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I'm Jordan Kinsley, and I'm a relentless shipper. Send me a PM or leave a comment about my stories, I love getting feedback. Patreon!


You are Fleur-de-Lis, a retired model who still hangs in her upper-class social circle. When Fancy Pants decides to host a large fashion show, you take the opportunity to invite Rarity. When she finally arrives in Canterlot, what do you have in store for her?

Author's note: This is my experiment into second-person fiction. It's a bit of a departure from my usual writing, but I hope you enjoy it. Many thanks to TheGentlemanCreeper for the inspiration of turning this concept to second-person, and to Coffeebean for the support.

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Comments ( 14 )

A Fleur de Lis fic. She doesn't get a lot of attention, does she?

Also, I noticed an error. "As so is everything else" -> correct to "and so is everything else." Other than that, looks fine so far.

Very interesting. From Fleur's point of view, no less. I shall track to see where this is going. :pinkiehappy:

Tracked. I see plenty of potential here.

Fancy pants likes colts. Never saw that coming.

I've never read anything in second person before. It was strange at first, but I lost sight of it after a bit.

Anyway, well done.

OK, I swear I fixed that. I guess not. :applejackunsure: At any rate, it's fixed now.

And I agree: Fleur doesn't get a lot of attention. And, for reasons that I don't understand at all, there is not one single piece of Fleur X Rarity art that I could find.

It's definitely not unheard of in the actual Real Life(TM) fashion industry. Then again, I like to think that everyone is bi. No matter what, I'm almost always at least half right. :twilightsheepish:

It's new for me to be writing in it. But I've also been reading a ton of second-person stuff from the Sensual Fiction General group, and I'm friends with some of those writers. But, I'm glad you liked it so far!

A massage therapist with a terrible accent? That wouldn't happen to be the same one from another 2nd pov fic with Spitfire would it? If not, it's a huge coincidence.
Anyway, this is interesting. I'll keep an eye on this.

Yes, it is! Coffeebean is a good friend, and he basically gave me a blank check to throw in any of his characters into the background. Definitely an in-joke for the SFG crowd.

Yes! I'm so glad I'm obsessed with these kinds of stories! :rainbowlaugh:
Seriously, that is a neat little thing.

"Then again, I like to think that everyone is bi. No matter what, I'm almost always at least half right."
Unless they're asexual.

At any rate, this looks to be an interesting read - tracking!

I see potential, I see Fleur, I don't see much to make me anticipate the next chapter. I'll fave anyway, seems like it will be a nice read.

This is great! I love it! Can't wait to see where it goes next.

A very long time...

It has been


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