You are Fleur-de-Lis, a retired model who still hangs in her upper-class social circle. When Fancy Pants decides to host a large fashion show, you take the opportunity to invite Rarity. When she finally arrives in Canterlot, what do you have in store for her?
Author's note: This is my experiment into second-person fiction. It's a bit of a departure from my usual writing, but I hope you enjoy it. Many thanks to TheGentlemanCreeper for the inspiration of turning this concept to second-person, and to Coffeebean for the support.
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A Fleur de Lis fic. She doesn't get a lot of attention, does she?
Also, I noticed an error. "As so is everything else" -> correct to "and so is everything else." Other than that, looks fine so far.
Very interesting. From Fleur's point of view, no less. I shall track to see where this is going.
Tracked. I see plenty of potential here.
Fancy pants likes colts. Never saw that coming.
I've never read anything in second person before. It was strange at first, but I lost sight of it after a bit.
Anyway, well done.
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At any rate, it's fixed now.
OK, I swear I fixed that. I guess not.
And I agree: Fleur doesn't get a lot of attention. And, for reasons that I don't understand at all, there is not one single piece of Fleur X Rarity art that I could find.
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It's definitely not unheard of in the actual Real Life(TM) fashion industry. Then again, I like to think that everyone is bi. No matter what, I'm almost always at least half right.
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It's new for me to be writing in it. But I've also been reading a ton of second-person stuff from the Sensual Fiction General group, and I'm friends with some of those writers. But, I'm glad you liked it so far!
A massage therapist with a terrible accent? That wouldn't happen to be the same one from another 2nd pov fic with Spitfire would it? If not, it's a huge coincidence.
Anyway, this is interesting. I'll keep an eye on this.
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Yes, it is! Coffeebean is a good friend, and he basically gave me a blank check to throw in any of his characters into the background. Definitely an in-joke for the SFG crowd.
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Yes! I'm so glad I'm obsessed with these kinds of stories!
Seriously, that is a neat little thing.
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"Then again, I like to think that everyone is bi. No matter what, I'm almost always at least half right."
Unless they're asexual.
At any rate, this looks to be an interesting read - tracking!
I see potential, I see Fleur, I don't see much to make me anticipate the next chapter. I'll fave anyway, seems like it will be a nice read.
This is great! I love it! Can't wait to see where it goes next.
A very long time...
It has been
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