanks anyway. :twilightblush:

Hop this story has a happy ending...


hope this is true and answers my question if the ending is happy.

If so i just might read it :trollestia:


I just want to say that i loved your story.
Your a very good writer keep it up.

I really think i might hop on the turn a seriously good pony into a nightmare fusion :heart:


Awesome story and thankyou for writing, I had a great time reading it.(And I love how you point out your view on what grimdark is, and I agree, grimdark in the basic sense is more about dramtic suspense/irony and less about the gore and horror aspect.(Though ofcourse some stories use the gore and horror to make the world darker and create a stronger feel of suspence)

I think you did fine overall, I was hooked the whole story throughout and most of all when they had the (Twisted reality) mindsets toward the end, I love that idea.

Only thing I wonder, where did the password come from? I was confused why AJ knew, was it mentioned earlier and I just missed it?

Why does this remind me of the Anti-spirals in Gurren Lagann minus the blissful trick that Viral had?...

:raritydespair:WHY RAINBOW WHY?!
Also, great story so far!:pinkiehappy:

Rainbow Dash: Astronaught. A pony barely alive. Gentelponies, we can rebuild her. We have the technology. We have the capability to make the world's first biotic pony. Rainbow Dash will be that pony. Better then she was before. Better, stronger, faster.



With that last line, I think this icon taks a new meaning

7963 That.... was perfect!!!:pinkiehappy::rainbowlaugh::yay::raritystarry:

AJ thought she knew because she felt she had done just that to Dash before the transformation happened. In-story, it was a shot in the dark that just made sense.

so awsome:rainbowkiss:

Ho...ly...@%&#. This is epic! :yay:

Evil Rainbow Dash would be quite a wonderful thing to behold. This is beyond 20% cooler! :raritystarry:

It's nightmare rainboom

This is REALLY good,I love the picture as well for the story :3.Mind sending me a link to it?

This should be a my little pony movie. I LOVED IT!!!:heart:

Needs some fanart of hoodie Dash wielding the lead pipe.

Great story with a great ending. 5 stars and 2 thumbs up.

this story is just excellent, all that happened wonderfull, and then those tests, so cruel so evil so painfull, i mean Fluttershy almost forced to kill her beloved animals, Rarity almost becoming a prostitute, and Twilight having having in a way the same experience as rainbow dash only worse with the betrayal from her parents, even though Scootaloos was pretty weak and obvious what would happen, but still, this story is FANTASTIC

Very good work love how you work the personalitis and situation, thanks for sharing

Bravo loved the story.
One thing though, and no it's not criticism. You seemed to have predicted a lot of stuff that happens in one of the MLP idw comics only difference is that the nightmare goes after rarity. And she's smart enough to take her element of Harmony so they can't use it

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