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Something, something, something, dark side. Something, something, something, complete.


Coco Pommel arrives in Ponyville with a problem, and there's only one pony that can help: Fluttershy. Rarity and Fluttershy travel back with her to Manehattan to prepare for her fashion show.

This story is a gift for yellowstripedflutterbat whom I've been following since I first joined this site, and whom I wish would write more horse words.

Cover based on artwork by Daniel-SG (used with permission). Thanks to PoisonClaw, Enclave2277, Miss Spectrum, Bookish Delight, and the inimitable Phoebe for pre-reading the story and offering advice.

Chapters (2)
Comments ( 18 )

It's finally out! Yay! :yay:

Awwww this story is awesome!!! Five hearts for you! :heart: :heart: :heart: :heart: :heart:

Oh gosh it is June already, isn't it?

Probably way too late, but all of your notes in your last PM were fine by me.

Sorry I couldn't get back to you in time to get you to write a chapter 3,however. :raritywink:

6057299 Thanks for all your help with this. It will have at least one sequel — more likely, two.

I liked this story. Five out of five! :heart: :heart: :heart: :heart: :heart:

Decent story. I wish more had been done with the concept though. It's over too soon.

OMC I knew you were writing something like this but I had no idea it was for me!! THANK YOU SO MUCH it is amazing and adorable and exactly what I wanted for these three :heart::heart: I loved how Fluttershy agreed to model because Coco was Rarity's friend and therefore her friend too - that's so her c': (and of course Coco's puppy dog eyes, obviously what pony could resist that? XD) and Coco admiring Fluttershy's wing dexterousness, aaah~!! And Rarity was wonderful too, being supportive and organising everything while disguising any jealousy :raritywink:

"Nonsense, Fluttershy, it will all come flooding back to you once you get started." Rarity noticed Coco grimace slightly at the word 'flooding'. "Sorry — bad choice of words."

Smooooth, Rarity :rainbowlaugh:

And I loved the ending with Photo Finish - fatigue chic!! I could totally rock that :P Flutters falling asleep at the end was adorable and just wrapped up the fic really nicely - it felt like this could be an episode, you had the feel/tone of the show down so well :twilightsmile:

I really should stop rambling at you now lol but THIS MADE ME SO HAPPY AND THANK YOU AGAIN SO MUCH ...and yes I agree I really must write some horse words again soon :twilightsheepish:

6058626 No problem. It's just a little way to say thank you for the advice you gave me with some of my early stories. Peachy Pie's Very Special Somepony in particular was greatly improved by your input. By votes, if not by views, it is my most popular story. I think I've since internalized a lot of the writing advice you gave me, so a lot of my other more recent stories probably owe a lot to you too.

You're like my "writing Yoda", except taller, with smaller ears, and not as ancient. :pinkiesmile:

Still taking requests?

6061431 I don't really do requests per se. Sometimes somebody suggests an idea I find so interesting that I want to write it, but not often. yellowstripedflutterbat didn't request this story.

Aww, thanks! no problem at all, I'm really glad I could be useful at all, and it's well deserved cause that fic is awesome - almost as awesome as this one :raritywink:

XD Pleases me greatly, this does!

Hi! So...

I just posted a review of this on my blog, here.

Overall, I like it. I love the concept, and think there's a lot you could explore with it... but I also feel like there's things that could be made better. I hope you aren't offended!

Er, okay. That was abrupt, but not bad.

I just now saw this!! Very good!

I like where this is going. And there needs to be a spinoff with Spike looking after Fluttershy's Pets while they are in Manehatton.


A very good story idea with a nice execution, good job :twilightsmile:

This story was very cute and I loved it so much!

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